written in Individualtean form (form created by Individuality)


Alice Begins

sheer curtains culminate in dark colors
flower arrangements enhance tone
postpone prompt commitments
kin mourning hipocrisy shown
cold breathless body finishes furor's
cheer, sympathy absent

sent to die
with surprise stroke
crude karma wastes clemency

tyranny victims bestow counselor
deciever's brute body atones
known child abuse events
classroom rape, me and him alone
forced sexual abuse closed corridors
muffled teenage torment

went to cry
sweet mirth awoke
lifts my soul to harmony

symphony plays mind erasing malice
callous cruel demon cannot harm Alice



Poetry by aliceramone
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Written on 2007-04-03 at 02:43

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Kiran
This was just brilliant. The imagery was outstanding, and I was drawn in with every word! A very emotive poem with a positive ending which I liked. You have made this form look so easy, and I know it's not as easy as you have made it seem. Very well written. Well done with this. :-)
2007-04-03


ardent.March
Just one more comment:
your rhymes of
malice
callous
Alice
Brilliant, love those.
2007-04-03


ardent.March
This is such a mixture of emotions!
Wow, this is good, I think you are
the second best person at writing
these, besides Ian, lol. :)

went to cry
sweet mirth awoke
lift's my soul to harmony

symphony plays mind erasing malice
callous cruel demon cannot harm Alice

I like how you have really put yourself in this poem,
use of your name is excellent.
2007-04-03


Individuality
it is nice to see some appreciate the poetry i create and the form which i created.

a good piece here blending dark imagery with the light well. a positive ending which smiles with i am free :)
2007-04-03