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Her Name is Lucille

2017-03-26
You have brought Miss Lucille to life. If I didn't know her before, I know her now.

Tremendously evocative. I will be in the Kentucky hills next week. I will think of her.


media

2017-03-05
Part of the problem is that people tend to WATCH the media, and not READ the media. They absorb, passively, what they see without critical thinking.


Clouds

2017-03-05
You write of elusive, yearning emotions with such subtlety and grace. This is poignant. It takes me to a place that feels just out of reach, to some better, perfect state of being, going from the antiseptic room to:

You want to taste the sea
inhale that scent of salt,
roll it over your tongue,
Imbibe of the earth
fresh mown grass,
the fragile one day bloom.

Just beautiful, and a little heartbreaking.


Looky kooky

2017-02-11
Ground Control to Major LFD3, you are cleared for re-entry at your discretion.

Actually . . . may I join you?


Routine

2017-02-09
I like this. Anyone who writes odes to ice cream is okay with me. This is well conceived and written. I like the images, and the way they reflect upon you as a person and writer. This is thoughtful without being indulgent, and the final stanza circles back to the beginning nicely. It feels complete. Well done (as always).


Women (appreciations for the Leo full moon)

2017-02-09
I enjoyed this, and wonder if I, or any man, could write something along the same lines. I don't think so. Perhaps brothers in battle could, but nothing in my experience leads me to think there is a male equivalency, not is such sweeping terms.

Lucky you.

These lines gave me pause:

"When we hurt the feminine in ourselves
We hurt each other"

I'm not sure what is meant.


Shinrin-yoku

2017-02-05
the benefits are myriad, but no more so than enjoying your flow of words.


Christina

2017-02-05
Oh, aye—

"It is that
And more"

and yes, you were one.


Look Up

2017-02-04
very good, and welcome back.


After All Has Been Broken

2017-02-03
Love is a plague disguised as bliss.


Alternative Information

2017-01-22
you managed to write an interesting poem on truth (or lack thereof).

pace yourself, it will be a long four years. yesterday meant something, believe THAT.


Underwater

2017-01-22
maybe that is a good thing (to see only blue?) ~


lights

2017-01-22
Your poems reflect the light of ideas, they are unfailingly thought provoking.


Bereft

2017-01-22
A compelling expression of something very hard to express. Simple and powerful.


the news

2017-01-22
and the moral is . . .


Ace

2017-01-21
Ace.


Times New Roman

2017-01-14
To say this is ace is an understatement. A *tour de force* is coming closer. I am so intrigued by this, and so happy to get lost in it, and emerge—yeah, the final stanza is ace. Ace all around.

Bookmarked, obviously.

Dabo ~


life

2016-12-30
Humankind is biologically meant to cycle through quickly, and in the scheme of time we do, no more that a fleeting, procreating life, then gone. Short term or long, we fail and fail again to solve problems. Ultimately, whatever the cosmos is or does will absorb the detritus that was us.

Still, we have will, and can and do solve problems, but death, that still comes despite all. Maybe Trump can make a deal with Death, I'm pretty sure I can't.


Ramblings 379

2016-12-30
i've read this several times, now while listening to the music. it's a poem that is cryptic, though a sense of it does come through. i don't know the "horizontal" and "vertical" mean, and i'm intrigued. i do understand the last two lines, that is clear (or is it?).


Purposeful and Pure Dog Sense

2016-12-30
Your writing conveys so much, so well, and with so much of your unique style.

These lines were powerful and timely:

"All live in accordance of harmony
When the leader remains strong"

Truly, it made me think we, all of humankind, have failed, become too complicated, too quick to willfully disregard what is good and natural.

This poem is about dogs, yes, but it, to me, is about potential—what we as a people, and we as individuals could be, or possibly can be.


Spies

2016-12-11
This is well worth the wait, Elle—masterful and enjoyable, and all yours. Brava ~


remarrying

2016-12-06
I find this compelling. Thank you for the insight.


Hugging an Alligator

2016-11-20
I don't know much about alligators, it was a croc that took Hook's hand, and a croc that gave Crocodile Dundee that love bite, but I do know this is a fun poem, and fair warning!

jim


Suzanne's Dolly Gift

2016-11-14
The gift of salvation came at five, and lasted a lifetime.

There is something wonderful in knowing this story is true, or a variation of true. It reads gently, and the rhymes give a sense of a children's story, appropriately. And then it reads like a nightmare. But the image of a 77 year old Suzanne reaching back to her five year old self is what lasts.


A Fragile World

2016-11-14
Bleached like the coral? In my world the change is undeniable, the evidence is everywhere. Why bother to deny it, yet so many do.

Images of childhood make this even more poignant.


Autumn turn

2016-11-14
I enjoyed this very much. Can you hear me? I'm shouting.

Happy Autumn ~


Dilli Bazaar

2016-10-30
and what do you think of Devkota's poetry? did he get it right? is he still relevant in your world, in your life?


Thapathali Campus: A Burlesque of Life

2016-10-30
In years and decades to come I expect you will look back at this poem as one that defines this time in your life. It is an epic recounting of a time and place, and the nature of change is in every word, and stagnation, the truth of both is apparent. the sense of change coming, for you, is strong, and this is a "looking back," poem, and equally forward looking.

the unstilted nature of you writing here is strong and honest, especially as it goes on after the first lines, gathering momentum, and ending thoughtfully. the final verse is one of sad triumph.

you separate yourself from the other students (sucking their beer bottles . . . ), and this separation, oh dear, may reveal that you really do have an artist's nature, looking in from the outside. the world needs artists, but it's hard to be the one looking in.

make sure to print this, and always keep it as a touchstone.


yet to be named

2016-10-29
I've been reading your poems for many years now. Your voice has grown strong, you don't fool around with your words, you say it directly, and that's all to the good. It's good to see "montana" pop up again.

Take care,
jim


weeping through the panes

2016-10-25
There is good rain and bad rain (and purple rain, I suppose). This is the bad kind, that rains inside your mind. You've caught it perfectly. Brava!


Inside The Kingdom Of The Cheese

2016-10-25
a little surrealism makes more sense sometimes than cold logic. I like this tearing up of reality, and reconfiguring it your way.

damn mice.


October Skies

2016-10-25
I am not normally a fan of poetry about weather, but this is exceptionally gentle and vivid, and has caused me to rethink my prejudice on the subject.

beautiful!


A Rendezvous to Dine at Five

2016-10-25
I love this, and identify as my world has "seniors" in it as well, and their youthfulness, humor, and insights making the time thoroughly pleasant.


Where did it go?

2016-10-25
Your sense of humor and reality combine, again, to be spot on. It's always a pleasure to read your poems.

j.


Disturbed

2016-10-21
i love it!


Loose Screws

2016-09-01
It used to be that when a screw was loose (metaphorical or otherwise), a little tightening with an ordinary screwdriver (metaphorical or otherwise) would fix it.

Now, you've got flat head, phillips head, square head, torx head, allen head, hex head—what's a body to do?

Kidding aside, robotic, unemotional limbs are no joking matter. How ones extricates themselves from such a tangle I don't know.

Wire cutters? Reverse polarity?

Good poem.


WRITEINGS

2016-08-29
ah, you write for immortality!


Torn

2016-08-28
One sharp image after another; again, you've put into words feelings which are usually too elusive to describe. I enjoyed both your poems today very much.


Safety Rope

2016-08-28
The second line says so much, yet poetry is all about feelings. You describe yours very well.


The Lonely Mermaid

2016-08-28
This is as lovely as can be, like reading a sunset.


The trick is to keep looking

2016-08-05
i like the atmosphere, a place to be alone, whether you like it or not—a gathering of weary souls.


Twice fried Chips

2016-03-25
I have felt the fear and relief. Your poem captures the intensity of both emotions.


Holocaust Remembrance Day 27.1.2016

2016-01-27
With age comes wisdom? The knowledge that it didn't have to be so?

My maternal and paternal great-grandparents came to the States from Germany in the 1850's, so my immediate family escaped the holocaust, but I (and my kids) think of those relatives that didn't emigrate. We are thinking of them today.

Thank you for sharing this, though painful.


The Zorro circle

2015-07-30
Both of you poems today are serious, and serious in a way I can understand. But this poem, the Zorro poem of the ever-tightening circle, requires a Zen solution, or else. You have a sword. Cut it. Cut the noose.

I'm not being flippant, there has to be a way to think differently. Or else.

I'm so glad to see your poems again, though they are troubling.

jim


Interjection

2015-07-28
This touches on the problem some have, including myself, of constantly assessing oneself and the world around you. It does take you out of the moment, and it is hard on those around you, and when I say "you" I mean me.

This is a pointed poem, NSW. You probably noticed.


Transiting Grande Isle

2015-07-15
You and Elle write beautiful travelogues, hers more of the mind, yours of sea and granite and foliage. I enjoy them both. I especially enjoy this as I've never seen this part of the world, I would love to, and this adds to the pull.

A thoroughly enjoyable poem, Joe. An interesting beginning, and detail enough to convey what you mean to convey.


SO SAD - NO FAREWELL'S

2015-07-11
I share your sentiment. It is sad. I've done it myself, but I understand why it sometimes happens.


PoetBay is 10 years old!

2015-05-27
Thanks to all three of you, and congratulations. Perhaps, sometime, you could give us a little history of how poetbay came into being.

Thanks again, it has been, and is, a great creative outlet and forum.

jim


The Corner

2015-05-08
. . . where the sad go to cry.


Freedom

2015-05-08
There is a lot of truth in your poem. The line that strikes me personally is "Mistakes of our fathers." i am hopeful my kids can survive my mistakes.