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Autumn

2019-06-14
You describe the essence of autumn quite well in this villanelle. By the way, just out of curiosity, which magazine was it?


A Hopeful Loser's Complaint

2019-06-13
Been there, done that! I know how it feels to be a "hopeful loser." In one way or another, we are all romantic fools, aren't we? Anyway, it is a well-written poem. The end-rhymes and iambs work well.


Turning Away

2019-06-13
I like the reference of Midas. Then a plethora of problems seep in: from plastic in the oceans to the bloody warfare. At the end, the turning off of the screen is an act of denial. I like the twist and turns! Well-writ, Larry.


Capitol Hill, circa 1976

2019-06-12
Bleak, and yes, dystopian like Jim said.


colin whistles

2019-06-11
I like the scene you've painted with short, almost terse phrases. I think the enjambments work well in that word-painting as one thought jumps over the other line.


Include Me Out

2019-06-11
I like the humor in it. Exultant villanelle.


Homage to S. Pickwick

2019-06-10
Wasn't Pickwick Papers a magazine run by Charles Dickens? I think I'll have to research a bit to find out more. Anyway, 'tis a fine poem, lyrical, rich in vivid details. The imagery of dancing tittlebat made me smile. You describe the pond and fish in an interesting way!


Diminished

2019-06-10
Like the imagery again!


Diary Entries: 8 June 2019

2019-06-10
They read like well-written poetic exercises. Like novelists, I guess poets should also write diary entries in verse.


waking

2019-06-10
The poem reverberates with a Zen-like quality: constant watching. Mindfulness is something I have been fascinated with. And when one's being watchful, "adjectives fall away, then nouns." What remains is is.


to bed

2019-06-07
A series of small talk? I've been reading this poem over and over again, and I'm not sure I get the intent.


Elementary Ghazal

2019-06-07
A lovely ghazal, one written to emulate. ;)


F

2019-06-07
Sad. I love the portrayal of "little blue boy."


Cardboard Man

2019-06-07
I like the metaphor very much. "Cardboard Man" also reminds me of flat characters from fiction, where the writer doesn't spend any time and effort in portraying their psyches.


Pluto's Lament

2019-06-07
I like the use of mythologies. They add a deeper layer of meaning to the work. :)


4 Quatrains

2019-06-04
Love the biographies in quatrain form. I especially like the pun-like references of "walk the night," "dark delight," and "gasping for breath."


Oh, Poor Me

2019-06-04
Pathetic fallacy, maybe? But then all art is that in one way or another! The extended metaphor of "rain" works well to convey the mood, Larry!


Poet or baby?

2019-06-04
Lovely! I like the dilemma: poet or baby? The last couplet sums the whole poem in a deft way.


Three of a Kind

2019-05-30
Three different entities! Somehow they seem to be connected in your poem, Dave. A light-hearted sketch!


For John Clare

2019-05-30
A heartfelt tribute! I'm certainly going to dig up to find more about John Clare.


I’ve heard it all before.

2019-05-30
Lyrical and beautiful.


"Lord Byron's Improbable Lament" (corrected)

2019-05-30
Well-crafted, Ngoc! I can see the irony in it.


There was a butterfly, apparently

2019-05-30
Powerful! I like the interplay of metaphors: sadness and butterfly.


D

2019-05-29
A punch-like rhetorical question at the end. Touche!


Home

2019-05-29
Beautiful!


Interlude

2019-05-29
Enjoy the work of copy editing, Coo & Co. I'll be waiting for your new poem. :)


at the bus stop

2019-05-28
Explains well the fragmentation and alienation of the postmodern humans. Cell phones don't really connect people, or do they?


After the Storm

2019-05-28
I echo Sameen's comment. Beautiful. Made me think about the Mumford & Sons' song by the same title.


C

2019-05-28
You explain it well--the act of making love (or recreating)--in thirteen beautiful lines.


at the train station

2019-05-28
Small talks. Love the cinematic feel of it.


B

2019-05-27
Sweet.


Three Postcards to a Poet

2019-05-27
Poetic postcards teeming with positiveness and gratitude. A rare quality in the works of poets!


Whitman and the Prostitute

2019-05-27
An amazingly well-written villanelle, Tom. I like the humor in it. The quatrain made me chuckle: heaps of unsold copies of Leaves of Grass from the Manhattan bard! Kudos!


A

2019-05-27
A gloomy portrait. The enjambments work well.


"Seed of Love"

2019-05-25
I can see that free verse is kind of an experimental form to you, Ngoc. I like the way you've maintained the flow; reminds me of e e cummings. Sailing, ocean, Helen of Troy, and the grotesque image of fetus: everything's well-juxtaposed.


To Morrissey at 60

2019-05-25
I like epistolary poems and the vivid details they contain. Can't wait to see the final form, Tom. :)


Staring Down from the Mantel

2019-05-25
I like the conceit: the taxidermied creature. Well juxtaposed with the concept of love, Larry.


Undine; or Song for Solo :>)

2019-05-22
A heartfelt verse for the cygnets that have disappeared. The salience of prosody, the way you vary the beats alternatively, is quite commendable. I'm always in awe of poets who can write so beautifully.


“Time and Space”: A Sequence of Tanka Poems

2019-05-22
Structurally well-put. I like the way you have blended science and poetry together. Well-writ indeed!


madly, insistently

2019-05-22
I like the litany-like use of auditory imagery, and the denouement that comes with the ultimate word "silence."


Weak

2019-05-22
Been there, done that. I know the feeling, Larry. Economically expressed!


Fragment II

2019-05-22
Love the phonetic cohesion of both the stanzas, especially the "splashing, thrashing, crashing" line.


An Exercise

2019-05-22
An interesting exercise, Tom. :) Poetry surely comes out of watching and meditative contemplating.


"We Hold These Truths to be Self-Evident"

2019-05-22
A bitter truth and today's reality. Poetically expressed!


love letter to a honda

2019-05-17
This is light-hearted yet witty. A pleasure to read.


A Note to Poetbay Friends

2019-05-17
Wishing for your speedy recovery and a healthier comeback, Tom. Take care. :)


The Scents of Contentment

2019-05-13
Let those "assholes" go, Larry. Like you said, they'll reach nowhere. I like the contrast in the poem, and the use of sense of smell. Indeed a scent of contentment!


No Longer Taken in by the Shadow Puppet

2019-05-13
The ultimate one-liner: "It's only an excuse" pretty much sums up everything. I like the way you've depicted the scene of two lovers growing distant and cold.


Six Haiku from 2010

2019-05-13
The are beautiful haiku. I like the one with the poet in it the most. What I've enjoyed in these haiku is your application of a strong 'kiru' -- a gap that creates an empty space for deeper contemplation as well as a more striking juxtaposition.


"Rapture"

2019-05-13
Beautifully crafted, Ngoc. You've powerfully poeticized the bipolar disorder. This poem took me back to the time when I was depressed myself and used to binge read Sylvia Plath. It was Plath's "Ariel" that helped me feel better.