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The sound of...

2019-03-22
Beautiful work, confident and unfaltering. Thank you so much.


IT IS POETRY DAY!

2019-03-21
Hear, hear! I totally agree, Ken! Every day is indeed Poetry Day for us poets!


The doll Namerushka by Ann Wood

2019-03-21
I cherish the details of this story, vividly conveyed. Many thanks for posting it!


I'LL PASS ON THE BEADS! (Addishanel Lines)(With thanks To Thomas DeFreitas Work)

2019-03-20
Excellent reflection, Ken. And I'm always glad when something I've written provokes a thoughtful (and poetic!) response. Thanks for this poem!


Part V The Laird Jake...Of Duff and Hog Town

2019-03-20
I am utterly enchanted by this rhyme of a modern mariner!


THE BENCH FOR SILENCE!

2019-03-20
Wonderful encounter!


who cares yes she does

2019-03-19
Such a beautiful ending. And compelling throughout. Thanks for posting.


CHOREOGRAPHERS

2019-03-19
I like this poem, the phrasings and the alertness of the observation. I like the ending! Keep writing, please, and keep posting!


Human Nature

2019-03-19
A devastating first line, and a strong poem throughout.


Minstrels

2019-03-19
Your ability -- nay, agility! -- within the strictest of prosody is a constant source of gratitude. I especially cherish the catalogue of musical instruments.

The Thirsty Old Newt! Sounds great!

Oh, and I adore "swimmering" and "briskery"! And "shakering"!


What the World Needs Now

2019-03-18
Amen.


Sunday

2019-03-18
Masterful! There's so much I missed, good and bad, by having been born after the Council.

Good to see the ol' Tantum Ergo! (You can still hear it in certain places in Boston.)

I love that the priest's homily is as incomprehensible as the Latin prayers, but Dad's "homily" is fully comprehensible!

Excellent job.


On a cane ash

2019-03-17
Such a vivid image, beautifully described!


Weirdly

2019-03-17
An open mind and an open heart. That is the healthiest way.


Part IV The Laird Jake... Stranger Than True...

2019-03-16
I'm charmed by many things here, but especially by the rhyme of master/bastard. And I'm implicated by (caught up in) the story!


Dear Cecilia.

2019-03-16
I love poems that ask questions! And I admire the form of the poem, ratherlike a litany. Glad you posted!


Grace at the time of leaving

2019-03-16
A wonderful acknowledgment of Nancy's importance to you. A winsome litany of gratitude! After "for these we give thanks," one is tempted to say, "Amen!"

Although this experience was yours specially and personally, you've made it universal. We all can identify!


Anaïs and Henry

2019-03-14
Bravo! I especially like the closing rhyme.


The rebel in her

2019-03-14
Beautifully recounted.


III The Laird Jake...Chickenoli Reef

2019-03-14
Compelling and eminently readable. I'm so glad you decided to publicise this engaging long poem!

Peace and light, as always.


Puck's dance

2019-03-12
Me and Ginger. Thirteen times a day, at least!

I love this "rap." I like especially the second half of the third quatrain, the shepherd's pie, the hoovered stairs. And yes, the windfalls!

Bravissimas all around!


seasons change for the better

2019-03-12
I love the line about the black-eyed susans. It's so palpable, so real.

Would you consider "and I didn't know what it meant" instead of "I knew not of what it meant" in the seventh line? And is it "rain" in the second line (for "raid")?

Your poetry is so vivid, so real: "the shades of blue that harbored in your eyes" is beautifully articulated. Also, the daisy/snow August/Arizona stanza seems especially well done.

Very grateful to have read this poem. Thank you.


Baked Burgundy

2019-03-12
Scrumptious!


A Thought on Death in the Dismal Season

2019-03-11
That's pretty much what happened to my dad, who died in not-quite-spring (March 2 in New England).


The Past

2019-03-10
A very solid poem, in which each word radiates poetic intensity. Thank you for posting it.


Nowy Swiat 16:00

2019-03-10
"Their world, impossibly in balance." An engaging and well-painted portrait of the scene and its characters. Thank you.


THE BIG BRIGHT YELLOW DOORS CAFE! (An Additional Line)(Work Completed)

2019-03-08
Yes, indeed, the irony! You paint the scene well.


The World Just An Animal Stable

2019-03-08
I love the structure of this poem, and of course, the characteristic humour!


Slam Poetry

2019-03-08
I've seen a few good slam performances, but yes, when it degenerates to sloganeering or to structureless emissions of ungoverned emotions (shouted to lend a certain ersatz vibrancy), then one can't help but agree with your assessment.

At any rate, a fine poem!


First Lenten morning

2019-03-07
Ah, yes, the transient jollity of the revels!

I love: "The gutters run with a sultry rain." An expert weaving of sounds!


Three years on

2019-03-07
I prize and cherish the line "I tattooed his weakness on myself"; and the image of the herd of elephants looking for food is also poetically powerful!


When Eclipse Fight

2019-03-06
The opening two stanzas are very strong indeed, and I like the rhyme scheme you've chosen!


The submerged cathedral

2019-03-06
Truly fine work: fluent, accomplished, shapely, lovely. Top-notch!


Ash Wednesday

2019-03-06
Beautifully articulated. Thank you.


une visite de l'après-midi d'été à l'église en Provence

2019-03-05
Beautiful pace, graceful but not overly precious diction, skilled exposition of what your mind beheld! I'm really taking great joy in your poems of late.


Good Richard of Erko

2019-03-05
I like this one. And you needn't apologize for warped humour! It's said that one of W. H. Auden's favourite poems was this:

Into the drinking well
The plumber built her,
Aunt Maria fell:
We must buy a filter.

It came from a book called "Ruthless Rhymes for Heartless Homes"!


Earth

2019-03-05
Yes! Who says poetry can't make us laugh? Good one!

peace and light
Tom


The Taste

2019-03-04
A fine poem, Anna, one which makes me wish that you posted here more often!


Frost

2019-03-04
Very appealing! Like a freer version of the cinquain form. Thank you so much for posting it!


Relative

2019-03-03
Welcome to Poetbay! Thank you for posting.

I admire the poem's vivid imagery, keeping the reader alert.


Rhapsody on a Spring Afternoon

2019-03-02
Wowzers, Mr O, you are on a roll! This poem is just plain GOOD. Almost Dylan-Thomas-like in the opening stanza, the Hopkinsian tongue-twistery of "stover and straw stubble" and "oiled black soil," even "whipped" so close to "drifts"!

Thank you kindestly, sincerestly, and effusively!


Calling a Dog With No Legs

2019-03-01
Serious whimsy, unfaltering and vivid! Gratitude to the author!


For My Girlfriend

2019-03-01
Adept and accomplished, sinewy and strong. Thank you for posting this fine poem!


Across the Distance

2019-02-28
Good to see you posting again!


Star-Crossed, or Something

2019-02-28
"Washington/ Will hobble you with murk and drizzle." These words, especially well chosen.


Driving in the Dismal Season

2019-02-28
"Unwanted snow/ Incumbering the pines" is beautiful both rhythmically and verbally. It is of such delights that poetry is made!


Ponderings

2019-02-27
Oh, beautiful poem, Joseph!


One World

2019-02-27
I like the note of hope! We could all use more hope! Thanks for posting.


Room For Rumination

2019-02-26
I'm liking that alien! More about him, please!


My Winter Lair

2019-02-26
Excellent! The second stanza especially attracts. The four-beat eight-syllable line seems to suit you, here as in your poem on Frost! Bravo from this address.