YAY! I CAN WRITE AGAIN!


Leave it to the Breeze

As I walk through the forest
The dewdrops shudder as I tap the trees
It's my choice to make
And I choose to leave it to the breeze

But I must walk faster, quicker
To escape what time has set
A haze of brown and green around me
Holding me in a tightly-bound net

My heart screams with sonorous yelps
"Let go! Let go! You must leave it to the breeze!"
But I'm not ready to do that yet
For upon me the breeze shall seize

When can I be free at last?
When I think back to that tree I passed.




Sonnet by Xuxa
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Written on 2006-11-22 at 00:14

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Miranda
wow beautiful! i really enjoyed reading it.

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Mood: 5
2006-11-24


Coolaaron88
NEED TO GO BACK AND GIVE YOU A SCORE!!!

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2006-11-22


Amanda K
recognition and realization pictured thru nature. well-done.

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2006-11-22


Kathy Lockhart The PoetBay support member heart!
and the next one, and the next one until you are free of all that covers you. This one had me gasping for air. I felt the anxiety of smothering, of being overcome. You wrote this well. It had me truly involved in it!
2006-11-22


Coolaaron88
At last the duck can quack!! But its good to see you again, Evan coming out of writers block you still have got it in you. : )

~Aaron Rowe
2006-11-22


Teala
This has a mythical feel to it..I love it..the imagery is really good!
2006-11-22