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Thistles

2019-05-25
This is quite good. I cherish the poem for its verbal economy, its vividness, and its "twist" --- reminiscent, in some ways, of the short gnomic poems by the American Stephen Crane (1871-1900).

Excellent!


Haiku for Judith Kerr RIP

2019-05-24
A fitting tribute!


Embossed Love

2019-05-23
There's a trace of the poet Wendy Cope about this fine quatrain's ruefully experienced wit. Bravo, as always!


Chapters 4-11

2019-05-23
Jim, this is fine work. Everything's so clear, so gritty, and yes, so hard-boiled. A pleasure to read!


Buddha

2019-05-23
There is charm, fluency, and clarity in these lines. I especially cherish the last two stanzas. Keep posting!


To Sarah Kay

2019-05-22
Oh, yes, I've encountered poetry that makes my cat purr in fright, and my cat is ceramic! Excellent job on this blank sonnet. I cherish "moonshine" and "hooch," the glancing allusion to Ginsberg, and the appearance of the iPhone.


Protean

2019-05-21
This reader is familiar with the sensation of being alone and bewildered, lost in crowds of friends. Well done.


Fragment II

2019-05-21
There is power and economy in these lines. Very good indeed! And it made me think of an old Latin saying "Respice stellam": look to the star!


Undine; or Song for Solo :>)

2019-05-21
Winsome, fluent, masterful, charming. Applause!


Goodness

2019-05-20
"smirched by the agony of cleansing" is a powerful phrase!


You Are With Me

2019-05-19
I enjoyed reading this. A sensitive address/portrayal!


A Vignette of Nature

2019-05-18
This is a beautiful poem, proving that you are as adept without rhyme as with! A splendid job! Thanks for posting it.


"Quantum Mechanical": An Exercise in the Lyrical

2019-05-18
Oh, great fun! Bravo!


falling in love with life through you

2019-05-12
There are some very fresh phrases in this poem: "this delicately broken day"; "this wounded sky"; "melancholy drenched serenity"; and this reader cherishes the specificity of "the dark stained glass from the baptist church." This is a poem in which images of gentleness and sharpness, of delicacy and distress, are orchestrated nicely.


Jedadiah

2019-05-12
This is a fine and compelling sequence; and, to this eastern city boy, the idiom seems spot-on. Many fine touches!


a n x i e t y

2019-05-09
An innovative and surprising villanelle!

I plan to spend some time absorbing and appreciating this poem. Excellent work, Aidan!


Another Lovesong

2019-05-08
A singular pleasure to read. A beautiful exposition of your theme, and a deft handling of the prosodical challenge of a rhymed pantoum. Bravo, and indeed, bravissimo!


Trace

2019-05-06
I like the rhythm, the shape, the contours, of this poem. The imagery is especially strong in the second stanza. The rhythm is impeccable in the fourth. And I like five-line stanzas! (We poets of the Anglosphere so rarely use them!)


My Home

2019-05-06
Oh, yes! Lines three and four: so accurate! And the unforeseen felicity of the ending.


Buddleia

2019-05-06
This poem has an immediacy and a sharpness that I cherish. I don't find it self-indulgent; rather, an achievement!


build it beautiful, break it badly

2019-05-04
This is remarkable writing. Vivid, sharp, compelling.


at the de young

2019-05-03
i like this a lot. the apparent change of subject in the closing couplet. it all fits, and beautifully. and i was thinking of the girl with the pearl earring earlier this week! (eye doctor was wearing a pearl earring.)


sapphic

2019-05-03
oh, excellent! sharp and satisfying.


Hush, now

2019-05-01
A beautiful poem! The rhythm and the phrasing attract one instantly.


yellow

2019-04-30
Your fourteen-line poems are so much like fingerprints. No two are ever the same in shape or rhythm or topic. This is a wonderful exploration of yellow, and you've ended with the object (slices of pineapple!). Bravo!


Happy Easter to my family and friends who are celebrate Easter today by Ann Wood

2019-04-30
Blessings, peace, light, and happy Easter!


Colors

2019-04-30
Sturdy rhyme, controlled metre, a very readable poem!


BruyŤres

2019-04-30
How beautiful. The gentle alliteration of "told in tunes and tomes." The red-roofed shops and homes, and of course Sylvie. It's not even May, and you are bringing us flowers of the fairest! (Poetically speaking.) Thanks so much for this fine sonnet.


When Thought And Reason Go Asunder

2019-04-30
We are poets! Our thought and reason may go haywire but if we keep our sense of humour, all is well. Happy birthday, kind sir!


Goth Princess

2019-04-30
I like the straight description and then your editorial, as it were, fresh language: "shouting a defiant slouch"! And the perfectness of "a small woman on guard against an intrusive world." Well captured!


Iíll Sally Out to You Tonight

2019-04-24
A powerful poem! Glad to have helped.


Daydream

2019-04-23
I cherish especially the first two stanzas and the last one. I'm charmed by the fresh phrase "haphazard trek"! And the delicacy, indeed the poignancy, of the last two lines. Thank you for sharing this daydream!


Saved by Mediocrity

2019-04-23
I like this a lot. Can't quite say why. I think I'm liking the directness of the presentation, the specificity, and the echo of my inveterate distaste for high-school heartthrobs.


The light in the stillness of the night

2019-04-23
The phrases that resonate with me: "the still darkness of the boundless night"; "the naked beauty of the moon"; "music of beauty springs"; "All is clear beyond fear."

As always, I cherish the soul-affirming tenor of what you present here at Poetbay. Peace and light.


Palm Sunday by Ann Wood

2019-04-23
You present Palm Sunday beautifully in this well-made poem.


Fairies are exquisite dancers

2019-04-23
The poetry team of Coo & Co does not falter. Their leaf does not wither; their lustre suffers no tarnish.

My favourite moment in this poem is what might be termed the "homely" gratitude of "thankful for buttered toast." But to single this moment out is not to diminish the others.

Beautifully articulated and supremely well done.


Miriam IV ... The Tavern Courtyard

2019-04-22
Vivid and wonderfully depicted. This is a very good sequence.


Miriam V ... Of Life and Death Eternal

2019-04-22
Excellent, sir.


My Son No Longer Shines

2019-04-18
Kathy, please be assured of my most ardent prayers for your son's repose and for the healing and consolation of you and your family. So terribly sorry to hear of your loss.


Miriam II...Antonius

2019-04-18
A poem to be read and to be re-read. Thank you so much for posting it.


After the Fire

2019-04-17
A memory exposited with an expert hand, and with keen sensitivity. Excellent work, Larry.


Notre Dame

2019-04-17
Ineffably and poignantly beautiful. Thank you so much for posting this poem.


Defiance

2019-04-17
"fractured lines of burden and mere survival"

"dusty hues of apathy and careless pain"

"fumbling through the cold fingered hates"

---these lines, despite or perhaps because of the bleak mood, give off poetic electricity

Thank you so much for posting this poem.


Remember Me

2019-04-15
Moving and potent in its wise simplicity. Bravo Z!


UNFORGETTABLE! (ADDITIONAL STANZERS)

2019-04-15
Marvellous, Ken. I applaud your deep respect for the world's collective wisdom!


The wine gate

2019-04-15
Wonderful. I cherish the gently comic tone of the second stanza, the utterly enchanting beauty of the final stanza, and the poet's sure hand throughout.


Tsunami

2019-04-15
You aptly convey both the insurmountable adversity and the urge to surmount it. Thank you for posting!


The Dishwasher

2019-04-14
So many excellences in these almost Rimbaud-like quatrains. I cherish the specificity of the French fries and Coke, the beer- and espresso-bars. I would love to dwell a long time with the phrases "the liberty of loneliness" and "the orange sacrament of spoiled dreams," as they enchant one powerfully.


VIII The Laird Jake...Home Free...almost

2019-04-14
The saga continues! And the reader is electric with anticipation to see how it all turns out!


Dead leaves

2019-04-09
I admire this poem immensely.