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She Got What She Wanted

2018-12-14
I like the lost longing, the never-ending yearning, and the way you stretch the same image of seaside throughout the poem.


Box Office Bomb

2018-12-14
I like the analogy, the way you compare life with cinema.


Gerard Manley Hopkins

2018-12-09
I like the image of poetry "floating/In a jar." But I wonder why it is still floating. Hopkins was the "tipping point" between the classical and modern poetry. And now we have bards like Joseph Charles MacKenzie who wants to take poetry back to its original form and we also have the so-called slam performers who are post-modernizing the poetry in their own way. So, the floating image seems to be an apt one!

Bibek


on my way to work i walk through

2018-12-09
Love the way you have blended prose with poetry. Each one complements the other. Also, I am fascinated by the way you end the lines, the way one word runs into another line, and the way meaning of that very word gets dispersed in-between. This is quite unique, something that looks effortless, but needs years of writing to achieve.


station break

2018-11-30
A happy poem with an exultant effect! Isn't 'station break' a pause between the radio broadcasts? I like the way you present the poem as a 'break' from the normal day-to-day life.


Stinging Silliness

2018-11-30
Your first rhyming poem?


Diminished

2018-11-30
A realistic portrait! Like the way you ended the poem, with a diminishing effect.


Chapter One

2018-11-30
I all smiles reading this exultant villanelle.


WE SLIVERED LIKE WORMS! (WORLD WAR ONE)(Now With Addishans)

2018-11-22
Reminds me of 'Break of Dawn at Trenches' by Issac Rosenberg. Interesting work about the horrors and atrocities of war, Ken.

Bibek


The Most One Can Expect

2018-11-22
A day without pain does seem like a happy day. A well-put thought, Larry.


Appraisal

2018-11-22
I love the use of rhetoric questions throughout the poem. I think the last line, however, dilutes the effect. How about ending the poem with a strong effect of a series of rhetoric questions? Just my thought.

Bibek


Note to Myself

2018-11-22
I think you are right. Love the somehow harsh auto-suggestive tone of the poem.


Beneath Branches

2018-11-22
Interesting alliterations here!


My Good Fortune

2018-11-17
Uh-huh! "Inexplicably taken by [you]"--now that's a twist that I haven't really found in your other poems.


An Autumn Song

2018-11-17
I like the way every line is linked with the idea of "autumn." A well-crafted work, Larry.


cold to the bone

2018-11-17
Here in Kathmandu, during winter, we sit on a porch or terrace, reading newspaper and lazying around. I can very much relate to your poem, and I like the reference of "shape-shifting" light.

Bibek


[this is the hour]

2018-11-17
Love the litany!


[ballad]

2018-11-17
Delusions of significance? Hmm, interesting observation!


Roxbury 2015

2018-11-10
I love ghazals. I like the variation you make with the radif of your ghazal.


My Love

2018-11-10
I've read it for many times. I am particularly haunted by the images of "fetters." Such a grotesque image that's been violently yoked together with "love."


Simply...Me

2018-11-08
I know the feeling. To be secluded from rest of the world and to enjoy the company of your own--it can be the best thing at times. Well-crafted, Joe.

Bibek


Ghosts

2018-11-08
Ghosts personified? I like the concept of it. Well-written.


See the Pyramids

2018-11-08
Fun rhymes and a touche refrain!


CrossFire

2018-11-07
These words ring so very true. I like the sincerity of the thoughts, so well-put without any restrained/adorned language. Bravo!

Bibek


Southern Comfort

2018-11-07
I like the story that is inside the poem. I am still wondering how well the attitude changes with changing of the voice in the quatrain of the poem.

Bibek


Across the Void

2018-11-07
Sometimes the words may not appear at all. That leaves one with the worst kind of feeling.


New Directions Paperbook 316

2018-11-07
A great homage to Dylan Thomas. Love the way you've used some of his lines, twisting and turning them, making them your own.

Bibek


From the Basement

2018-11-07
Just reading the poem makes me feel claustrophobic. I can feel for the speaker of the poem, Larry.


Tree

2018-11-01
Quite sentimental, mate!


Over and Over

2018-11-01
I can relate to this poem, Larry. Even though I haven't been writing for such a long period of time, now and then, I do feel like the "persona" of your poem. What William Saroyan said― “I do not know what makes a writer, but it probably isn't happiness” ―turns out to be true, doesn't it?

Bibek


babygirl

2018-11-01
Ha-ha. This is humorous yet honest. Like Ashe said, this poem complements your earlier poem.

Bibek


I Cannot Find You

2018-10-29
I can relate to this. I love its soft and gentle tone with a tinge of remorse in the end.

Bibek


For J

2018-10-29
This is beautiful, Larry.


The Two of Me

2018-10-25
Love the wordage, the vocabulary, and yes, the liberty you've taken with the classical form.


Encomium

2018-10-25
Ah, how well you eulogize poesy, its warmth, its sustenance. A villanelle that ought to be memorized and read aloud. Quite an accomplishment!

Bibek


Autumn Solo

2018-10-25
Quite philosophical. Love the gentle, wave-like flow of the poem.


in reality

2018-10-25
Soft and gentle. Secure in cadence and narration. Love the binaries: near and far, absence and presence, warm and cold.


Teacher and Student

2018-10-23
Your poem made me wonder if the student is for real. If she is, I too would like to read her poems. If she is just a figment of your imagination, then you did a fine job of portraying her poetic self in your poem.

Bibek


Hail to the Chief

2018-10-22
Although I am unaware about the various political references, this poem made me smile. I love the humor and the wry satire.


state of the union

2018-10-14
I am not sure if I understand the political intention of the poem. Are you referring to Trump's democracy or world politics in general?

Bibek


Apparent Destiny

2018-10-14
A haunting conceit--asp and pain.


Woman Well Past Forty

2018-10-14
Ah, I always love your "list poem." This one is full of details and vivid ideas. The final stanza sums up everything. Bravo!

Bibek


Do You Have Coffee?

2018-10-14
And, I guess, coffee always helps. I can feel your longing to be in a distant place, away from your "odious countrymen," just to end up craving for "a taste of home."

Bibek


Summer: A Nonsense Rhyme

2018-10-13
Witty and humorous. Can be made into a perfect song. :)

Bibek


A Rainy Day

2018-10-10
A picturesque description of a loon paddling in the dark lake. The structure, the form, the voice--I love them all.

Bibek


The Candidate

2018-10-10
Witty and humorous--a great political satire!

Bibek


Contributor's Note

2018-10-07
Sorry, I mean, Jim and Joe. Got confused.


Contributor's Note

2018-10-07
I don't know why, but this poem reminds me of Simon Armitage's "The Christening." Do read that one if you haven't already. And like Larry and Joe said, I too would like to meet you in future, and probably talk poetry and politics over coffee. :D

Bibek


psychedelic moon song: a war of voices

2018-10-04
I really like the flow of the poem, and the refrain "i wish the world hadn’t/gone crazy." Well-writ!

Bibek


Highway Town

2018-10-04
An interesting thought, well-executed and well-writ. Bravo!

Bibek