Let's see how powerful words can be. Tell me in your comments if I made you feel paranoid -  Alert - Look around. Tell me if you can relate to this or if you feel you're in this atmosphere. - 19 November 2005


Nightmare.

Creek

As the door swings

Open

Rusty hinges.

 

Knock

As the winds blows

In

Leaves settle.

 

Asleep

As our eyes flutter

Awake

Alert.

 

Dark

As the light switches

On

TV turns off.

 

Blink

As I sweat heaps

Of

Blood.





Poetry by John Ashleigh
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Written on 2005-11-19 at 13:33

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blackestdaze
not exactly... but, it's hard to be scared in this frame of mind. i figure that all the bad crap that could happen, mostly already did.

this is truly well written, it just wasn't enough to pull me from the place i'm already at. the bold is a nice touch.
2005-11-20


Zoya Zaidi
the climax makes me sit bolt up right...
I was dozing into a slumber,
it really woke me up! I love the undercurrent of mystery!
Well done sweet heart!
Very powerful!
(((hugs)))
xxxZoya
2005-11-19