Who made us what we are? I don't know, but I find it to be an interesting topic to explore.


In the beginning.

Beyond all imagination.
The source of our creation.

One that sees every option,
the result of any action.

We became,
and broke the chain of predictability.

Made to simplify,
we reduce every issue.

We choose right or wrong,
free from the burden of seeing it all.

Did we choose life,
in a divine reality show?

A self imposed inability,
unwilling to see...

Poetry by mickeko
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Written on 2009-05-15 at 18:05

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Rob Graber
I find the simpler, sparer language of this rewrite a considerable improvement on the earlier draft. Good job on the revision, I say! Do note that line 4 needs "sees."

Powerful and challenging thoughts. Keep them coming.

Mood: 4

I enjoyed this peice of work. It made me think about the bible a lot. Keep up good works.

Language: 4
Format: 4
Overall: 4
Mood: 5