so personally I think 12 syllablse and 10 syllables and 11 syllables sound basically the same... also I hope we can be friends...


When I See You Once More

What will happen when I see you once more?
Will seeing you be more than I can bear?
I hope I'll not think, "God, what was it for?"

Will I fall to my knees when I walk through the door?
I hope I can work with you being there...
What will happen when I see you once more?

What will you do? I suppose you'll ignore
The feelings you had, you used to once care...
I hope I'll not think, "God, what was it for?"

Please forgive me if I of my heart pour
The love that together we one day could share
What will happen when I see you once more?

Oh please just be kind, I need nothing more
If you even once liked me, then just be fair
I hope I'll not think, "God, what was it for?"

I don't want our friendship to be a chore
But the way that you left things made my heart tear
What will happen when I see you once more?
I hope I'll not think, "God, what was it for?"



Poetry by TubaGiant
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Written on 2008-09-12 at 04:35

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WildGoose
i like how some of the lines continue on to the next one... "What will you do? I suppose you'll ignore/The feelings you had, you used once to care..." also like the way your questions throughout the text and the ellipses you use sort of suggest a sense of desperation. quite a good villanelle.
2008-09-12