For all those feeling down and need to laugh in the face of adversity. Beware this is morbid humour at it's very worst or best, depends on your disposition. :-)


Marks out of 10


When your wings are broken
and the gravity of life
forces your face into the ground
and the sky becomes a distant world
full of stillborn dreams and candy-floss clouds

When your thoughts are distorted
by the cracked mirror of your mind
and the future becomes a hollow abyss
where nothing survives
except the anguish of time

When you question every word
every smile and every feeling
and your soul is numbed to life
every thought a stagnant meaning

When the time has finally come
to gently slip away
to find the promised comfort
in that final faithless day

Always remember
i will mark you out of ten
as you fly off
the bridge of destiny
into a triple twist
and an elegant pike bend.



© Rik - 16/04/2006



Poetry by Rik The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2006-09-20 at 16:29

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liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
Love the ending

Noone I know does morbid humour
like you :-)

liz.
2006-11-01


Arti
lolol... that was good. I'm grounded for this week, and of course, I'm not in the best of moods... :)) Thanks for the laughter.
2006-10-02


Amanda K
You started by displaying dark,and gloomy images express despair,desperation and disappointment but ended in a way i didn't expect "hope". A sparkel of hope keeps us a life sometimes even if life is not better than a crab. Well-penned.
2006-09-26


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
*lol* That's soooo funny!*lol* So you are not only a poet you are a stand- up comedian as well. Laughter after the storm... So healing. ...
2006-09-20


F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
"a triple twist and an elegant pike bend" - lolol... you are cordially invited to the pierre-laporte bridge, not a long walk from here ;) but dont forget the rating cards now, you >--,o'> lolol :p

:)

*hug* xx
2006-09-20


BlueyedSoul
lol hello rik

i love your sense of humor and i am sure if i was in my deepest darkest pits of depression and you said this to me i would be laughing myself silly and the world would not seem so harsh anymore.....it is the only thing that makes me feel better sometimes.....laughter

great work!

~Blue
2006-09-20


Kathy Lockhart
sing to me! dark and delightful! If only i were that agile! : ) kathy
2006-09-20


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
hi Rik glad your back with your dry

'play in again Sam' humour nice to see the
sods havent driven you down well done on this exceptional text and I am putting in my favs well done and welcome home lololol rgds mike
2006-09-20