Yes

We smell
the flowers
and touch
as limbs
entwine
so hard
now to
dissemble
as two
in one
become
but one
as river rat
swims fat
and flat
wriggling
cross
the flow
of bog brown
cadence
cast
we hold
unto each
other fast
for will
this moment
ever last
as Dodder
streams
from bog
to fog
source
to sea
upon
this summer
air doth
flee and
heron waits
and timid
wagtails bow
hello yet
surely go
as summer
turns
to winter
then
spring returns
then shall
we learn
the life
filled scenes
of quiet gleams
upon the banks
of Dodder?



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Written on 2007-06-09 at 04:08

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This is beautiful! Yes, the short lines keep the reading fast and the emotions turning. Great poem.
2014-12-07



Beautiful. The truncated lines work perfectly here.
2014-12-06


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Havetslys
FIRST of all I really liked that title, it made me believe that a very life-affirming text would follow, including its permanent flow, and I was not disappointed. Great piece!
2007-06-10


kath
and all the scentes and sounds come flowing likte the river of life asking me to great the joy in life ... keeping in mind that every second is a gem...

your poems are so full of the love of life in every way '

beautiful feelings emerge and make me happy as I read ... as this is like life strong and yet so fragile

best wishes
katherine
2007-06-10


penfold18
A very entertaining piece both in content and format.
2007-06-09


Kathy Lockhart
oh my i was taken along like a leaf in a rippling stream. This was a joy to read. It was an event!
2007-06-09


weirdzarun
Very moving piece. I really enjoyed this. The format, to me, suggest the actual flow of a river or spring described in the poem, and that is imagery undying. I can even see the small ripples and occasional rapids in the syntax. So very beautiful.
2007-06-09