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Bibek

25 years old from Nepal


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Blue Moon

2019-07-10
Must be a wonderful company: you and Colt. I can picture the two people vividly. 'Peacefulness and contentment' in nights like those are something to cherish.


Ethereal

2019-07-10
This is so picturesque. The way you depict one image after another reminds me of Cezanne's paintings. I like this "ethereal" work of art.


I'M NOT

2019-06-28
Tap-tap-taping is the key idea, Ken. That what separates the people who write from people who think/talk about writing. "Poet/Verser" are just self-referential epithets.


A Hopeful Loser's Complaint

2019-06-13
Been there, done that! I know how it feels to be a "hopeful loser." In one way or another, we are all romantic fools, aren't we? Anyway, it is a well-written poem. The end-rhymes and iambs work well.


colin whistles

2019-06-11
I like the scene you've painted with short, almost terse phrases. I think the enjambments work well in that word-painting as one thought jumps over the other line.


Homage to S. Pickwick

2019-06-10
Wasn't Pickwick Papers a magazine run by Charles Dickens? I think I'll have to research a bit to find out more. Anyway, 'tis a fine poem, lyrical, rich in vivid details. The imagery of dancing tittlebat made me smile. You describe the pond and fish in an interesting way!


waking

2019-06-10
The poem reverberates with a Zen-like quality: constant watching. Mindfulness is something I have been fascinated with. And when one's being watchful, "adjectives fall away, then nouns." What remains is is.


to bed

2019-06-07
A series of small talk? I've been reading this poem over and over again, and I'm not sure I get the intent.


F

2019-06-07
Sad. I love the portrayal of "little blue boy."


Poet or baby?

2019-06-04
Lovely! I like the dilemma: poet or baby? The last couplet sums the whole poem in a deft way.


I’ve heard it all before.

2019-05-30
Lyrical and beautiful.


Lord Byron's Improbable Lament

2019-05-30
Well-crafted, Ngoc! I can see the irony in it.


D

2019-05-29
A punch-like rhetorical question at the end. Touche!


Interlude

2019-05-29
Enjoy the work of copy editing, Coo & Co. I'll be waiting for your new poem. :)


at the bus stop

2019-05-28
Explains well the fragmentation and alienation of the postmodern humans. Cell phones don't really connect people, or do they?


C

2019-05-28
You explain it well--the act of making love (or recreating)--in thirteen beautiful lines.


at the train station

2019-05-28
Small talks. Love the cinematic feel of it.


B

2019-05-27
Sweet.


A

2019-05-27
A gloomy portrait. The enjambments work well.


"Seed of Love"

2019-05-25
I can see that free verse is kind of an experimental form to you, Ngoc. I like the way you've maintained the flow; reminds me of e e cummings. Sailing, ocean, Helen of Troy, and the grotesque image of fetus: everything's well-juxtaposed.


Undine; or Song for Solo :>)

2019-05-22
A heartfelt verse for the cygnets that have disappeared. The salience of prosody, the way you vary the beats alternatively, is quite commendable. I'm always in awe of poets who can write so beautifully.


“Time and Space”: A Sequence of Tanka Poems

2019-05-22
Structurally well-put. I like the way you have blended science and poetry together. Well-writ indeed!


madly, insistently

2019-05-22
I like the litany-like use of auditory imagery, and the denouement that comes with the ultimate word "silence."


Fragment II

2019-05-22
Love the phonetic cohesion of both the stanzas, especially the "splashing, thrashing, crashing" line.


love letter to a honda

2019-05-17
This is light-hearted yet witty. A pleasure to read.


"Rapture"

2019-05-13
Beautifully crafted, Ngoc. You've powerfully poeticized the bipolar disorder. This poem took me back to the time when I was depressed myself and used to binge read Sylvia Plath. It was Plath's "Ariel" that helped me feel better.


Charity

2019-05-07
A poem with a deep message within. :)


YET ONE MORE ROYAL PAIN IN THE ARCE!

2019-05-07
Wondering who that person is ...


General Lavine

2019-05-07
A superlative effort! I wholeheartedly cherish the rhythmic quality, the phonetic juxtapositions of the poem. I especially enjoyed the repetitions of certain phrases like "roll up," "NYC" and "juggling."


at the de young

2019-05-06
I like the way you make comparisons between Johannes Vermeer's "Girl with a Pearl Earring" to the blonde in faded denim. The apparent clash between lifeless art and life-throbbing-with-sensuality is pretty visible.


Fairies are exquisite dancers

2019-04-24
I'm in awe with the musicality: the Coo-co-co, the dactyls you've consistently used throughout your poem. Well-writ indeed!


My Son No Longer Shines

2019-04-24
I am sorry for your loss, Kathy. My heart now goes for you. May God give you all the strength to recuperate the hope that has been lost from your world. Stay strong!


The wine gate

2019-04-19
Beautifully composed!


for laurie bird

2019-04-05
A well-written requiem for Lauire Bird. I remember her from Annie Hall.


My Old Clothes

2019-04-05
This reads like a prayer. I love the extended metaphor (the old clothes) and the way you relate it to body/soul dualism.


Mists

2019-04-05
A marvelous feat! I am in love with this sonnet form and the use of full rhymes: they depict the mist-filled environment quite vividly!


Minstrels

2019-03-19
I love the phonetic cohesion, the musicality that is in this sing-song poem.


Life Made Anew

2019-03-06
Wonderful comeback poem! Good to see you posting again, Kathy. :)


Frost

2019-03-06
Almost Zen-like. Captures the everyday moment of winter time.


The submerged cathedral

2019-03-06
I echo the comments of Tom and Kathy: a truly well-crafted verse!


Across the Distance

2019-03-01
A nice comeback poem. Good to see you again, Ashe. :)


Driving in the Dismal Season

2019-03-01
Terse lines. Sums up the feeling of driving in the dismal season.


I CONFESS!

2019-02-27
I can relate to the feeling, Ken. Happy Reading! :)


Interrupted serenade

2019-02-27
A poetic story in meter and rhyme. Lovely. :)


Coming into Town

2019-02-27
Quite picturesque. Vivid details. Portrays your part of the world.


Sweden!

2019-02-23
I like the effort and the use of "nature" in haiku. I also like the format of 5-5-5 syllables in each line. Do you know that there is another oftentimes used format of 5-7-5 also?


would that it were red

2019-02-23
I like the way there is a certain shift in tone between the two parts of the poem. The first one seems relaxed while the second one a bit jerky. I guess it was intentional, right?


night terror

2019-02-20
A hint of surrealism as the "vast and black and infinite" void seeps into the psyche of the speaker at this witching hour.


The girl with the flaxen hair

2019-02-20
Beautiful! The variation of twelve and nine syllables, and the anapests. :)


A View of Frost

2019-02-14
Reminds me of Frost's 'Stopping by the Woods ...' The rhyme, the meter, the cadence: everything feels like a homage to the poet.