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Bibek

24 years old from Nepal


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The Prince of Good Cheer

2018-05-22
I can feel your words, Larry. I am sorry for my comment on your previous poem. "Typical gloominess" seems to have bothered you. Nonetheless, it gave you an impetus to write a such a well-crafted poem. I feel happy after reading it. Keep writing. Your poems will sooner or later change the "dreary, wretched man" into a "prince of good cheer" again.

Bibek


Back in the Day

2018-05-21
I like the vivid details in each stanza and the brutal honesty in the tone.

Bibek


Tinkerbell

2018-05-21
I like the transition you make from the dreamy fairytale to the harsh reality. The poem ends with your typical gloominess as usual.

Bibek


Grasping

2018-05-19
Wonderful work. Keep writing, Larry. You inspire novices like me to write.

Bibek


Sonnet: “When I look on my life that's now half-spent”

2018-05-19
I like the sonnet form and how it fits well with a modern poem like yours. The meter's perfect, the rhythm's apt. The use of archaic words gives a certain Shakespearean flavor. The volta, the twist on the thirteenth line, along with the closing couplet made me smile. Wonderful work!

Bibek


“Rose” (Triolet Challenge) [updated]

2018-05-19
Wonderful!


A Villanelle Composed on the Eve of May 8, 2018 (Challenge)

2018-05-19
I cherish the effort. I am in awe of poets who can write villanelles with such ease. Bravo!


Of Sweden

2018-05-18
I am in love with this villanelle. :)

Bibek


Limericks

2018-05-15
These are really funny! I wouldn't dare to write limericks, though.


Anthology

2018-05-05
This does not seem like super-fast writing to me. It must be a product of the slow and laborious process. Enjoyed reading the snippets of poems.


Triolet

2018-05-05
Oh, this is wonderful. I'd like to write a triolet too.


Isolation

2018-05-03
I admire your effort. Welcome to Poetbay, Rajesh. And keep writing!

Bibek


Where I Live with Me

2018-05-02
Ah, so many vivid details! I cherish the rhythm and rhyme of the poem. Beautiful 'spontaneous' work.


Arthritis

2018-05-02
I can feel for you Larry. I like the comparison: the river and the clouds.


short day words

2018-05-02
I like it. I like the reference of Peter Pan and the way you repeat the visual imagery of brown color.


Springtime Singer

2018-04-27
Immensely enjoyed the villanelle. This is the level I'd like to achieve when writing in closed forms.

Bibek


Sunrise [Revised]

2018-04-24
I echo one trick pony's comment. So effortless and so sublime!

Bibek


the space between

2018-04-24
I like the shift in the subjectivity of the poem. From a mundane, day to day walk, the poem moves into a sophisticated Zen philosophical discourse. A work that is meant to be read over and over again, and cherished all the while. Bravo!


I Wait Impatiently

2018-04-22
Beautiful! Especially the restless yearning.


Dreams

2018-04-22
Loved the dreamy poetic verse. A bit of jolting end towards the end, nonetheless, wonderful! :)


Letter to the World

2018-04-21
Amazingly well-written, especially the paratext, or the pretext of the letter. :)

Bibek


And Maybe, Just Maybe

2018-04-19
I like the structure of the poem. The way you managed to write decasyllabic lines (apart from the third line of first stanza). I like the 'sonnet' format, the full rhymes and the slanted rhymes, if I am not wrong. And the volta, the twist of the theme, in the thirteen line. Thoroughly enjoyed scanning, reading, and absorbing the stanzas.

Bibek


seven petals for eunkyo ya

2018-04-18
So romantic!


Being Human

2018-04-13
Loved the imageries.


My Poem

2018-04-10
This is hilarious! The first couplet (matla) grabbed me intensely. Had a wonderful ride with the middle couplets. The final couplet (maqta) left me rolling on the floor laughing.

Bibek


White Out

2018-04-10
Ah, the final line and the desolation it speaks about! Excellent!


Nantucket

2018-04-10
Been contemplating about this poem for some time. Excellent to see how you poeticized the fictional world. Are you Ishmael, the narrator?


Arlington

2018-04-09
Well-written, Tom. I like the ending couplet (maqta) the most. :)

Bibek


Somewhere

2018-04-09
Hmm ... well-written :)


Still Looking

2018-04-09
Interesting! :)


Gratitude Poem

2018-04-06
Lovely little couplet. :)


ALL FOOLS DAY!

2018-04-01
Ha-ha. Very witty!


Primavera

2018-04-01
Perfect!


Waiting Words

2018-04-01
I think I have read one of your poems about the 'dictionary'. Is this a revised version or altogether another poem?


Palestine

2018-04-01
I get the feeling you are trying to convey, but I'll have to read more works of Mahmoud Darwish in order to fully appreciate this poem.


A Gift-wrapped Day

2018-04-01
I like the narrative quality of the poem and the message at the end of it. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it.


One Reason to Go Back

2018-03-29
Well-written. :)


Early Morning (April 2011)

2018-03-29
I like the clever use of meter and rhymes.

Bibek


Muse

2018-03-15
Beautiful!


NOW RAINS ICE!

2018-03-02
Stay safe and warm, Ken. :)

Bibek


The Walls of Catharsis

2018-03-02
I feel you, Dave. At times, writing loses all its therapeutic charm. It becomes a mere chore, a psychic manifestation of a tired mind. I like this poem. :)


Gratitude

2018-03-02
I have been reading this over and over again, and I must say that I am profoundly impressed by the positive message the poem conveys to its readers. In a time that has been baffled by negativity and hatred, one hardly gets a chance to read the hopeful stuffs. Good work, Tom. :)

Bibek


Goodbye

2018-03-02
Well-crafted. I like it.


The Buskers

2018-03-02
I like it. I like the sadness in it. I like how it turns to be a little hopeful towards the end. But, for me, this write-up seems like a personal narrative, more like an omniscient memoir (if such thing exists), and not really a short story. I don't know why. Maybe because of 'show, don't just tell' thing. Anyway, it was a pleasure reading your work after a long time.

Bibek


Work

2018-02-24
To fall into a certain rhythm and to keep going are the joys of working. If you lose yourself in your work, chances are that you are doing what you love doing. I like the meticulous description of various jobs in the poem. Well-crafted!


The Moon Is Falling

2018-02-24
I like the personification of the moon. :)


Your Name

2018-02-20
Ah, so delicate!


Two Valentine Poems

2018-02-20
Delicately written. I cherish your craftsmanship. :)


A Reader's Complaint

2018-02-12
I wish I could write like this!


I have often

2018-01-28
Direct and honest. :)