A four liner___ with four logical mistakes
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a sugar challenge for Nepenthes rhyme challenge



Rosita got a paper-towel clutched in her hand
while the handsome paramedics take her description of the man
who shot her through the gut so says the news on CNN
in a small supermercado in the heart of Maryland




Poetry by Lourdes
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Written on 2006-10-16 at 21:29

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Lourdes
Before anyone gets over-exited about winning here then lets go over some answers .. There are still some undetected mistakes , but since there is only one participant who got remotely close It is only fair that he gets the most sugar .
1. a paper-towel is n NOT an odd thing to be clutching , maybe she had just been to the bathroom?
2. she probably isn't interested in how handsome they are in her final moments \ She isn't interested , its the narrative voice telling us that he is handsome
3. paramedics don't take descriptions, cops do\ CORRECT !
4. it's too small a story for CNN to cover
5. how did CNN get there so quickly?\ They did because some Arabs (CNN are only concerned with Arabs) were stealing some matches which was suspicious and since Rosita was an undercover agent the CNN was informed early about this suspicious activity
6. what the hell does CNN know anyhow?\ CORRECT !
7. "so says the news on CNN" - CNN is the news\ No, they also have Larry King talk-shows
8. I suppose you find supermercados in Maryland (far north), more common in Mexico or Spain though\ Well , it says THE HEART and not far North, and yes.. they are more common in Mexico and Spain, but.. hey , they might have one in Maryland as well
9. who watches news in a supermercado?\ You tell me ..It doesn't say that they were watching the news IN the Mercado does it
2006-10-19


Lourdes
A bag of sugar goes to Ananim (Warvet , you are excused because I know its hard to think with all those bullets left in your brain sweetie, but you tried, old chap !) who shamelessly licked the price-table clean . Bravos and congratulations goes to this clever person !! now , come collect some sugar :)
2006-10-18


R.
good grief I love this poem. cleverly written.
2006-10-18


English War Veteran aged 98
They have news on CNN?
Well bugger me - I thought that they only had news on the BBC - Well I last watched TV in 1972 - so I don't really know. - Unless I go past the electrical store - but you have to lip read through the window and my wheelchair blocks the pavement. Maybe I should write a poem about my battery powered wheelchair.
Hey I saw a colour computer monitor last week in the store - maybe I should get one of those.
2006-10-17


Ananim
ok, let me stick my neck out:

1. a paper-towel is an odd thing to be clutching
2. she probably isn't interested in how handsome they are in her final moments
3. paramedics don't take descriptions, cops do
4. it's too small a story for CNN to cover
5. how did CNN get there so quickly?
6. what the hell does CNN know anyhow?
7. "so says the news on CNN" - CNN is the news
8. I suppose you find supermercados in Maryland (far north), more common in Mexico or Spain though
9. who watches news in a supermercado?

but what do I know?
2006-10-17


Lourdes
no sugar for Mike , no sugar for Nep (oh well , a couple of grains for trying )
but we are talking about LOGICAL mistakes here , guys and dolls . Logical . (A hint: Its in the narrative )
Come on folks , got a bag full of sugar just waiting for ya !!
2006-10-16


lastromantichero
smooth and very clever rhyming pattern well done young lady rgds mike
2006-10-16