inpired by KJC's poem: forgotten body, thank you Kaye for the inspiration and once again welcome back to the bay


Matrix of loneliness

 

 

Matrix of Loneliness, are you a friend or an enemy?

 

Fingerprints

footprints

on the blueprints of her body

 

Dusty fingreprints

Dusty footprints

 

Memories. . . 

A body that yearns

a hand to touch it

or

 a foot to step over it

 

No matter what

Something to verify her existence

 

Matrix of Loneliness

are you a friend or an enemy?

 

Dusty fingreprints

Dusty footprints

on the blueprints of her body

 

Dreams, illusions

of a reality

thats has become only memories

 

and she longs for a touch

something to leave a trail

on the blueprints of her body

 

to wake her up

to make her feel alive again

 

outside the window

two birds kiss

 

and she. . .

longs for someone. . .

anyone. . .

Something, to leave nothing to be desired

or

Something, to leave a bad taste in her mouth

Anything. . .

 

Matrix of Loneliness, are you a friend or an enemy?

- Leave the gate as you found it. . .

 





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Written on 2007-02-17 at 19:47

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Callisto Jean
I appreciate this poem a lot. It conveys something a lot of people I know, including me, have gone through.

I find your poem very concise about the emotions. Even though you don't state them directly, the way you've put the poem together expresses the emotions very clearly.

To me, your poem's flow is slow and almost lethargic because of the length of how you broke it down. It may sound bad or you might not have meant it in that way, but I feel that it's very effective considering the topic. It comes across as someone who's really tired and lonely.

I really, really, beyond words enjoyed this.

Cj.
2007-02-27