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SITING AT WINDOW SEAT!

2018-06-25
I'm mightily encouraged by the wide encompassing empathy of everything you write, Ken. Good job.


DC Does You Dirty

2018-06-24
I like this. Vivid. Powerful.


Breaking News

2018-06-23
Alert, sensitive, detailed, compelling. An excellence.


The Blossom Trees

2018-06-22
Welcome to Poetbay! I love the image in the second-to-last stanza, of the petal stumbling as a baby crawls.


EVEN WHEN I CLOSE MY EYES!

2018-06-13
Me too! Always thinking about something!


Then I Close My Eyes

2018-06-13
A beautifully gentle poem. I like especially the line "like ghosts from the first century."


Browbeat

2018-06-13
I love the personification of the days!


Pastorale

2018-06-13
This is an excellence, indisputably so. Direct, simple, compelling as the best of Asian poetry.


Saturdays With Father 4 - The Conclusion

2018-06-08
Masterful, especially these lines (for me): "this aristocracy of desire,/ the dull bureaucracy of want."

Thank you for this sequence. This last poem instills the appetite to reread the other three, and simply to marvel at the skill, the emotional and esthetic accuracy.


Saturdays With Father 2

2018-06-06
Superlative, both 1 and 2. Brava, and indeed bravissima.


Seashore Silence

2018-06-03
There's a kind of Prufrockian flavour to "All that remains is the silent crashing/ Of rocky bottoms ..." that I really like. This is a thoughtful poem, meditative, perhaps more vivid in some spots than others, but I'm grateful to have read it, as it shows the conscientious care that you bring to all your work!


First Sad Sunday in June

2018-06-03
This poem has the vividness of the American blues. I especially like the part about cancelling your subscription to the dog-eared human race. But of course, I am sorry if this be your current mood. Nonetheless, well done, as usual!


Your face

2018-06-02
Very powerful, especially the first stanza. Bravissima! Bookmarking!


Clock Dance

2018-05-31
Yes. This poem likes me a lot. Or I like this poem. Bravo!

I might have to post something in a similar rhythm (I think it's called "skeltonic," two-beat lines that rhyme consistently.)


Too Far Away

2018-05-31
Hang in there. You're a good poet with a lot to contribute. I hope that the misery passes.


Melancholy on a Dark Night

2018-05-30
This reminds me in a good way, in both form and substance, of Lionel Johnson's poem "The Dark Angel," dating from the 1890s. Do you know the poem? I think it would strike a chord!


The Pure and the Depraved

2018-05-30
A fine description of the precarious but potent beauty of innocence.


untitled

2018-05-30
Traces of Edgar Allan Poe in the rhythms of the first stanza! (I intend praise: Poe was a master of metre.)

As always with your poems, very great care taken with the form. I think the short lines suit you very well!


Sonnet: "Matters of Global Priorities"

2018-05-30
Excellent. And the three-beat, six-syllable (give or take) lines are very well made: concise, sharply focussed. A joy to read!


Freedom From Your Love

2018-05-27
Effective, the repetition of "free," undergirding a thoughtful and measured poem, for which this reader is most grateful!


Mad Man’s Villanelle

2018-05-27
Bibek, I applaud your poetic tenacity, undaunted by the most imposing formal challenges!


Elegy: "Dear Mother"

2018-05-27
A heartfelt poem, carefully and conscientiously crafted.


uncomplicated

2018-05-24
I like this sequence a lot. (Am tempted to say, "You had me at 'marisa tomei'!") And I like the traces of our modern world: uber and skype as verbs, as we all use them now! A good read all round, and an engaging story.


Waves

2018-05-24
Excellent imagery!


Nod to Dylan Thomas

2018-05-19
An inspiring and beautiful homage to one of my favourite poets. Thank you for posting it!


“Rose” (Triolet Challenge) [updated]

2018-05-19
Nicely done!


To Rose

2018-05-17
A challenging stanza, which you've done quite well! Brava!


Of Sweden

2018-05-16
I always rejoice inwardly when I see a villanelle. And this particular villanelle enthralls me happily! Excellent work.


A Triolet

2018-05-16
Lovely!


Babble

2018-05-16
Admirable throughout. Good poem!


Portugal

2018-05-13
bravissima!


A Villanelle Composed on the Eve of May 8, 2018 (Challenge)

2018-05-11
An excellent first effort! And a very strong ending.


SUMMER HAS ARRIVDE!

2018-05-08
I like this immensely. We had three days last week (Wednesday through Friday) where the temperatures were 32C, 32C, and 29C. After an exceptionally damp and cold April.

Yesterday was mellow and around 17C. In fact, at 1 in the morning, we're down to a very cool 8C.

I think the word is "roller coaster"!


Sonnet: "Genius"

2018-05-07
I like this poem a lot: a well-made sonnet, and a diverting poetic essay on the nature of genius. Thank you for posting it!


Dis

2018-05-07
The rhythm of this poem is so firm, so secure, and so satisfying to this reader. Bravo!


Dreamily Drunk

2018-05-07
I cherish your wise whimsicality!


CHINESE WHISPERS!

2018-05-07
As an American, the expression "Chinese whispers" would have been unknown to me, were it not for the fact that it served as the title of one of John Ashbery's books, and a helpful reviewer explained it!

Excellent reflection, Ken, as always!


Isolation

2018-05-03
An artful, well-constructed poem. Welcome!


Half Giant, Whole Hunk

2018-05-02
I love "tally your freckles." Many fine, vivid touches in this forthright rhyme!


Break-up Villanelle

2018-05-02
Excellent! Your dexterity with the form leads me to believe that you'll return to it quite often. Or at least I hope you do!


To have loved and lost

2018-04-30
Excellent. A fine début for Poetbay!


Sonnet: “Outcast”

2018-04-30
This reminds me of Shakespeare's 29th sonnet, thematically. And it is very well-made, well-written!


"the sea"

2018-04-30
Welcome to poetbay!


Tuesday Mornings with Daaaaniel

2018-04-28
This poem is so very moving that it seems impertinent even to praise its poetic prowess, but I do praise it, and in the highest possible terms. You've given us a beautifully accomplished poem-portrait. Thank you.


This Decaffeinated Guy

2018-04-26
You had me at the title (although, to be sure, I'm very caffeinated myself)! And I love that last line.


My Coping Machine

2018-04-23
You've worked out the metaphor very well. I enjoyed many moments in this poem. I liked the Bob's Burgers stanza, even though I've never seen the show!


a lonely man once said

2018-04-22
I especially like the Bowery stanza and the John Lennon stanza, and am amazed by the freshness, the newness, and the aptness of "circled by the green fire/ of Central Park." Grateful to have read this poem!


Rain in Dublin

2018-04-21
I love the pacing of this poem, the rate at which you reveal the event, the careful measured diction, the precision. Brava!


Heart Full Heat Fool

2018-04-20
In my corner of the orb, we haven't had unseasonable heat, but an extended April Cool's Day!

Love this poem. Three cheers!


Mutually Assured Destruction

2018-04-19
I find the "We bled" section especially strong and powerful. Welcome to PoetBay!