| Dius
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2025-11-02
i find this wonderfully . . . wonderfully what? i can't find the right word . . .
. . . ah, perhaps it this: möbius
beautifully simple, simply beautiful ~~~
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| TRANSMUTATION
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2025-10-30
There is more to life than meets the eye, if this is what awaits, then I can't wait!
"Echoing off the glistening stars
That float and glide so far away
And twinkle a peaceful song
Borne on a wind so calm and warm"
Just beautiful.
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| The Measure of Seasons
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2025-10-29
My life, too, is one of the seasons, each with its own character which touches and effects my own character. Here, it is cold and raining, but rain is what feeds so the roots, so I welcome it. Age matters, effort matters, time matters. Your poem captures it all quietly and truly.
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| The Whisper of Moonlight
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2025-10-28
I echo Allen's thoughts, how lovely to feel peace and quiet calm in a relationship. A beautiful analogy, the moonbeam and your love.
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| WHAT THE HELL!
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2025-10-25
The passing of time leaves me with two competing thoughts:
Life is a very slow disappearing act.
We are hurtling toward oblivion.
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| A Police Report
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2025-10-24
Even the cool, objective language of the police report can't hide the heat.
I guess this one goes into the cold-case file. Unsolved, unresolved.
A pleasure to read, Sameen.
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| Perhaps a China Berry Tree
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2025-10-12
Your poem led me to wonder if I have a touchstone such as your China Berry tree. I'll have to think about it. The expressiveness did evoke memories—a sensitive portrayal of youth and longing.
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| thoughts on world homeless day (October 10)
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2025-10-11
To walk in your shoes for a few moments, to share such thoughts, it's humbling and pure and real.
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| unfinished interlude
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2025-10-11
This is transportive, such vivid images and sentiments which flow down the page . . . a pleasure to read and reread.
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| THE MIRACLE
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2025-09-29
~~~shattered~~~
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| Subaru forester 2012
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2025-09-29
When the dependable is not dependable, then what?
I identified with, and appreciate, your thoughts and poem.
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| Closed fists
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2025-09-28
I love everything about this poem.
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| FIVE SECRET PHOTOGRAPHS - 2
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2025-09-18
The relationship seems so fraught, as seen through your words. The poem is vivid.
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| The Cold War on Peace
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2025-09-13
You write the truth simply, assuredly, and undeniably.
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| IN THE NAME OF LOVE
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2025-09-04
It's so nice to sink into the rhythm of this, the meter leads so easily from one line to next.
Romanticism . . . never fails.
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| What i hold!
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2025-08-24
Your love of life, of living, of spreading joy, is contagious in the best possible way ~~~
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| REMEMBER THE WINE
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2025-08-20
I have such days, one in particular, so I very much enjoyed your approach to such memories.
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| Lady in Red
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2025-08-14
your poem brings to mind these lyrics from "dream a little dream of me"
Stars fading but I linger on dear
Still craving your kiss
I'm longing to linger till dawn dear
Just saying this
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| ACHIEVEMENT
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2025-08-04
This is vivid. I was thinking, as I read, there is the making of a short story here, I wanted more!
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| TIME TO REFLECT
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2025-07-23
The poignancy of looking back comes through so well. Age and perspective add a sweet/sentimental touch.
Your fingers must have been light on the keyboard, this has a gentle touch, Allen.
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| SO BE IT
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2025-07-01
Allen, you write of expectation and experience, the common factor being mood. Your poem reminds of a short story by Hagiwara Sakutarō called, “Cat Town," written in 1935.
In the story a man, representing everyman, goes out for a stroll, only to find himself disoriented. Though he has walked this way countless times before he finds himself somewhere where he has never been, and never knew existed, which seems to me to be very much what your poem is about, at least in part. In your poem you seem content to be in “today,” which is “as good as it might be,” even if it is somehow, in some “convoluted way” not where you expected to be.
In the short story, well, I won’t reveal the ending just in case you want to read it.
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| SO BE IT
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2025-06-29
Your epigram could have been words from Huck to Jim
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| I Matter
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2025-06-29
The three poems you posted (so far) are so . . . spot on, not a wasted word, no excess.
I concur with every word of this poem.
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| Crowning
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2025-06-29
Thank you for this concise, damning, indictment. I love the way this flows down the page—the unfolding of our new and horrific reality.
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| PoetBay People: Anna (night soul woman)
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2025-05-21
I still miss her.
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| The Ninth
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2025-05-15
I find this quietly powerful, speaking the truth.
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| 12am hospital round
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2025-05-01
TV and movies dramatize your profession. This sounds like the true reality of it. It's work.
Thank you for this, and for your work.
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| Gevalia (II)
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2025-04-12
I can't stop reading and rereading this, bookmarked.
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| A PLACE OF TRIAGE
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2025-03-26
You expressed, so very well, the most fundamental emotions/thoughts: hope and doubt.
"That light, will be everything . . . " and what follows, is a beautiful notion. I love this poem.
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| Body Valency
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2025-03-23
What a wonderful metaphor! So apt, so . . . you!
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| The Moon Spoke to Her
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2025-03-05
As i have a fondness for the moon, and being considered crazy and stare-worthy, I love this poem. You expressed something very real
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| WHOSE WILL BE DONE?
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2025-03-05
It is the child that fulfills the parents’ final wish, as it should be. The texture and color of your words make this vivid, very nearly tangible, and genuinely poignant.
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| Weather in love
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2025-02-18
i hear you singing this song
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| A follow up on ‘Worthy’
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2024-09-28
Thank you for the update and the very good news. So often we hear about the struggle, but not the result.
I repeat what I said to "Worthy," best of luck going forward. Though, I wonder if "luck" has anything to do with it. Perhaps perseverance is a word that better suits you!
Wishing you the very best,
otp/jim
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| Salmon Tanka
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2024-09-28
I enjoyed all three of you tankas, lovely images gently portrayed.
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| rue the hay
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2024-09-28
This has a hypnotic, melodious quality, the more you read it the more entrancing it becomes.
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| Now Isn't a Good Time, Cat
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2024-09-22
i love this, the second stanza just . . . sings ~~~
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| MY LIFE BY ANN WOOD
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2024-09-17
You write this as if you are figment of your own imagination . . .
an inner-dialog, dark, but ultimately hopeful . . . a mystery
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| GRAPEFUL EXISTENCE
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2024-09-11
One wonders if it is a symbiotic relationship with mankind. The vines existence depends on producing, then sacrificing, its progeny.
Wonderful poem, I had visions of vineyards and hillsides. Lovely.
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| Mon petit champ de broccoli
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2024-09-08
What a sweet memory
and an equally sweet poem!
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| For My Children
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2024-08-29
Thank you for this.
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| Soma
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2024-08-23
i often feel the lack of coordination
between mind and keyboard
the words seem to come
of their own volition
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| Yoga
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2024-08-09
Gold would be icing on the cake!
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| HOME TO JANIS JOPLIN
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2024-08-05
blows me away~~~
you're the best
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| Nocturne
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2024-08-05
i love this, and it brings to mind one of my favorite poems by the late Nancy Willard: "Hindsight". it's probably copyrighted, so i can't post it here, but it's on google if you're curious.
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| The one that is you
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2024-08-01
you may not *need* to say it
but it never goes unappreciated!
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| Lesson 7
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2024-07-30
death was the invitation to the ball that ED longed for
be patient, you will get yours ~~~
You are writing stratospherically my friend.
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| Lesson 8
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2024-07-30
Could it be that behind the —smoke in your eyes — stare/dare/glare
you are a sensitive and gentle and insightful poet-man?
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| Memento Mori
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2024-07-29
Sameen got it right. Not only a journey, but a path to follow.
This is why I continue to come to poetbay.
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| Chanson d'automne
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2024-07-29
Such poignancy, it's almost unbearable.
Thank you for this one.
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