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Dust of Snow

2018-11-15
I was 11 years old, in Mr Waldron's 7th-grade English class, when I first encountered this beautiful poem. It's stayed with me for the subsequent 38 years and counting!


Red

2018-11-11
Powerful poem which gathers steam as the stanzas progress!


Generations

2018-11-10
There's a wry wisdom here that appeals to me. Well done.


Inwardly Far Away

2018-11-09
Ah, someone else remembers "Harvey"! Good job!


Simply...Me

2018-11-09
The poem makes me ask: do you know E. E. Cummings' poem "dive for dreams"? At one point in the brief piece, Cummings says "never mind a world/ with its villains or heroes." The world does do its business quite well (or quite badly) without my help. To be at rest. I felt the blessedness of the last lines keenly. Thank you for posting this poem.


Demeanor

2018-11-08
The adverbs live! (And I know the feeling.)


Feint

2018-11-07
This is beautiful language, thoughtfully crafted. It captures the attention and rewards the reader immediately.


Still

2018-11-04
The poem's beginning is indeed strong --- you capture the reader's attention right away! --- and the subsequent lines don't let us down. Excellent work.


Across the Void

2018-11-04
I'm familiar with the feeling.


we are star children

2018-11-01
I don't think I've said so before, but I cherish your innovations that vestigially (and perhaps more than vestigially!) echo the sonnet form.


Sliver

2018-11-01
I fear that the adjective "congenital" is all too true. And I love the beautiful succinctness of the line, "We'll have croissants and cherish each other" --- witty and poignant at the same time!


The Tactile Feel of the Living

2018-11-01
Ah, yes --- for those days of "building community" the old-fashioned way, by "going out onto the road" or the coffee-shop or the pizza pad or wherever, and talking to someone "in real time"! A sharp observation, beautifully expressed.


Love at 18

2018-11-01
A bold and fascinating effort! I cherish the first two lines as being very strong (the place-names fortify the poem), and I love the phrase "squall/ with happy pain." Where many poets would write about this topic with full frontal crudity, you've wisely chosen to aim for a Keatsian sensuality.


Autumn Jinn

2018-10-30
Lively and fun to read!


Smell rags

2018-10-29
Superlative. Marvelously detailed and skillfully exposited.


Sonnet

2018-10-26
It was a privilege and a joy to help however I could. Your dedication to the formal aspects of poetry is commendable, and I enjoyed the wit of this piece especially.


Autumn Solo

2018-10-25
Oh, so many good things about this poem! The sharpness of the detail ("Lee rail wet with occasional wash"), the pleasantly surprising similes ("Starlight shaking like a wet hound"), the freshness, vividness, authenticity throughout. Bravo!


At the Daymark; or, When Coo & Co met the Jumblies :>)

2018-10-23
Greenial grin!


Going Home

2018-10-22
There's an attractive gentleness to the way you present the images of this poem. Or maybe I should say that the diction and cadence seem wonderfully matched. I like it a lot.


Hallow’een Memories

2018-10-21
Excellent work, Joseph: lots of alert and lively language! You paint the scene beautifully.


Up the côte

2018-10-18
"the sea seemed thick as treacled ink": that line garnered my immediate and favourable attention! the metre throughout is masterful, the idiom fluent and lively. bravissime (feminine plural) to Coo & Co.!

ps: the poem rewards being read aloud! readers, take note!


New Road

2018-10-15
Bibek, you have given us a poignant and well-made poem, with evident care taken with cadence and diction. I cherish the small litany in the third stanza: "A kilo of happiness, a packet of joy," etc. "The scraps of rusted reverie" is an enviable phrase! You have captured your scene supremely well.


Those Absent

2018-10-14
I like this a lot. A kind of amalgam between early T. S. Eliot and "Nowhere Man" --- in your own inimitable voice and style. Bravo!


Rubaiyat for You

2018-10-11
I commend your tireless exploration of the classical forms! And this poem is a moving and beautiful lyric --- I especially cherish the muddy puddles as castaways, and several other fine touches. Bravo!


America

2018-10-09
I applaud the noble impulse of this poem, and find myself looking for (in the words of Sir Paul McCartney, from a 1990s solo effort) "hope of deliverance from the darkness that surrounds us."

Hey, if Larry's a Leninist and I'm a McCartneyist, maybe he and I should start a band. Hmmm...


Patriotism 101

2018-10-06
An effective lampoon! I like many moments of this poem: to isolate two, I love when the speaker asks, "Why are they no wearing more of cool Buddha t-shirts?" ... and I love the list of all the things that Oli is bringing to Nepal, from "electric trains" to "contraception"!


Detroit River Scape

2018-10-05
Vivid and beautifully presented ("nameless Stalinesque edifices" seem to be the architectural bane of many an American city, alas!). Very good work.


Balance Acts

2018-10-03
Very appealing poem! About to be bookmarked.


Highway Town

2018-10-03
I think I'm going to bookmark this one. Excellent work.


Convalescence

2018-09-28
Oh, I've had those days, when I've had to count sixes and fours for either aspirin or cough medicine or regular medications. You describe the situation well, from a place of knowledge. And of course, I join in the wishes for your betterment of health.


Sky Tonight

2018-09-28
The rhymes are placed beautifully in this poem, subtly and with great grace.


Callous Voices, Ears and Eyes

2018-09-28
A well-made rhyme, and one that masks a deep truth behind its apparent "lightness" .... excellent!


From the Terrace

2018-09-28
Alert diction, secure cadence, and a painterly attention to the world around you! Bravo!


Mist

2018-09-24
I'm ineluctably attracted to this beautiful prose-poem. Thank you for posting it!


This October Night

2018-09-23
Revised to expand a little on the rumours!


Woman on the turn

2018-09-23
I prize especially the lines about the willows.


Standing at the Crossroads

2018-09-23
I am implicated --- caught up! --- in the beauty of this poem. So many moments compel this reader's attention: the shimmering stars; the eyelid's blink; the vulture voyeurs ... I find, for myself, that it's often salutary to revisit older poems a few years after they've been written. The wisdom and experience we've gained can benefit and strengthen the poem.


Ablutions Afloat

2018-09-21
A pleasant look at the daily routine from a fascinating perspective! I enjoyed this poem.


Conversational Atoms

2018-09-20
Science can be fun --- and poetic!


Song of the Samson spirits

2018-09-20
Bravissima! A well-wrought villanelle in alexandrines! (And how true line seven is, as we here in the USA can attest.)


A Fleeting Thought

2018-09-19
"soaked/ In the neon lights of long loneliness."

I'm loving that line (and the poem as a whole! --- but that line is especially powerful ...)


Knowledge

2018-09-17
I love the fact that the poem is, for the most part, built on just two rhymes! Pulling off quadruple or quintuple rhyme ain't easy!


MY MIND LIKE THAT OF A SPIDER!

2018-09-17
You and me both, Ken! It's gladdening to know that I'm not alone!


Drowning

2018-09-17
Impeccable. A poem which captivates with its potency, and delights with its artistry.


Finally—The Rain

2018-09-14
An artistic accomplishment, beautifully made. Thank you for posting it!


Cross Paths to Perish the Thought

2018-09-12
I am ineluctably fascinated!


Tonight

2018-09-11
Marvellously vivid and multifaceted (and, as Shahid Ali would be the first to remind us, a certain "disjunctiveness" is the glory of the ghazal!).


WHILE WAITING FOR THE LOOP (Another Snapshot Of IN A Day Of My Life!)

2018-09-07
Marvellous. In this day and age, especially, to hear of such wonderfully heartwarming human contact --- it is genuinely good for the soul!


Not Me Today

2018-09-07
I think of Thomas Hardy as I read this poem. And yes, I do intend praise!


The Trick is to Keep Looking

2018-09-07
Very painterly. I like it immensely. My sole semi-complaint is that I wish it were a bit longer so I could immerse myself for a longer time in the world of the poem. But one can always re-read, yes?