Just thoughts put down in remembrance of an event last night


Rain

Rain fell last night
Unexpectantly
It’s patter on the deck
A snare riff
Or rather a staccato
Rim tap without rhythm
Anticipating a resolution
To an arhythmic beat
that never evolved




Poetry by josephus The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2018-02-05 at 15:40

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Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
... "a rhythmic beat that never evolved"
I agree with both comments on the beautiful articulation. To me rain on the boat reminds me of static on a radio and hoping the roof doesn't leak.:)
Very well done.
Ashe
2018-02-06


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
I agree with Thomas, but I wonder, was there no rhythm to boat's rocking?
2018-02-05


Thomas DeFreitas The PoetBay support member heart!
A beautifully articulated act of attention. Thanks for posting!
2018-02-05