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For Justin Vernon

2018-08-10
When it comes to style, voice, diction, word choice, word order, lineation, the unusual punctuation and the unconventional breaking of syntax, you owe a great debt to one trick pony aka jim. Voice should evolve slowly as you first learn the heritage of words, then learn to disregard it. That way, poetry you write becomes both ancient and modern at the same time. Sorry for my dialectical lecture, but I know you already know this. Nonetheless, your poem works well with this form, and I cherish the gentleness of your words.

Best,
Bibek


Some titles are long and some titles are short, some give the game away and some don’t.

2018-08-10
I cherish the wit of this short poem.


Interlude

2018-08-09
These stanzas aptly portray the tranquility of the harbour.


Your Typical Gushy Love Poem

2018-08-06
The first line of the poem is an epigram of sorts. It is pithy and pointed. I like the long, winding rhetorical question that you pose from the sixth line to the end. You say the love is "gushy" in the title, but the poem says that the "speaker" is kind of confused.


The Lot

2018-08-06
I like list poems. The list that you made in the poem, albeit imaginary, gives readers enough room for imagination.


A Longing For Winter

2018-08-05
So much longing here. I cherish the prose poem form, the way it is structured. I am equally fascinated by the word "catacomb." The allusion here is very literal. Being so literal halted my flow, and I stopped to contemplate the Roman Empire. The longing then gets punctuated with the closure.

Bibek


Biting Flies and Bill Collectors

2018-08-05
Love the conceit for its freshness and uniqueness!


Letter to a Friend

2018-08-05
You had me at the opening stanza. The middle ones were a slow, poetic ride. And the closure is perfect!


Caribbean Idyll

2018-08-05
I love the descriptive quality of the poem.


so ends

2018-08-02
As Shakespeare wrote "parting is such sweet sorrow," I see that the similar sentiment is being conveyed through the poem.

Bibek


In Mind, if Nowhere Else

2018-08-02
The dread of existentialism throughout the poem is ended with the final, solid line. I like the ending very much.

Bibek


Field Work

2018-08-02
Must have been a great experience meeting Seamus Heaney. I very much like the the line "a poet's rarely sober." Explains more or less the non-poetic influence that Heaney had in your life.

Bibek


WRITERS OF POETRY!

2018-08-02
How very true!


Sonnet

2018-08-01
I cherish the effort, Josephus. I think the last line is one syllable short to be in pentameter.


On Platform B

2018-07-26
An uncomfortable silence is so torturous. I like the deep, reverberating, philosophical silences. With Lauren, her departure must have brought the speaker some kind of happiness. I like the septet.


on meditation

2018-07-26
A reverse approach on Zen philosophy. I like the poetic reversal.


I WILL KEEP ON SPEAKING OUT!

2018-07-26
We should all voice our concerns. I agree with you, Ken.


Getting Away

2018-07-24
Love the picturesque description. I am always in awe of people who are adept at word-painting. :)

Bibek


Perhaps I am a Bird

2018-07-24
Witty rhymes.


The Whales Arrive at Montijo Bay

2018-07-21
This is marvelous.


credo

2018-07-15
Sweet.


Woulda, Shoulda, Buddha

2018-07-15
Solitude is the best therapy for a muddled mind. I practice it often.


Straight, No Chaser

2018-07-15
These couplets sound like manifestos of a renaissance, perhaps a romantic renaissance?


Syriac Ephrem

2018-07-13
Reminds me of Dante's Invocations to the Muses & God! I like your work.


The Incense Ritual

2018-07-13
Touché!


Saved

2018-07-13
This is so beautiful. I am going to reread it.


Learic

2018-07-06
Sometimes beauty can be found amid the cacophony. Well-written quatrain.


High coot

2018-07-06
Beautiful!


Feckless Pilot

2018-07-03
I like the way the story in the poem moves from something objective to something quite personal. The transition is as seamless as possible. I don't think you are like that "feckless pilot." You are better. :D

Bibek


this is not

2018-07-03
I like the moment that's been captured in it: the humorous story, the aura of evening, the denouement. Well written!


Lifespan

2018-07-02
I am still doing the math. Interesting!


Starting to Rain

2018-07-02
Precise!

It's raining here, and I am reading this poem over and over again.

Bibek


Outside the Café

2018-07-02
Thank you, Praveen, for your overtly critical comment. You are a careful and close reader; you find the flaws easily—we all need readers like you.

Yes, everything’s slow, but isn’t that the whole purpose of poetry, to slow things down? Each movement, each moment is indeed slowed down because I wanted to capture the moments, each to each.

And about repeating the word “beautiful” twice, there’s a reason why. The meaning of the two words are not same. The meaning has been defamiliarized, so to speak. A bit of Russian Formalism is applied here.

I like your cavil on changing “elegance of her dancing body” to “elegance of a dancing body.”

Thank you once again for critically reading the poem.

Bibek


Aubade, after Cummings

2018-06-28
Reminds me of the concept of defamiliarization, an artistic technique of presenting to readers common things in an unfamiliar way in order to enhance perception of the familiar.


A Rainy June in Nebraska

2018-06-28
It's raining in Kathmandu as well. The river's flooded. More clouds and much rain is expected. I can relate to your poem.


tales told in passing

2018-06-28
I am enamored of your poem: its form, its flow, its everything.


I Hear You Sing

2018-06-28
Soft and sweet.


Compline

2018-06-24
Aha! Precise!


evening

2018-06-23
Have I read this already? I have a strong feeling of déjà vu here.


Impressed

2018-06-23
Interesting comparison between the two forms of art: the visual and the written. Can there be one form superior to another?


Breaking News

2018-06-23
Haunting! Just like Jim said.

Wiping the artificial flowers, paying the fare for the bag full of bones, the knife of hope . . . these images will always haunt my mind.

And also the prose-poem format works really well. The three distinct sections are well linked with each other.

An accomplishment!

Bibek


A Flightless Bird

2018-06-22
Loved the extended metaphor. The line almost broke my heart.


How Soon Hath Time

2018-06-22
No way Miltonic, but loved reading it.


The Failed Prophet

2018-06-22
I like the way you have used, or rather intertwined the various references in your poem. A deep introspection into one's own psyche, this poem has many fine lines. Cherish the one-liner "I see God," and the rhetoric question "Why must I share such beauty?" An enjoyable read. And welcome back! I've missed your poems.

Bibek


69th Letter to a Poet

2018-06-16
I immensely like the continuous flow, the smooth—almost seamless—transition from one subject to another. I am astonished by your ability to weave the uninterrupted objective as well as subjective descriptions.

Bibek


Then I Close My Eyes

2018-06-16
I like the reference to Genesis. I am awed by the soothing effect the poem has. I wonder what an "applenot" tree is.


(un)exceptional

2018-06-16
I am awed by your choice of the speaker. To write from someone else's perspective, to enter into his/her head and express the feelings—that is what I would like to do soon in my poetry.

Bibek


Saturdays With Father 4 - The Conclusion

2018-06-09
In the narrative shadowed by terror, I see sharp and intense images that are both striking and haunting. The loneliness, the misery, the poverty ... the effect is chilling!

Bibek


Saturdays With Father 3

2018-06-09
A haunting read!


Internet Ode 2.0

2018-06-09
I like the rhythm and the rhyme. I like the subtle wit and techno-humor of the poem. An enjoyable read.

Bibek