Rising and Setting

It's dawn,
but night time
realisation has visited,
left an imprint
that has the sun rising
behind my eyes
feeling the light
filling a space
where thoughts linger
flooded by pain,
I can choose
Sunrise or sunset,
Either way I see the colours.



Poetry by shells
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Written on 2017-08-04 at 00:33

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
So much going on in these lines that ring a bell, so to speak, in my memory. I particularly liked the effect of L3-L6, strikes an impression I can't quite describe (sorry), but it's one that makes me feel, and creates a strong sense of a moment that is in the reins of something other than the speaker's hands. Feels a bit off-mark to say I enjoyed 'cause the feelings in this are so sore, but I enjoy how well you write. Thanks.
2020-10-16


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
Dawn, with night lingering, can be a very dark time. This rings true.
2017-08-04