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Apparent Destiny

2018-10-14
A haunting conceit--asp and pain.


Woman Well Past Forty

2018-10-14
Ah, I always love your "list poem." This one is full of details and vivid ideas. The final stanza sums up everything. Bravo!

Bibek


Do You Have Coffee?

2018-10-14
And, I guess, coffee always helps. I can feel your longing to be in a distant place, away from your "odious countrymen," just to end up craving for "a taste of home."

Bibek


Summer: A Nonsense Rhyme

2018-10-13
Witty and humorous. Can be made into a perfect song. :)

Bibek


A Rainy Day

2018-10-10
A picturesque description of a loon paddling in the dark lake. The structure, the form, the voice--I love them all.

Bibek


The Candidate

2018-10-10
Witty and humorous--a great political satire!

Bibek


Contributor's Note

2018-10-07
Sorry, I mean, Jim and Joe. Got confused.


Contributor's Note

2018-10-07
I don't know why, but this poem reminds me of Simon Armitage's "The Christening." Do read that one if you haven't already. And like Larry and Joe said, I too would like to meet you in future, and probably talk poetry and politics over coffee. :D

Bibek


psychedelic moon song: a war of voices

2018-10-04
I really like the flow of the poem, and the refrain "i wish the world hadnít/gone crazy." Well-writ!

Bibek


Highway Town

2018-10-04
An interesting thought, well-executed and well-writ. Bravo!

Bibek


Land of Opportunity

2018-10-04
Doesn't really seem like a "land of opportunity." You've painted a grim, albeit poetic picture, Larry.

Bibek


Detroit River Scape

2018-10-04
I like the "the pleasure dome of another Khan." I have always adored inter-textuality in poems. My only concern is the lineation of the poem--maybe fiddle with it a bit?

Bibek


73rd Letter to a Poet

2018-10-04
I like the optimistic tone of the poem towards its end. It has been a difficult year for you, Tom, I know that. But "you will learn to live," we all have to learn to live. There's no way out.

Bibek


Prospector

2018-09-30
I like the idea of the poem: the prospector going out for a search. This poem, however, can be made a bit taut with a some of tweaking of certain phrases. Maybe use the quotations too? Just a suggestion.

Bibek


Sundown Landfall

2018-09-30
Picturesque depiction of nature. I see that you choose not to use any punctuation marks except a period at the end of each thought; is it a stylistic choice?

Bibek


cross-stitch

2018-09-29
Been there, done that. This poem speaks directly to my heart. Thank you for writing it.

Bibek


DrEAmlanD

2018-09-29
I really like the flow of the poem, the way it capture's the readers attention. And like Ashe said, the stanzas are picturesque. I can see that the whole poem is quite a lot inspired by the song. Maybe put "After Roland Orzabal," the name of the songwriter, in the top of the poem? Just a suggestion.

Bibek


A Meditation

2018-09-29
So many diverse ideas here. Needs some coherence, perhaps? Will be waiting to see how the final draft turns out to be! :)

Bibek


Convalescence

2018-09-28
Your convalescence is quite poetic. Wishing for your good health, Larry.


Hisaab Nahi Chahiye

2018-09-25
A well written ghazal. Expresses the sadness precisely.


Three In The Morning

2018-09-24
Perfect!

Three o' clock in the morning seems rather an eerie time to prepare yourself for writing, but coffee helps, I guess.


Mist

2018-09-24
The way you have explained about the droplets of mist is simply amazing. I like the stark, unflinching quality of your prose. Reminds me of Hemingway's iceberg theory every time I read it. There is so much to read beneath the surface of the text. You are a good storyteller; you can surely help me with my prose too. ;)

Bibek


Ablutions Afloat

2018-09-22
I like your craftsmanship, the rhythm and the rhymes.


September

2018-09-22
I like the weather/season metaphor--the way it is extended throughout the poem and the way it is personified.

Bibek


A Metaphor for Life

2018-09-22
I have always admired the use of "extended metaphor" in poetry. This one is beautiful.

Bibek


SPEAK OUT! SPEAK UP! - WHILE YOU STILL CAN!

2018-09-18
Absolutely agree with you, Ken. Poets should be bold and outspoken. Good work!


Nonentity

2018-09-18
Some poets consciously choose to be recluses, and they enjoy being non-existent. Take for example, Han Shan or Arun Kolatkar. Reading your poem makes me feel like the choice is rather forced, and the speaker seems lamenting over it. Anyway, I like the potency of the poem, and the way it conveys a lot in so few lines. And don't worry, Larry, we all here read your poems. ;)

Bibek


5 Clerihews

2018-09-18
Love these whimsical four lined Clerihews. Love their biographical quality. The rhymes seem forced, but I guess that is one of the elements of this form of poetry. The last one made me chuckle.

Bibek


Something beautiful yet unkind - 2

2018-09-16
Aha! This one is precise. A lot is conveyed in five lines. Love it. Much better than the other poem.

Bibek


Something beautiful yet unkind - 1

2018-09-16
I like the feeling you are trying to evoke in here. I think the poem can be made terse, sparing the use of "and/but." Just my thought--not everyone loves minimalism, though.


Friday Morning

2018-09-15
It is both serene and meditative. I like it very much. I am glad that my unrhyming sonnet inspired you to try the form. Sometimes I wonder about the lineation of sonnets: should it be a bulk of 14 lines or should it be divided into quatrains and a couplet?

Bibek


The Girlfriend

2018-09-15
An interesting little poem. Starts quite cheerily, but ends in desolation. Reminds us that everything in life is transient.


Haiku № 7

2018-09-15
With nature as its main theme, I like Haiku No. 7 very much.

Bibek


If All Else Fails

2018-09-15
If the lines had been longer, the poem would have almost the same effect on me as any Ginsberg's poem. Anyway, a fun exercise in anaphora. I like your effort.


Momo: A Haiku

2018-09-14
Ha-ha. That's witty. I have always loved the Haiku form. I cherish your effort.

Bibek

P.S. Welcome to Poetbay, Karan. :)


A Theory

2018-09-13
Poignant. I like it.


Strawberry

2018-09-13
This is fun to read! A witty write, Tom.


Realism

2018-09-13
Compared to the beginning, I love the later part of the poem. Nicely written!


Inherited

2018-09-07
I like the way you've experimented with the form in this poem. Thomas's poems echoes in it, but you have your own voice.


Empty Chrysalis

2018-09-07
A word painting! Well-written.


Corners of porches

2018-09-07
Must be the cozy little places with many memories. Like the poem.


CLIMATE DESTRUCTION - the worst

2018-09-07
Poignant! And to the point!


OH THE TIMES WE NOW LIVE IN!

2018-09-07
So very true! Almost a dystopia!

Bibek


Someone Must be in Need

2018-09-06
Still wondering who that dime-novel hero really is! Is it "evening" that soothing you?


Tardy reveille

2018-09-06
Like you said, 15 years have passed and this one is still fun to read. :)


On Being Alive

2018-08-30
This poem is full of positive vibes. I like it. And, yes, it is a puzzlement that we all are here in this world amid the "heavy grace" of the creator.

Bibek


Vantage

2018-08-27
A vantage point from where the readers can see the desolation in the environment and despondency in the speaker's mind. And I also like the repetition of the image of "fragile shoots."

Bibek


The New American Poets (1960)

2018-08-22
Ah, another list poem. I like it very much. I will have to read all those poets/writers. So much to read, so less time.


EXPRESS YOUR RAGE!

2018-08-19
I like it, Ken. And I feel like this poem is written for me. I just posted an "angry" poem, Fragments of a Day. :D

Bibek


Sixth Elegy

2018-08-19
I can feel for you, Tom. Hope you'll overcome the grief out of bereavement soon.