Agony of first betrayal is as intense as the ecstasy of first love itself: Your whole world comes crumbling down…Breath chokes in your throat…only superhuman effort…Time the great healer passes…yet the scars remain…you are never the same again…


Betrayed

That night you left me
Alone,
On the hot desert sands.
Earthquake,
Thunder,
Lightening,
Raging storms;

Cracking,
Crumbling
Walls,
Shaking
the very foundations
Of my soul.

Deep gaps,
Chasms,
Schisms,
Un-breachable,
Un-broachable,
Persist,
Gaping wounds,
Oozing sores
Exist.
Even today.
Time seeps through,
Unable to
Breach the gaps,
Repair the wounds.
While
Deep within
the bowels of
My Earth-being
A hot furnace rages
Molten Lava seethes.

Ask not
Look not
Deep into my eyes
Peep not into my soul
Touch not my brow
Wet not my lips...
Let the dormant Vesuvius be.



Author: Zoya Zaidi
Aligarh (UP), India
Copyright©: Zoya Zaidi

Sketch: copy of the 'Head of a Warrior' from battle of Aghiarrei- Leonardo da Vinci by and ©: Zoya Zaidi




Poetry by Zoya Zaidi
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Written on 2005-11-18 at 14:11

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Teala
Deep, enchanting, hauntingly beautiful work, my dear Zoya. These are the rawest of emotions, spewed forth into another wonderful, original write. BRAVO!
2006-12-05


wee2souls
how did I miss this one!! this is a very deep write my friend..
the rage within I do feel all this and true it does pass and scars do remain...never are we the same but we move on the best we know how!!
wow again your expressions!!!
love ya
cindy
2006-12-05


Will
Thanks for sharing this.
You have hit on those feelings.

Masterfully written!!!!!

A Fav for sure!!!!
2006-12-04


Anshul Sharma
This is a brilliant poem in very simple words
2006-09-25


Ron. S. King
Then you understand, Dear Zoya, when I write that only a wounded heart can write such soulful words, for all those who love have empathy with the broken-hearted. Love brings sorrow, even in the happiest of times, there are moments of departure which bring sorrow...Ah, dear poetess, we poets feel it deeper than others...Be happy, in that you know both emotions...Ron.
2006-07-14


Cr4Ky
EXTREME!!

I wonder how? your`e an incredible writer dear Z.

This is beatiful!

yes i do see a beauty in this poem..

never the same again..
indeed.. life consists of these betrayals who molds your personality..

and in many cases something beatiful.
2006-03-26


UnforgivenAngel
everything you write is so brilliant,its amazing,i feel that this means so much.thankyou for recomending it to me.
2006-03-03


boy
Oh Zoya...
Thy imagery is soul touching
Im beyond pain
more into confusion
from wounds left
behind,for remembrance

I LOVE THIS!
2006-02-10


Marie
I like how every comment atop the poem seems to be a poem in itself. betrayal is a horrible thing...betrayal, for lack of a better word, sucks. and, no matter what you do it seems, it's true, the scars will always remain. they have treatments for scars these days. if only it could help emotionally.
2006-01-10


strangelady13
dahh, my jaw actually dropped while reading this. it's simply mind-blowing~ i love it lots :D:D glad you recommended me to read it!!
2005-11-24


Teala
Wow--wonderful--I have read a lot about this tragic event--you brought it even more to life--bravo!
2005-11-24


Daybreaker
This was a sad beauty. The last line comes crawling in with the beautiful connections... Good work!
2005-11-23


BlueyedSoul
A breathless and stunning work you have here Zoya. I look forward to reading more of your incredibly rich and vibrant pieces.

~BlueyedSoul
2005-11-22


blackestdaze
i'm not sure i'm up to the task of commenting on this. my heart is in such a place that this affects my being as i read it. my soul responds to the words with images. it calls up painful moments in my life almost at will. i've been the guilty, i've been the one left behind. and this reverbates in my soul, calling me to sadness, shame and contrition. it's so damn good i'm awed.
2005-11-22



I love the images you use to describe this feeling!
2005-11-20


cory Crook
your poetry is very imaginitive u give me a motivation. U can see and visualize this in a way whichever u percieve. Also i have to say that ur poetry has felling that shares. wonderfuly done.
2005-11-19


Ray
Awesome way of portraying the agony of betrayal thru the essence of Mother Nature! You are superb...getting better with every poetry that pours from your soul...dwelling and captivating our deep emotions with enough twist to enlighten and awaken our own sorrows that have been dorment due to our own selfishness...I truly admire you, Thank You.
2005-11-18



wonderful write,,The feelings you portray are so real and I think everyone feels them sometime in there life,,my hats off to you...Eddy
2005-11-18


John Ashleigh
OMG! So powerful - it made me think I was really back in my first ectasy of betrayed lust...

Read it fast - that's what I did, and it really struck me hard. 5!
2005-11-18


penfold18
I know the feeling well, the hurt the pain anger and bitterness, time heals but will never eradicate what passed.
P.S. I went to pompeii 8 weeks ago and the place simply oozies with atmospere and beauty.
2005-11-18