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Daydream

2017-11-17
This poem comes with its own mood music, which makes it a complete picture.


Neither Here nor There

2017-11-17
"To which my mind has flown"
and
"fallow fields below"

work so well together, a hint of gods on high, gods being the most human of all beings with their wants and needs.


I'm In

2017-11-08
Very pleasing. I was particularly taken by the third stanza, and walking around the house saying, "unPound me." I have far too much Pound lying about.


Struck Dumb

2017-11-05
I get the sense, strongly, of "firstness," that it's coming back. Four years is a long silence for a writer.


I will not keep asking....

2017-10-29
i slept on it and still can't get it.


Raucous Sentiments

2017-10-24
These words resonate (loudly), and "the constant beating of the drum" is wearing and fraying nerves.

In the country (I don't know about anything else) people have nature at hand to balance the noise. It may help, it seems to, a little, at least until we come in the house and tune in.


Man Cold

2017-10-17
I have many thoughts about your gender breakdown but speaking them aloud wouldn't do. OTP has thoughts of her own. The two do not coincide.

Clever and good rhymes, esp. first stanza: lay/play & dire/mire, they are more than casually linked to one another.

Rose hip tea and lots of sunshine.


Tuffies

2017-10-15
My daughter loves libraries and jigsaw puzzles, the tougher the better, and she doesn't care a whit about the picture.

This is wonderful, it makes me smile. I love your rhymes.


Chestnuts

2017-09-24
I love it, love it for you simple elegance, and for the memories, of which mine are rich with battle and hearth.


kant

2017-09-24
this is imaginative almost beyond words. such unexpected imagery. i like it.


A SCOBBERLOCHER GIVES A BACKHANDED COMPLERMANT!

2017-09-24
This is a fun use of language.


When The Whole World Is Marching...

2017-09-18
Lovely words. I echo your entreaty. I am doubtful.


I love you by Ann Wood

2017-09-16
i like reading this sincere expression of love.


Burning Red

2017-09-15
That's horrible, but your poem is like a bit of emily dickinson.


Two weeks without you Ashley by Ann Wood

2017-08-27
thinking of you ~


For Zach--39 Years And You're Gone

2017-08-15
I'm so sorry, Kathy. This is the saddest face of life's struggle.

My condolences, and hard as must have been to write, thank you for sharing your thoughts,

jim


Images

2017-08-02
Good images in both poems, and an economical use of descriptors.


Watching you sleeping by Ann Wood

2017-07-27
It is good acknowledge the wonderful things in life. You do it so well, with graciousness.


fault lines

2017-07-27
This is fine, and could easily be put to music.

It's nice to see your words again. Welcome back : )


furry philosophers (tanka)

2017-07-25
art imitates life imitates art!


Being There

2017-07-04
Perhaps this a cautionary tale of words said in the glow of new love.


Forgive me for you by Ann Wood

2017-06-15
Amazing poem, Ann.


Lament

2017-06-12
You make 40 sound diabolically old, but there is grace and humor in your self-realizing lines.


Having Fun

2017-06-12
What a picture!


Hart Crane

2017-06-12
I can understand your love of H. C., loving language as you do. I stumble into his world, taking a few steps before sighing and closing the book as hopeless. It is my loss, I know it. I would love to get lost in the words, but I merely get lost.

I'll comment on "Lament" later, I have to begin this day.


The heart of the watermelon by Danka Todorova-translate by Ann Wood

2017-06-09
I love this so much, it is melancholy and true and makes me feel like life can be so rich and so painful and so deep. Thank you for translating this gentle story.


Maybe To Mars

2017-06-06
At least it was fun!


The Birds

2017-06-06
After reading this poem and "You," I feel sated, as after a fine dinner, and dessert too rich, or, just rich enough, just right. (I write this to the sound of morning birdsong.)


In Praise of Coloured Bottles

2017-05-06
So true, and a good poem. We called it "beach glass." Now, yes, plastic litter. It's awful.

In the woods I still find a blue or green or brown bottle, ages old, broken or unbroken, testament to lives that came and went.


Life in the nursing home by Ann Wood

2017-04-11
You always write clearly and sincerely. My closest friend is in a home with dementia. There are no activities. It is heartbreaking.


Lion in a Hat

2017-04-08
I think it works both ways, too. With the first line it's a little more personal, you give us an insight into what you're seeing.


racism in villages

2017-04-01
It comes down to individual cases.


utterly

2017-03-31
i wonder if you knew that you would answer your own question when you began this poem.

it's a good question.


architecture

2017-03-31
i hadn't thought of the intuition-intelligence link like this. it's interesting to think about the connection.
thank you for this.


Bluegrass

2017-03-30
Every child should have such memories, happy, priceless memories, each unique to their own locales.

Again, as in Miss Lucille, you've evoked a scene that feels familiar, though it was nothing like my own upbringing. It is very real. The only line that did come real for me is:

"Cowboy fantasy envisioned"

That became my reality.


Bahama Meditation

2017-03-30
I am incredibly happy for you that you've found this blue paradise, and were able to put it into words for us. I am transported from this chilly, gray midwestern day . . . almost! I need to see it and feel it to believe it.

It's good to hear from you again. The last we heard was during a terrible, soul-shaking, storm.


Her Name is Lucille

2017-03-26
You have brought Miss Lucille to life. If I didn't know her before, I know her now.

Tremendously evocative. I will be in the Kentucky hills next week. I will think of her.


media

2017-03-05
Part of the problem is that people tend to WATCH the media, and not READ the media. They absorb, passively, what they see without critical thinking.


Clouds

2017-03-05
You write of elusive, yearning emotions with such subtlety and grace. This is poignant. It takes me to a place that feels just out of reach, to some better, perfect state of being, going from the antiseptic room to:

You want to taste the sea
inhale that scent of salt,
roll it over your tongue,
Imbibe of the earth
fresh mown grass,
the fragile one day bloom.

Just beautiful, and a little heartbreaking.


Routine

2017-02-09
I like this. Anyone who writes odes to ice cream is okay with me. This is well conceived and written. I like the images, and the way they reflect upon you as a person and writer. This is thoughtful without being indulgent, and the final stanza circles back to the beginning nicely. It feels complete. Well done (as always).


Women (appreciations for the Leo full moon)

2017-02-09
I enjoyed this, and wonder if I, or any man, could write something along the same lines. I don't think so. Perhaps brothers in battle could, but nothing in my experience leads me to think there is a male equivalency, not is such sweeping terms.

Lucky you.

These lines gave me pause:

"When we hurt the feminine in ourselves
We hurt each other"

I'm not sure what is meant.


After All Has Been Broken

2017-02-03
Love is a plague disguised as bliss.


Alternative Information

2017-01-22
you managed to write an interesting poem on truth (or lack thereof).

pace yourself, it will be a long four years. yesterday meant something, believe THAT.


Underwater

2017-01-22
maybe that is a good thing (to see only blue?) ~


lights

2017-01-22
Your poems reflect the light of ideas, they are unfailingly thought provoking.


Bereft

2017-01-22
A compelling expression of something very hard to express. Simple and powerful.


the news

2017-01-22
and the moral is . . .


life

2016-12-30
Humankind is biologically meant to cycle through quickly, and in the scheme of time we do, no more that a fleeting, procreating life, then gone. Short term or long, we fail and fail again to solve problems. Ultimately, whatever the cosmos is or does will absorb the detritus that was us.

Still, we have will, and can and do solve problems, but death, that still comes despite all. Maybe Trump can make a deal with Death, I'm pretty sure I can't.


Purposeful and Pure Dog Sense

2016-12-30
Your writing conveys so much, so well, and with so much of your unique style.

These lines were powerful and timely:

"All live in accordance of harmony
When the leader remains strong"

Truly, it made me think we, all of humankind, have failed, become too complicated, too quick to willfully disregard what is good and natural.

This poem is about dogs, yes, but it, to me, is about potential—what we as a people, and we as individuals could be, or possibly can be.


Spies

2016-12-11
This is well worth the wait, Elle—masterful and enjoyable, and all yours. Brava ~