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Notes for a Litany

2019-02-14
Always love your choice of litany in a list poem like this. I like your unusual use of words like "bedlamite," "mishegas," "gutterpuddle," and "vestments," ranging from archaic to Yiddish to urban slang. And the last line is, as they say, cherry on the top!


Looking Back

2019-02-14
The tone is quite despondent, full of existential crisis, which reminds me of the lives that, without our notice or control, go on and on, bereft of winning 'a prize' or writing poetry that goes 'unread.' Aren't we but puppets in the hands of fate, or God (if it exists)?


Thrift Shop

2019-02-14
The last line is quite abrupt, so comical. Isn't 'Stopping by Woods' a rubaiyat? The form is similar, but I really like the voice and the tone of your poem.


Grab Your Bag

2019-02-14
Your first rhyming poem, Larry? :D


Attacking the Monster from Within

2019-02-14
Love the conceit.


A View of Frost

2019-02-14
Reminds me of Frost's 'Stopping by the Woods ...' The rhyme, the meter, the cadence: everything feels like a homage to the poet.


Gail Ann's Coffee Shop

2019-02-14
A funny rendition of Frost's 'Acquainted with the Night.' I like the phrase 'cuppa joe' very much.


And Tomorrow, and the Earth

2019-02-12
Reads like a prayer, Tom. Beautifully crafted.


soaring

2019-02-12
Really love the way the flight takes place, delicately done. Reminded me of the movie 'The Birdman.'


Oneness? No, Nothingness

2019-02-12
I like the way the poem moves from a minnow to an eagle to humans. The philosophy of paradigm shift and that of nothingness works well, and binds the poem together.


What the West Wind has seen

2019-02-12
Love the way you've described the forest, the waterfall, the nature. I also like your adherence to the fixed number of syllables in each line. Octameter acatalectic, as it is called? All in all, this is nature writing at its best.


Another For J

2019-02-10
The life of a neglected artist, eh? Can very well relate to it, Larry.


JUST WHAT CAN WE DO?

2019-02-10
As Naipaul wrote, "The world is what it is." I don't think we can do much to change it.


Poe Fellow

2019-02-10
Powerful! Says a lot in few lines.


Daydream

2019-02-10
A poignant retelling of memories of your beloved. I like it.


The City Limits: An Essay

2019-02-10
Short, sharp lines. This is powerful writing.


in brief

2019-02-10
As brief as it could be. I like it.


Don't Look Outside

2019-02-10
I like the hide-and-seek game the sun plays, and the pretending game about the season (summer/winter).


Footprints in the snow

2019-02-05
This miniature poem is quite picturesque. I especially like the use of fourteneer, the iambic heptameter, with perfect rhymes.


The Troubadour's Plea

2019-02-04
This is sad, but I like the idea of "troubadour," the ancient poet-singer of Middle Ages. And, the minions. Maybe the sullen minions need a good thrashing. :D


77th Letter (Revised)

2019-02-04
Quite picturesque! I like the way the French painters sneak into the poem, making it rich in meaning; and thereby its interpretation.


Listless

2019-02-04
We've all been there, with bouts of listlessness. I really like the way you've used short stanzas, and the way they conveyed the listlessness of the speaker.


Air

2019-02-01
I like this.The last line is quite epigrammatic.


Drowning

2019-02-01
Sometimes dreaming keeps us alive, saves us from going crazy. I can very much empathize with the speaker.


When Will We See Spring Again?

2019-02-01
This poem reminds me of the song "Where have all the flowers gone?" I find similarity in terms of rhythm.


Second Best at Best

2019-01-30
Reads like an ode to materialistic love. Meticulously crafted, Larry.


SciFi

2019-01-30
Touché. And quite witty indeed.


The hills of Anacapri

2019-01-29
Love this sonnet, the rhythm and cadence of it.


Home and Away

2019-01-29
Love these snippets of prose poems.


Philosophical Dentistry

2019-01-27
Somerset Maugham once wrote that in each shave lies a philosophy. Reading your poem makes the reader feel that even a trivial act of 'losing a tooth' leads one into a philosophical musing. Well-writ, Joe. I also like the wit and humor that are in it.


A Sage's Sorrow

2019-01-27
I second Tom! Love the rhythm, the slow cadence of the poem.


A January Night

2019-01-27
Hopeful and affecting. Unlike the one I wrote!


A Sunny Winter Afternoon

2019-01-27
Nicely done! Like the analogy of the cat and the speaker.


Let an Old Man Dream

2019-01-27
As the Indian writer, Khushwant Singh wrote in his novel, The Company of Women, that "an old man is left to his fantasies," the statement also rings to be true in your poem. Well-writ, Larry!


I write because ...

2019-01-27
Love the anaphora, "I write because," and the list of so many vivid details.


J as Jesus

2019-01-21
Separation is painful. Well-composed.


Fragment

2019-01-21
A snippet of life well encapsulated through this fragment.


Muddle

2019-01-21
I second Thomas! This is a well-written verse.


Buzzell Field

2019-01-21
A well-written homage.


Sonnet: ''The Good Earth''

2019-01-18
A very burning issue! And a gentle sonnet, smooth trimeters!


Populist

2019-01-18
'A nation of gourd-heads.' I like that image very much. A witty little poem.


Happy 44th birthday to me by Ann Wood

2019-01-16
Happy Birthday to you, Ann. May you have a wonderful year ahead. :)


Punch Drunk

2019-01-16
Even in such a stupefied state, you composed something beautiful.


Quilts and Guilt

2019-01-15
Very delightful and secure in cadence. Love the gentle, calm rhythm of the poem.


The wind in the plain

2019-01-15
A beautiful poetic word-painting! And I like your use of fixed number of syllables in every line.


See You in the Funny Papers

2019-01-15
I know the feeling, Larry. Beautifully executed!


winter

2019-01-10
Looks like a warm way to celebrate winter. Love the atmosphere you've set.


Two by Philodemos

2019-01-10
I should definitely read more of his works. Thanks for sharing, Jim.


79th Letter

2019-01-10
Touché!


Stuck in Dallas

2019-01-10
Airports are the places, the liminal zones, where such a diverse multitude of people throng. One can feel one's own existence shirking. Well-depicted, Larry.

Bibek