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Sameen

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The latest comments that Sameen has written.

This October Night

2018-09-23
I want to know more about the rumors the stars speak


Before

2018-09-22
A meditation that leaves a lot to think. And, as always, I enjoy your versifying.


Standing at the Crossroads

2018-09-22
The poem seems impersonal. As a reader I witness the scene but don't see it. Perhaps some human details? Perhaps some idea of who the speaker and their companion? Perhaps explanation of a want and also a conflict which holds back that want?

Let me know what you think.


A Fleeting Thought

2018-09-19
I think this poem, which is already good, could use concrete details to make it great. Adjectives can ruin many a great writing. I know this more than most. Details details details make great writing. I know this better than most.


Finally—The Rain

2018-09-15
I would add a "but" before the first not knowing. Your use of enjambment is masterful in this.


Finally—The Rain

2018-09-15
Amazing. Imagiste!


Someone Must be in Need

2018-09-10
Great as usual.


Homo alchoholis

2018-09-10
This is amazing. I wanna get stoned to this!


After John Ashbery

2018-09-10
Ashberry was a wonderful poet.


Tonight

2018-09-10
The images seem all over the place. I think the poem would fare better if the images were sequential. for example, an image of a tear could lead to an image of the ocean which would lead to fishes and on and on. Do you see what I mean?


The Trick is to Keep Looking

2018-09-06
I don't know about this one.


Love Me to the End of the World

2018-08-29
Dayummmm


Sonnet for a Lonely Masturbator

2018-08-22
This is amazing. Love your use of traditional forms.


ROSES HAVE THORNS! (inspired by a work by - Sameen)

2018-07-30
COOOL


Sonnet: “Poetic Justice”

2018-06-22
The poets of old aye


poet

2018-06-22
Where's the fun in that though, eh?


The Little Conductor

2018-06-19
This is really good! The stress stretche on a bit in line two and three but I'm only nit picking.
Thank you for using Ratnapark in a poem.

Wonderful poem. I didn't notice the rhymes at first. That's what makes a great sonnet. It works seamlessly and doesn't seem forced. You've grown. I tremble before you.


The Moon in my Facebook

2018-01-12
Amazing. You're getting better and better everyday.


Victor Howes

2018-01-12
You are quite a craftsman too Thomas.


Snow

2018-01-12
Nice jottings.


Out with the old!

2018-01-12
That ending is killer!


Tom Benson - A bio

2018-01-12
Welcome


Winter Rhyme

2017-12-21
Me too. Wonderful poem.


IT IS NOT A PROFESSINAL OTHERS NEED!

2017-12-21
Truuuuuuuuuuuuu


Glimpses

2017-12-11
Oh such sweet glimpses they paint an intriguing picture my god.
Especially adolescent poets drinking mountain dew?!?!?!?!?!


Done, and Cannot be Undone

2017-12-11
I really like this poem. Never thought there could be a compelling poem about book spines haha. Love it


The Good Posh Woman

2017-12-10
I love it. I have sent the edited version on facebook. Do what thou wilt


An Attempt

2017-11-30
That last stanza are my fave


THE LEAVES ARE FULLING!

2017-11-29
Yeah, I guess in the festivities of christmas it is easy to forget that not everyone has a reason nor a chance to be festive


After Midnight

2017-11-29
Oh how delightful


Before Dawn

2017-11-29
You're going ham on these noice.


Meisie

2017-11-28
That last line ahhh


With Age: A Pair of Cinquains

2017-11-28
Noice. Love this portrait poem


Stanzas for Practice

2017-11-27
SESTINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

I love this poem!!!


Stanzas for Practice

2017-11-27
SESTINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!

My favorite form.


You Were Lucky

2017-11-27
"She" sounds like someone I'd love to meet.


pretty boys and xanax

2017-11-27
Noice. All the drug metaphors are woven wonderfully.


You're Gone

2017-11-22
I like the poem but

"Merciless starlight mocks me with its mock." I'm kinda iffy on this line. But there's not much you can do with the -ock rhyme


I Am

2017-11-22
Damn


THE SNOW! (Acknowledgement To Sameen Work)

2017-11-21
All those decades. I love that ending


River Hawk

2017-11-21
Did you die?


Log cabin autumn reveries

2017-11-21
A pleasant scene indeed


Throne of Dreams

2017-11-21
Lame


WAY BACK THEN! (With agknowlegedmant to Helen Paquin work)

2017-11-21
Nice one Ken


Yesterday Once More

2017-11-21
Nice one.


My Mother and Me

2017-11-20
Damn, best poem i've read in a while


Half of the Morning Sun

2017-11-20
I loved the ending


Faith Through Grace

2017-11-20
I admire your faith and this poem.


2010

2017-11-20
Nice one


1989

2017-11-20
Me too man. Me too.