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A Tuesday in December

2017-12-13
I can feel for you. I get this feeling once in a while. The final stanza is excellent, but the others help the poem get its over all shape.


light

2017-12-13
I like it. Especially the final stanza.


Done, and Cannot be Undone

2017-12-12
Ah, Robert Browning!

I like the ending. Although what the speaker did seems bad in the beginning, the end justifies the intent.


To Glenn Gould

2017-12-12
I love it. Writing is similar to playing the piano. Sadly, the young poets who emote their hearts out on the black and white pages do not know this.


Humanity

2017-12-12
Brilliant work! Reminded me of Bukowski's "The Genius of the Crowd."


Glimpses

2017-12-09
Such wonderful glimpses. Absolutely love it!


Refugee

2017-12-09
Finally I see some optimism towards the end of this poem. Bravo! A poem that I'll cherish for long.


Winter Tanka

2017-12-06
Excellent!


Borne So Never To Care

2017-12-05
Beautiful.


December

2017-12-05
Sad. I like the sorrowful portrayal of winter.


On Miller's Pond

2017-12-05
A beautiful portrait. Must be like an artistic picnic of great writers.


emily

2017-12-05
A stark image, bereft of any precious wordage. An image that is both lewd and enthralling. Is it Emily's first sexual awakening?


Computer

2017-12-03
I like the humor in it. :)


evening

2017-12-03
Loved the sensory details. Felt like I too was walking beside you and cherishing the calm evening.


An Attempt

2017-12-01
I like music the adjectives and verbs make here. It's a good attempt.


Starting Fresh

2017-12-01
It always feels nice to start afresh. Nice poem!


Coffee in Columbus

2017-11-30
Lovely.


Before Dawn

2017-11-30
Wonderful!


two poems of love

2017-11-30
I like the way the poem progresses from the first part, which is all bright and happy, to the second part, which is full of existential nothingness. The transition to me was seamless, and that's what I enjoyed.


Haiku

2017-11-24
Wonderful. A treat for coffee lover like me.


Amazon

2017-11-24
Beautiful.


It's Simple, Really

2017-11-23
Simple and straightforward. :)


Winter (for Sameen and Bibek)

2017-11-22
Perfect now!


2010

2017-11-20
Nice villanelle. You're a master of structures.


Winter Snow

2017-11-20
Where is qaafiyaa?


CANT STOP THINKING!

2017-11-20
And out of such active minds come the beauteous threads of poesy.

Bibek


My Mother and Me

2017-11-18
I had tears in my eyes when I finished reading the poem. This poem is a poignant reminder of the passing of time, the aging of your beloved mother, and the words she sputtered till the end. Utterly moving and tenderly crafted, I love it so very much.

Bibek


A Variation of Bibek's "Flying"

2017-11-18
Lol, the ending. Creeping between the legs. Never thought about that.


The Wreckage of an Average Night

2017-11-15
Explains an average wreckage of a city night. I like the descriptions and the images. Nicely done!


Lines of ink

2017-11-13
Very true. I guess that is how all poets craft their works. Bravo!


Everything Wednesday

2017-11-13
Wednesday, Friday and Monday. Wonderful use of poetic phrases in your work. I like them all very much.


Adrift

2017-11-13
The world seems to be crumbling while the speaker in the poem laments for his long lost lover. Pretending she was near, he reads the words, his eyes are like two dead fish bumping along the river bottom.

I like this imagery very much. One of your fine works, Larry.


November

2017-11-13
An interesting idea. You changing your name to November. The end is wonderful. November is an interesting month, especially in Kathmandu. The weather is cool and the sky is clear. Even though I don't know the exact date, happy birthday, Jim. May you have a great year ahead. Be blessed with the gift of words. Like always.


This Bird Has Flown

2017-11-12
I like the repetition of certain lines. Is this a specific form of poetry?


our nature

2017-11-11
Such a fine painting through words. I especially liked the reference of constellations, and yes, cosmic harmonic made me smile. The letter never arrived, though. Sad.


Here and Now

2017-11-11
Wonderful. Especially the takhallus in the final couplet (maqta) was like cherry on top.


Me- Draw?

2017-11-07
Beautiful.


delphi

2017-11-07
Does the word "Delphi" have its Greek origins? Or does it simply refer to the fact that the speaker in the poem feels hollow towards the end? Curious.


Stupid Men

2017-11-07
A horrendous truth. Your poem re-echoes the old notion of war that stupid men start.


In Search of Appropriate Apparel

2017-11-06
This is me everyday. Oftentimes I can't decide what to wear and end up wearing t-shirt and jeans. Lovely poem, nonetheless.


Love Story

2017-11-06
You should obviously continue this story. It has got potential.


Fly

2017-11-06
I love this one. The rhymes and the cadence. The humor in it. Everything!


The Sweet Spot

2017-11-01
I too cannot write in cafes and baristas. Like you I need a quiet place for writing. Early mornings and late nights are my favorite time. The Sweet Spot is special to each poet. Liked the poem.


POETRY IS ORGANIC! (TRIGERD BY A COVERSATAN WITH THOMAS DeFREITAS)

2017-11-01
Impressive! I like it.


Orpheus in a house party

2017-10-31
I like this very much. You play with Greek myth while writing about a modern thing like a house party. Very commendable. I also like the way you gave both tangible and intangible qualities to the characters.


In the Footsteps of So Many Others

2017-10-31
Powerful ending!


Cana

2017-10-30
It's a nice effort. You told the story well. But qafiya is the heart of ghazal. Radif is optional. That's what I remember from writing ghazals in the Nepali language.


Tanka the sixteenth

2017-10-23
Another fine tanka. The last two lines are lovely and terse.


The Golden Beak

2017-10-23
I find some Walt Whitman quality in this poem.


ON THE FASE OF IT!

2017-10-21
To the point.