Another pantoum. 

Another Lovesong


Time floats upon the softened airs,

Coffee cools and slowly thickens.

Someone has stopped the moving stairs,

Newfound love jumps and quickens.


Coffee cools and slowly thickens,

And our hands flick the cold ashes.

Newborn love jumps and quickens,

Shining in lofty red flashes.


Two drags, we flick the cold ashes,

Draw in, draw out, our feelings bare,

With eyes shining in red flashes—

Our former pain is now elsewhere.


Draw in, draw out, our feelings bare,

We slowly realize

Our inward pain has gone elsewhere—

Truth is reflected in our eyes.


We slowly realize,

As time floats upon soothing airs,

Truth glimmering in our eyes—

Has love now stopped the moving stairs?



Bibek Adhikari

Poetry by Bibek
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Written on 2019-05-07 at 13:37

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
Great stuff Bibek :)

one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
This is high quality writing, Bibek.

A singular pleasure to read. A beautiful exposition of your theme, and a deft handling of the prosodical challenge of a rhymed pantoum. Bravo, and indeed, bravissimo!

Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Well done, Bibek!

Coo & Co The PoetBay support member heart!
Another superb pantoum, Bibek. We like the subtle variations in the lines, the imagery, and the overall mood of the piece. The change of pace achieved by 'We slowly realize' is particularly masterful here :>)