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The wine gate

2019-04-19
Beautifully composed!


Zombie

2019-04-13
Interesting! I like the way the poem moves from artful artlessness to longing to the image of zombie.


for laurie bird

2019-04-05
A well-written requiem for Lauire Bird. I remember her from Annie Hall.


My Old Clothes

2019-04-05
This reads like a prayer. I love the extended metaphor (the old clothes) and the way you relate it to body/soul dualism.


Mists

2019-04-05
A marvelous feat! I am in love with this sonnet form and the use of full rhymes: they depict the mist-filled environment quite vividly!


85th Letter

2019-04-05
Vivid details with vivid litanies. I love your use of epistle form.


Possibly Oversold

2019-04-05
Poignant to the point that it evokes dark, dreary feelings in the mind of the readers.


Minstrels

2019-03-19
I love the phonetic cohesion, the musicality that is in this sing-song poem.


How Life Should be Lived

2019-03-07
"A banquet for the privileged, a bill for all the rest." A very striking statement. I like the irony that's in the poem.


Soon

2019-03-06
Ah, the merrymaking! Good read something light and exuberant.


Life Made Anew

2019-03-06
Wonderful comeback poem! Good to see you posting again, Kathy. :)


Frost

2019-03-06
Almost Zen-like. Captures the everyday moment of winter time.


April 21, 2014

2019-03-06
A well-crafted villanelle.


Candle

2019-03-06
A little prayer to begin the day!

Beautiful!


The submerged cathedral

2019-03-06
I echo the comments of Tom and Kathy: a truly well-crafted verse!


College Days

2019-03-01
Four different sketches! Well rhymed and metered. :)


Across the Distance

2019-03-01
A nice comeback poem. Good to see you again, Ashe. :)


Driving in the Dismal Season

2019-03-01
Terse lines. Sums up the feeling of driving in the dismal season.


I CONFESS!

2019-02-27
I can relate to the feeling, Ken. Happy Reading! :)


Lethal Beauty

2019-02-27
The light line adds a "lethal" twist to the poem. Interesting!


Interrupted serenade

2019-02-27
A poetic story in meter and rhyme. Lovely. :)


Room For Rumination

2019-02-27
So true. You've said the truth through fine rhymes.


Coming into Town

2019-02-27
Quite picturesque. Vivid details. Portrays your part of the world.


Sweden!

2019-02-23
I like the effort and the use of "nature" in haiku. I also like the format of 5-5-5 syllables in each line. Do you know that there is another oftentimes used format of 5-7-5 also?


1996

2019-02-23
Beautiful!


would that it were red

2019-02-23
I like the way there is a certain shift in tone between the two parts of the poem. The first one seems relaxed while the second one a bit jerky. I guess it was intentional, right?


she was my god

2019-02-23
A sweet little rhyme.


night terror

2019-02-20
A hint of surrealism as the "vast and black and infinite" void seeps into the psyche of the speaker at this witching hour.


The girl with the flaxen hair

2019-02-20
Beautiful! The variation of twelve and nine syllables, and the anapests. :)


Notes for a Litany

2019-02-14
Always love your choice of litany in a list poem like this. I like your unusual use of words like "bedlamite," "mishegas," "gutterpuddle," and "vestments," ranging from archaic to Yiddish to urban slang. And the last line is, as they say, cherry on the top!


Thrift Shop

2019-02-14
The last line is quite abrupt, so comical. Isn't 'Stopping by Woods' a rubaiyat? The form is similar, but I really like the voice and the tone of your poem.


A View of Frost

2019-02-14
Reminds me of Frost's 'Stopping by the Woods ...' The rhyme, the meter, the cadence: everything feels like a homage to the poet.


Gail Ann's Coffee Shop

2019-02-14
A funny rendition of Frost's 'Acquainted with the Night.' I like the phrase 'cuppa joe' very much.


And Tomorrow, and the Earth

2019-02-12
Reads like a prayer, Tom. Beautifully crafted.


soaring

2019-02-12
Really love the way the flight takes place, delicately done. Reminded me of the movie 'The Birdman.'


What the West Wind has seen

2019-02-12
Love the way you've described the forest, the waterfall, the nature. I also like your adherence to the fixed number of syllables in each line. Octameter acatalectic, as it is called? All in all, this is nature writing at its best.


JUST WHAT CAN WE DO?

2019-02-10
As Naipaul wrote, "The world is what it is." I don't think we can do much to change it.


Daydream

2019-02-10
A poignant retelling of memories of your beloved. I like it.


The City Limits: An Essay

2019-02-10
Short, sharp lines. This is powerful writing.


in brief

2019-02-10
As brief as it could be. I like it.


Footprints in the snow

2019-02-05
This miniature poem is quite picturesque. I especially like the use of fourteneer, the iambic heptameter, with perfect rhymes.


77th Letter (Revised)

2019-02-04
Quite picturesque! I like the way the French painters sneak into the poem, making it rich in meaning; and thereby its interpretation.


Listless

2019-02-04
We've all been there, with bouts of listlessness. I really like the way you've used short stanzas, and the way they conveyed the listlessness of the speaker.


Air

2019-02-01
I like this.The last line is quite epigrammatic.


When Will We See Spring Again?

2019-02-01
This poem reminds me of the song "Where have all the flowers gone?" I find similarity in terms of rhythm.


SciFi

2019-01-30
Touché. And quite witty indeed.


The hills of Anacapri

2019-01-29
Love this sonnet, the rhythm and cadence of it.


Home and Away

2019-01-29
Love these snippets of prose poems.


Philosophical Dentistry

2019-01-27
Somerset Maugham once wrote that in each shave lies a philosophy. Reading your poem makes the reader feel that even a trivial act of 'losing a tooth' leads one into a philosophical musing. Well-writ, Joe. I also like the wit and humor that are in it.


A Sage's Sorrow

2019-01-27
I second Tom! Love the rhythm, the slow cadence of the poem.