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Thomas DeFreitas

50 years old from USA


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rimbaudian reverie

2019-09-14
Superlative. I remember the lindens in a Rimbaud poem.


Noise

2019-09-13
I cherish the winsome specificity of the three lines at the end of the first stanza. Thanks for posting this good poem!


i've learned to bite the hand that feeds me

2019-09-12
There's a lot going on here, all of it good, poetically speaking. I cherish the beginning lines of the last stanza, the contrast between the poets brooding over a notebook in a cafe and the poets who "stand tall at open mics."

Your work is alive. Keep writing!


A night nurse's notes at St. Vincent's Hospital, New York City, 1953

2019-09-06
Superlative. Moving. Bookmarked!


Iím shutting down for a while. Lost my creativity...gone looking for it.

2019-09-06
Joe, I'll miss your voice, wise and lighthearted, profound and probing, knowing and questioning, exploring always.

Wishing you peace, light, and restoration.


alone

2019-08-31
beauty and brevity! thank you for posting.


Last day of August 2019 by Ann Wood

2019-08-31
As always, Ann, I cherish the tone of gratitude in your work, your readiness to commemorate these occasions with winsome thanksgiving! I always welcome the fall!


Tomorrow

2019-08-31
I respond with enthusiastic concurrence to the first four lines of the third stanza! "The raw and ignoble noise/ that heralds the present" seems accuracy epitomised!

As I was reading, though, I found myself wishing for a greater number of concrete nouns and fewer abstract nouns.

But I do like certain turns of phrase here: "raucous, self-entitled Now." Yes. Quite true!


this coming weekend

2019-08-31
So many things to like about this. I like how you "liveblogged" the composing of the 4th sonnet, commented on its composition in medias res. And I, too, root for the underdog. Which is quite often the Red Sox, despite a recent spate of World Series victories. I like the conflict between wanting to see the sunrise and wanting to sleep in. And I cherish "i do wish you could hear her accent."


THEY SAY A FRIEND OF MINE HAD DIED (Inspired By The Work Of Jim)

2019-08-30
Wonderful reflection, Ken. And yes, it is quite true!


The Tocsin

2019-08-26
Excellent. The repetitions are effective, and the articulation is worthy of the theme.


matchmaker

2019-08-26
A beautiful sequence of unrhymed sonnets. I will read, re-read, and probably bookmark!


Prague?

2019-08-24
This poem fascinates. It's alive with possibility.


Heavenly haiku

2019-08-24
Tres bon, comme toujours!


Some things I think about

2019-08-24
As I read this tonight, I'm moved especially by the image of the elderly giving life to their gardens. Thank you for these random thoughts!


Nice summer day by Ann Wood

2019-08-23
23 degrees is just perfect (Celsius). Boston, Massachusetts was up around 33 today. A mite too warm for me!

I cherish the consistent note of gratitude in this poem, and in many others you've written.


My Motherís Hands

2019-08-23
A superlative and comprehensive catalogue of all the things at a mother's hands can do and have done! Excellent poem, Marie.


the pink room

2019-08-21
This is a tight-as-a-drum, supremely well-constructed poem. No excess verbiage, every word contributory. Puts me in mind of Ted Kooser's work.


Life

2019-08-21
I like the short two-line stanzas, each the ideal conveyance for a single image (and maybe a thought about the image). Strong poem, Joe. Thanks for posting it!


tap water and tea leaves

2019-08-21
This is one of my favourites among your poems. The language seems very economical, and the imagery quite strong.


Sonnet to a cat

2019-08-21
Nicely done, Marie! (I especially like "spits and snarls," two strong verbs so close to one another.) A gracefully painted portrait throughout.


SOMETIMES ALL WE HAVE

2019-08-19
A beautiful reminder of the gift of listening, the gift of presence.


Truth

2019-08-18
A valiant prayer and a noble poem!

One could write a companion piece called "Compassion," and the lament would ring just as true. Particularly if one pays attention to certain figures of national repute in the USA.


Husband Moncho helps with Dinner

2019-08-18
Excellent writing, Marie!


Haiku for Peter Fonda

2019-08-18
I've never seen a Peter Fonda movie! But I'm always happy to encounter a Christopher Fernie poem.


Rain

2019-08-18
I like the insistent rhyme. It fits with the persistence of the rain! Thank you for posting this poem.


Your Face

2019-08-18
As I read this poem, I'm happy to encounter the unexpected imagery of the third-to-last stanza! It makes the poem more real, more vital.


Montreal

2019-08-18
I like this. Simple without being simplistic, plain without being dull. Evidence of an alert wit! Thank you for posting it.


Patience

2019-08-17
Thoughtful and well-constructed.


Happy St Marys Day by Ann Wood

2019-08-15
A blessed day to you, Ann! I like the phrasing of "loaded with the kindness and light of the Mother of God."


Heart damage

2019-08-15
I've been enjoying your recently posted poems a lot. Thank you so much for writing and sharing.


Abundance

2019-08-15
A beautiful summer tanka! (Somewhere in the archives, I have a winter tanka.) Thank you for posting in this winsome form.


An English journey

2019-08-15
A glorious litany of place-names!


Heroes Funeral

2019-08-15
Stately, beautiful, reverent. A perfect tribute to the soldier.


Living for today

2019-08-14
Nicely done. And certainly true!


Life

2019-08-13
Welcome to Poetbay! Thanks for posting!


More Random Creatures

2019-08-12
A hominid named Tom claps both his paws
And gives your creatures clamorous applause!


Random Creatures

2019-08-12
Wonderfully observed, witty, warm, funny --- bravissima!


Upstream

2019-08-12
Joe, this is a fine lyric, gentle but firm in its articulation, confident in its measure and pacing, an accomplishment!


A Monastic Alphabet

2019-08-11
I've revised to accentuate the youth of some of the monks! See Martin, Raphael, Vincent especially.


coming to our senses

2019-08-11
Beautifully described vignette. I cherish both halves of the "text": clear, sensitive, vivid, gentle, plain (but not too plain!) and altogether a joy to read.


ROPE OF WORDS (Adishanal Line)

2019-08-11
A beautiful metaphor. And a moving poem. This is really good stuff, Ken!


Some days

2019-08-11
Marie, hello! This is a moving, and indeed an excellent poem, articulated with care and with precision. You speak with the quiet authority of lived experience. Thank you for posting it.


Clearing stumps

2019-08-09
The subject matter reminds me so much of the poetry of Robert Frost, the rugged quatrains carrying the vigour of the speaker, still considerable!


The genesis of the poem "alice"

2019-08-09
With all best wishes for a speedy recuperation. I enjoyed both the poem and the exploration of its genesis!


the silence was tangible

2019-08-08
This poem opens up the soul. Thank you for posting it, sir!


Chinaís Wonders

2019-08-08
Priceless! I enjoyed this one immensely!


alice

2019-08-08
Such great fun!


Zen

2019-08-06
This poem is powerful in its cadenced gentleness. Bravo.


King Curlew

2019-08-05
Superlative. This reader cherishes the short lines, the resoluteness and resolvedness (sorry to be inventing words!) of the form. A tip of the hat from across the pond!