Sameen

2018-09-23
I want to know more about the rumors the stars speak

2018-09-22
A meditation that leaves a lot to think. And, as always, I enjoy your versifying.

2018-09-22
The poem seems impersonal. As a reader I witness the scene but don't see it. Perhaps some human details? Perhaps some idea of who the speaker and their companion? Perhaps explanation of a want and also a conflict which holds back that want?

Let me know what you think.

2018-09-19
I think this poem, which is already good, could use concrete details to make it great. Adjectives can ruin many a great writing. I know this more than most. Details details details make great writing. I know this better than most.

2018-09-15
I would add a "but" before the first not knowing. Your use of enjambment is masterful in this.

2018-09-15
Amazing. Imagiste!

2018-09-10
This is amazing. I wanna get stoned to this!

2018-09-10
Ashberry was a wonderful poet.

2018-09-10
The images seem all over the place. I think the poem would fare better if the images were sequential. for example, an image of a tear could lead to an image of the ocean which would lead to fishes and on and on. Do you see what I mean?

2018-09-06
I don't know about this one.

2018-08-29
Dayummmm

2018-08-22
This is amazing. Love your use of traditional forms.

2018-07-30
COOOL

2018-06-22
The poets of old aye

2018-06-22
Where's the fun in that though, eh?

2018-06-19
This is really good! The stress stretche on a bit in line two and three but I'm only nit picking.
Thank you for using Ratnapark in a poem.

Wonderful poem. I didn't notice the rhymes at first. That's what makes a great sonnet. It works seamlessly and doesn't seem forced. You've grown. I tremble before you.

2018-01-12
Amazing. You're getting better and better everyday.

2018-01-12
You are quite a craftsman too Thomas.

2018-01-12
Nice jottings.

2018-01-12
That ending is killer!

2018-01-12
Welcome

2017-12-21
Me too. Wonderful poem.

2017-12-21
Truuuuuuuuuuuuu

2017-12-11
Oh such sweet glimpses they paint an intriguing picture my god.
Especially adolescent poets drinking mountain dew?!?!?!?!?!

2017-12-11
I really like this poem. Never thought there could be a compelling poem about book spines haha. Love it

2017-12-10
I love it. I have sent the edited version on facebook. Do what thou wilt

2017-11-30
That last stanza are my fave

2017-11-29
Yeah, I guess in the festivities of christmas it is easy to forget that not everyone has a reason nor a chance to be festive

2017-11-29
Oh how delightful

2017-11-29
You're going ham on these noice.

2017-11-28
That last line ahhh

2017-11-28
Noice. Love this portrait poem

2017-11-27
SESTINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

I love this poem!!!

2017-11-27
SESTINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!

My favorite form.

2017-11-27
"She" sounds like someone I'd love to meet.

2017-11-27
Noice. All the drug metaphors are woven wonderfully.

2017-11-22
I like the poem but

"Merciless starlight mocks me with its mock." I'm kinda iffy on this line. But there's not much you can do with the -ock rhyme

2017-11-22
Damn

2017-11-21
All those decades. I love that ending

2017-11-21
Did you die?

2017-11-21
A pleasant scene indeed

2017-11-21
Lame

2017-11-21
Nice one Ken

2017-11-21
Nice one.

2017-11-20
Damn, best poem i've read in a while

2017-11-20
I loved the ending

2017-11-20
I admire your faith and this poem.

2017-11-20
Nice one

2017-11-20
Me too man. Me too.

2017-11-16
God dammit why are you so talented!!!! Ughhhhhh I'm jealous!!!