A conductor is a person who collects fares and sells tickets on a bus. 




The Little Conductor

 

He works with all the sharpness of his art,

This little boy, shouting in skilled, shrill voice,

“Ratnapark! Ratnapark! We’ll now depart

In five minutes.” If you get on, your choice

Will be to shift and stir, find space with care.  

The boy beats on the door with tiny hands,

And screams, “Ratnapark!” with an earnest air

The jolts, the jars, he easily withstands.

The driver flouts the rules; the little thing

Complies. People get on and get off where

They like. Inside some squeeze, some stick, some cling

Each to each. Don’t step on my toes—beware!

Through passion infinite, he does his job.

Pay the bill. Say thank you. Don’t be a snob!

 

 

Bibek Adhikari 





Sonnet by Bibek
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Written on 2018-06-16 at 15:39

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Sameen
This is really good! The stress stretche on a bit in line two and three but I'm only nit picking.
Thank you for using Ratnapark in a poem.

Wonderful poem. I didn't notice the rhymes at first. That's what makes a great sonnet. It works seamlessly and doesn't seem forced. You've grown. I tremble before you.
2018-06-19


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Everything about this poem is outstanding, Bibek, the writing, the subject, your treatment of it. Great job!
2018-06-18


Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
A sonnet with vivid images and sounds that moves us to feel for the little conductor. You know, we have such children who work as conductors as you describe here in Central America and they are indeed fierce and brave. A good sonnet and a good poem.
Ashe
2018-06-17


jim The PoetBay support member heart!
This works on all levels, and ending with a touch of humor is a grace note. The sonnet form and rhymes come naturally.

I like that you are an observer. Though the poem is about the little conductor, it says something about you as well.

Well done.
2018-06-16