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Conversational Atoms

2018-09-20
Science can be fun --- and poetic!


Song of the Samson spirits

2018-09-20
Bravissima! A well-wrought villanelle in alexandrines! (And how true line seven is, as we here in the USA can attest.)


A Fleeting Thought

2018-09-19
"soaked/ In the neon lights of long loneliness."

I'm loving that line (and the poem as a whole! --- but that line is especially powerful ...)


Knowledge

2018-09-17
I love the fact that the poem is, for the most part, built on just two rhymes! Pulling off quadruple or quintuple rhyme ain't easy!


MY MIND LIKE THAT OF A SPIDER!

2018-09-17
You and me both, Ken! It's gladdening to know that I'm not alone!


Drowning

2018-09-17
Impeccable. A poem which captivates with its potency, and delights with its artistry.


Finally—The Rain

2018-09-14
An artistic accomplishment, beautifully made. Thank you for posting it!


Cross Paths to Perish the Thought

2018-09-12
I am ineluctably fascinated!


Crazy

2018-09-12
This poem is a palpable joy! Thank you for posting it.


Tonight

2018-09-11
Marvellously vivid and multifaceted (and, as Shahid Ali would be the first to remind us, a certain "disjunctiveness" is the glory of the ghazal!).


WHILE WAITING FOR THE LOOP (Another Snapshot Of IN A Day Of My Life!)

2018-09-07
Marvellous. In this day and age, especially, to hear of such wonderfully heartwarming human contact --- it is genuinely good for the soul!


Not Me Today

2018-09-07
I think of Thomas Hardy as I read this poem. And yes, I do intend praise!


The Trick is to Keep Looking

2018-09-07
Very painterly. I like it immensely. My sole semi-complaint is that I wish it were a bit longer so I could immerse myself for a longer time in the world of the poem. But one can always re-read, yes?


Inherited

2018-09-07
This is a fine poem, Sameen. I see Dylan Thomas's influence both in the six-line stanzas and in the measured pace of the poem. Well done!


Empty Chrysalis

2018-09-07
Vivid, poignant, beautiful.


Largo Tranquillo

2018-09-05
You convey the scene beautifully. And the cadence of the poem is as gentle as it should be.


Nothing On Sale

2018-09-05
I love this.


Siren

2018-09-04
I like the phrasing of "bound to her/ Inhospitable patch of shore" a lot.


SUMMER IN TO AUTUMN!

2018-09-03
I cherish the realism of this poem!


I Turn to Verse

2018-09-03
The villanelle manages to be both controlled and fluent. It has a sure hand, but the sure hand never becomes so heavy as to strangle the flow. Bravo!


The Rising

2018-09-02
Welcome to Poetbay, and thank you for posting!


September by Ann Wood

2018-09-02
Beautiful cadence, compelling diction, some novelty of phrasing, superlative specificity: a marvel and a poem to cherish. Thank you for posting it!


Ordinary people

2018-08-31
Good to read your post! Welcome to Poetbay!


A Beautiful, Useless Thing

2018-08-23
I love the title! And the second line is a lovely and perfect pentameter. There's a kind of Dante "mezzo di cammin" feel to the poem (in the opening to the Inferno, Dante finds himself "midway in the path of life, lost in a dark wood").

I cherish, too, the stoically unromantic view of the stars that you give us. They're not beacons, they're not sacred candlelight, they're "useless" --- it's marvellously de-poeticized! (In a good way!)

There may be places where you can tweak or alter, but my impression of the poem is overwhelmingly positive. Good to see you posting here at Poetbay!


Dirge And Gloria In Three Movements

2018-08-23
There are many masterful moments in this brief piece, from the metaphor of the first line to the renewing simplicity of the last. Bravo and thank you!


Moonlight, Abbey Garden

2018-08-22
I loved this, your own heptametric march through the abbey! And I have what can only be described as holy envy for the strict/Benedict rhyme! Brava!


Fragments of a Day

2018-08-21
This poem is an achievement: formidable and unflinching in its vividness, rich in its specific references, and absolutely secure in its idiom and cadence. I am grateful for the Glossary, as it helps elucidate the references with which I'm not familiar. I think that you've given us a poem that anyone would be proud to have written, but which only you could write! Bravissimo!


Prayer to the Most Holy Mother by Dessislava Dimitrova traslated by Ann Wood

2018-08-16
A beautiful prayer, thank you for posting it.


Susan Hanging Hearts

2018-08-14
Oh, how beautiful!


Sonnet for a Lonely Masturbator

2018-08-13
I admire your consistency of dedication to the "traditional" forms, and also admire the bravery of choosing such a modern topic! A very successful poem, which I am grateful to have read.


humor and hatred

2018-08-13
Supremely strong beginning to the second stanza, the first two lines of stanza two simply amazing. A strong and affecting poem throughout. Thank you for sharing it here.


DEATH OF THE POET HEDD WYN! (ELLIS HUMPHREY EVANS) (WW1)

2018-08-13
Awesome, Ken. My cousin's Welsh fiancée was telling me about Hedd Wyn one Christmas Eve quite recently. Very good work.


A very English cowboy

2018-08-12
So sorry for your loss. This is an affecting and delightful tribute to your friend.


Rest, listen, look and see

2018-08-08
Beautifully articulated, with so much luminous specificity. Thank you for posting this poem!


Unconscious ramblings

2018-08-07
Superlative.


TWO OLD HEAVY METAL FANS!

2018-08-07
I love this, Ken! It cheers my heart to learn of these old adventurers!


For the Leftovers

2018-08-06
Wow, visceral and vivid!


Caribbean Idyll

2018-08-05
Almost like a villanelle. Nice job!


Sonnet

2018-08-02
I'm very impressed that you built this sonnet on just two rhymes! Bravissimo! (And yes, the last line is a good sound pentameter: three trochees, two iambs.)


In Mind, if Nowhere Else

2018-08-02
There's a kind of stoic bravery to these lines, and your customary clearness and specificity. Excellent work!


Love...

2018-08-01
A cheerful exploration of the many facets of love in human thought and culture!


Carpe Diem

2018-07-30
The quiet cat. Excellent image! And then, yes, particularly in summer, it does shout! Thank you for posting this poem.


sunday social

2018-07-30
Thank you for this wonderful glimpse at your Sunday social!


Portrait of a Woman

2018-07-27
Excellent work, fluent and confident iambic. I note the debt to Millay in the first line, but otherwise this is very much your own poem. And a fine poem it is!


there will be no full stop

2018-07-26
I cherish especially the last three lines of the third stanza and the last three lines of the fourth and final stanza.

You always present the reader with a fascinating world!


Resolved

2018-07-23
I like the rhythm of this poem very much.


As Time Goes By

2018-07-22
Aw, shoot. I used Day three times. Oh well.


Evening Song

2018-07-22
Villanelles exert an undeniable charm for me, and this one is beautifully articulated.


Jaanu

2018-07-21
Welcome to poetbay!


The Whales Arrive at Montijo Bay

2018-07-20
That's awesome. About to bookmark!