| Don't come to me [song]
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2006-07-03
Nice one! I do not know what part of the world you are in, but I have always thought that it was spelled 'chick' instead of chic? Maybe it is just me though.
I read this as if the words 'an' and 'my' were not there in the chorus. Just:
You're no one to me but ex
I said you're nothing to me but ex
But then again, thats just my little way of reading this. It had a lot of emotion packed into it and that always makes for good writing.
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| 8th of March (An Introspection)
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2006-03-17
I like it, it tells such a good tale and was put together quite well. I was a little long, but kept the readers interest.
Good job.
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| DON'T DAMN PUSH ME
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2006-03-03
Oh, yes. Doesnt everyone have these types of feelings at times. Two sides, like a coin. Very relatable write Liz. Something I could hear a mother saying to a child...or a boss saying to an employee, or a person saying to a sibling, friend or mate. Good vent.
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| Sometimes I feel I am the Rain
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2006-03-03
Aw, how sweet. And blessed is the person who is an inspiration behind this type of write. The word 'being' seemed to be a bit overused but for some reason it was easy to forget for the emotion of the write itself covered that up brilliantly. I had to distract myself from the emotion to catch that...it was sort of hard to do.
Such is the world of beautiful inspiration though.
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| Marked For Disappointment
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2006-02-24
This was a hard hitting feeling. Dissappointment and feeling that one is marked for it was what made it a very universal read. Good way of expressing that.
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| Enchantment of the first kiss (Valentine Special)
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2006-02-24
This was good. Very sensual in a loving way.
That he had me in his power, he knew,
Yet he held me as tender as dew,
Those lines just reek of true love. A well written piece.
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| Racism
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2006-02-24
You put a very universal twist on this theme. Made it feel like an understanding ode rather than just another rant and/or explanation on the subject.
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| Liberation of Self (Cyber Experience)
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2006-02-24
A very good sentiment. Almost (key word ALMOST) along the lines of being "preachy", but truthful nonetheless. Its almost as if it should be an anthem to those that claim to be or feel so alone that they claim to be so unique, but then its like a realization that uniqueness is shared by all, just as what you expressed here. Well done. I liked this write.
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| Snowflake dream
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2006-02-24
Nice poem. Kind of sad but in a strange way it was pretty uplifting. Sort of like the writer held this person up on a pedestal only to realize that they were just the same as others they have seen and/or encountered before. The snowflakes, they are all unique, but then when you step back and look at them, they truly are the same. Ever wonder how many of them it takes to cover a mountain? A lot of little individual snowflakes that are needed to make a landscape white.
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