The Renrhyme format is a real challenge but it provides drama and drive in a poem. This is my second attempt at using it.


Vicious Wind

The fall wind blows a biting snap
It has no sense of care or woe
With leaves afly and trees bent low
We press ahead through the forest gap

Struggling hard to reach the goal
The fall winds blows its biting snap
This wind is a unplanned deadly trap
With leaves afly and trees bent low

My Horse stumbles it's breath a rasp
It has no sense of care or woe
Spur driven now it's head hung low
we press ahead through the forest gap






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Written on 2017-10-30 at 18:59

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
Well done. It is a great form and you made it work well. I am afraid that I am pretty ignorant about formal poetry structures.
2017-11-05


Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
I remember having written in this form before and it is a lot of fun. It does add drama and your images were vivid. I enjoyed it.
Ashe
2017-11-03


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Nicely done, Joe.
2017-10-30


shells
I'm impressed, I feel a sense of urgency and determination, I can visualise this, so hats off to you.
2017-10-30