From last August. Revised recently.


Modelled on Fulke Greville's "Elegy for Philip Sidney." 

Third Elegy

Jen, taken from this world

so ruthlessly, so soon,
forgive this ill-sung eulogy,

hoarse-voiced and out of tune.


My halting, slipshod words

cannot convey your grace:
I weep, I sob, rending my heart,

remembering your face:


your eyes, so fierce with life,

your tongue, with wit so quick,
your noble soul compassioning

the hurt, the sad, the sick.


Last Saturday you died:

our sky was one great cloud;
hot rain pounded upon my path

from that saturate shroud.


Lavishly fell the tears

from heaven's widow-black,
but could not match this scalding flood

as I lament my lack:


the loss of your rare charm,

my fast immediate friend,
bound close in life, snatched far by death,

forever reverend.


My words falter and fail,

my voice cracks up and chokes.

such a dear gift our thoughtless God

impulsively revokes!


Always you were the one

to make me smile and laugh:
I never thought that I should write

your midday epitaph.


So desperately I wish

that this truth were not true:
each morning I must wake and walk

through a world stripped of you.

Make me strong with your strength

for the time that I have left
that I might learn to bear the pain

of heaven's senseless theft.


From now on, let me live

so bravely and so right
that when my days are spent we shall,

two glad friends, reunite.


Jen, bless me from your place,

there, on the other side
of death's dread brink, where now you live

refreshed, beatified.

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Written on 2019-03-11 at 07:52

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Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
I like this poulter's measure. The alternating line lengths keep the poem from becoming sing-songy

josephus The PoetBay support member heart!
Thomas, Iím in awe of you poetry. Within self imposed heavy structural constraints, you produce truly fine themes and voicings that are so easily read and understood! BRAVO ZULU!