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Stuck in the Mud

2019-01-23
Looking forward to the tires gaining purchase! Looking forward to the "many things"! Peace.


Gravitas

2019-01-22
I like this. Weirdly, for a somewhat churchy fellow, I like the line about having no use for gods and bishops, as the tone of it seems exactly right to me, and the rhythm doesn't waver.


THANET AND ITS WINTER! (Completed)

2019-01-22
Bless the woman in Ramsgate, a hardy cheerful soul!


Poets & Artists

2019-01-22
Bravo.


My Little Red Riding Hood

2019-01-21
Am especially fond of line 9! But the poem is solid and vivid throughout. And there's an evident "comfort level" with the pentameter, an ease of diction, that is admirable. Bravo!


Evolution

2019-01-20
I like how the rhymes fall in unexpected places! --- "free" and "spree" in proximity, but a little distance between "bane" and "plane"!


Funeral

2019-01-20
A very moving poem, exposited with an artist's perceptive skill.


A Necklace Full of Skulls

2019-01-18
Intriguing! I like it a lot.


the walking wounded

2019-01-18
Such a strong poem. Effective. Thank you for posting it. The power of unadorned, direct statement, and even understatement. The paternal silences. Well handled throughout the poem.


Muddle

2019-01-18
I like the voice of this poem, and of your other poems, vivid, colloquial, snappy if that's the right word. Glad to have read them!


Just Whistle

2019-01-18
Jaunty and vivid, lots of good imagery to latch onto!


To Rupi Kaur

2019-01-17
Acerbic, witty, vivid. An ingenious metaphor. Bravo!


How to Drink Tea

2019-01-15
Simple and winsome and satisfying on many levels. Bravo!


G-D

2019-01-08
I like the directness, the urgency. And I like the "shrewdly mended" line. Looking forward to reading more!


Temptation Way

2019-01-08
I am charmed. A joy to read!


Veils/Sails

2019-01-08
Oh, that's so beautiful ...


New Year’s Message

2019-01-04
Bravo! A sage perspective expressed wittily and warmly.


Haiku for a new year

2019-01-04
Wonderful! Peace to thee, sir!


A Newfound Vocation

2019-01-04
I like this. Direct and firm, and winsomely forthright. Perhaps I phrase it oddly. But good job!


The bus stop

2018-12-30
Supremely well done, keenly observed, articulated in crisp language. Glad to have read.

Happy New Year!


Summer’s Light in Winter’s Night

2018-12-30
Quintuple rhyme! And the light shineth in the darkness. Good to see you posting!

Peace and light.


The young German nurse Mareike by Ann Wood

2018-11-26
It's wonderful to see in everything you write the note of gratitude for the people in your life, past and present. It's such a positive thing to let others know how much we appreciate them!


Appraisal

2018-11-24
Economical, shapely language that exerts a certain magnetism over the reader ... I am glad to have read this poem!


Stop in the Name of Love

2018-11-24
A vigorous and lively piece! My favourite stanza is the one with the curmudgeon deserts.


Dust of Snow

2018-11-15
I was 11 years old, in Mr Waldron's 7th-grade English class, when I first encountered this beautiful poem. It's stayed with me for the subsequent 38 years and counting!


Red

2018-11-11
Powerful poem which gathers steam as the stanzas progress!


Generations

2018-11-10
There's a wry wisdom here that appeals to me. Well done.


Inwardly Far Away

2018-11-09
Ah, someone else remembers "Harvey"! Good job!


Simply...Me

2018-11-09
The poem makes me ask: do you know E. E. Cummings' poem "dive for dreams"? At one point in the brief piece, Cummings says "never mind a world/ with its villains or heroes." The world does do its business quite well (or quite badly) without my help. To be at rest. I felt the blessedness of the last lines keenly. Thank you for posting this poem.


Demeanor

2018-11-08
The adverbs live! (And I know the feeling.)


Feint

2018-11-07
This is beautiful language, thoughtfully crafted. It captures the attention and rewards the reader immediately.


Still

2018-11-04
The poem's beginning is indeed strong --- you capture the reader's attention right away! --- and the subsequent lines don't let us down. Excellent work.


we are star children

2018-11-01
I don't think I've said so before, but I cherish your innovations that vestigially (and perhaps more than vestigially!) echo the sonnet form.


The Tactile Feel of the Living

2018-11-01
Ah, yes --- for those days of "building community" the old-fashioned way, by "going out onto the road" or the coffee-shop or the pizza pad or wherever, and talking to someone "in real time"! A sharp observation, beautifully expressed.


Love at 18

2018-11-01
A bold and fascinating effort! I cherish the first two lines as being very strong (the place-names fortify the poem), and I love the phrase "squall/ with happy pain." Where many poets would write about this topic with full frontal crudity, you've wisely chosen to aim for a Keatsian sensuality.


Autumn Jinn

2018-10-30
Lively and fun to read!


Smell rags

2018-10-29
Superlative. Marvelously detailed and skillfully exposited.


Sonnet

2018-10-26
It was a privilege and a joy to help however I could. Your dedication to the formal aspects of poetry is commendable, and I enjoyed the wit of this piece especially.


Autumn Solo

2018-10-25
Oh, so many good things about this poem! The sharpness of the detail ("Lee rail wet with occasional wash"), the pleasantly surprising similes ("Starlight shaking like a wet hound"), the freshness, vividness, authenticity throughout. Bravo!


At the Daymark; or, When Coo & Co met the Jumblies :>)

2018-10-23
Greenial grin!


Going Home

2018-10-22
There's an attractive gentleness to the way you present the images of this poem. Or maybe I should say that the diction and cadence seem wonderfully matched. I like it a lot.


Hallow’een Memories

2018-10-21
Excellent work, Joseph: lots of alert and lively language! You paint the scene beautifully.


Up the côte

2018-10-18
"the sea seemed thick as treacled ink": that line garnered my immediate and favourable attention! the metre throughout is masterful, the idiom fluent and lively. bravissime (feminine plural) to Coo & Co.!

ps: the poem rewards being read aloud! readers, take note!


New Road

2018-10-15
Bibek, you have given us a poignant and well-made poem, with evident care taken with cadence and diction. I cherish the small litany in the third stanza: "A kilo of happiness, a packet of joy," etc. "The scraps of rusted reverie" is an enviable phrase! You have captured your scene supremely well.


Those Absent

2018-10-14
I like this a lot. A kind of amalgam between early T. S. Eliot and "Nowhere Man" --- in your own inimitable voice and style. Bravo!


Rubaiyat for You

2018-10-11
I commend your tireless exploration of the classical forms! And this poem is a moving and beautiful lyric --- I especially cherish the muddy puddles as castaways, and several other fine touches. Bravo!


America

2018-10-09
I applaud the noble impulse of this poem, and find myself looking for (in the words of Sir Paul McCartney, from a 1990s solo effort) "hope of deliverance from the darkness that surrounds us."

Hey, if Larry's a Leninist and I'm a McCartneyist, maybe he and I should start a band. Hmmm...


Patriotism 101

2018-10-06
An effective lampoon! I like many moments of this poem: to isolate two, I love when the speaker asks, "Why are they no wearing more of cool Buddha t-shirts?" ... and I love the list of all the things that Oli is bringing to Nepal, from "electric trains" to "contraception"!


Detroit River Scape

2018-10-05
Vivid and beautifully presented ("nameless Stalinesque edifices" seem to be the architectural bane of many an American city, alas!). Very good work.


Highway Town

2018-10-03
I think I'm going to bookmark this one. Excellent work.