My child


On my knees I bent to see
my child buried in the rubble
I held its hand as time like sand
did not wish to trouble.

A storm of fears filled its eyes
that begged me not to leave
I stood my ground by its side
but I knew i would deceive.

Its fate was written long ago
its blood had reached the sky
Its soul was crushed by rocks of doubt
and nobody told it why.


© Rik - 04/02/2006



Poetry by Rik The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2006-02-04 at 23:20

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
i thought the first time i read this that it gave me a bit of a disturbing feeling, but not creepy sort of disturbed... it's like my heart slowed down progressively from one line to the next because the words were sinking in and reaching pretty deep emotions, and it made me terribly sad somehow... i didn't know then why exactly... i think i know why now... ...this is an excellent poem... *hugs* xx
2007-03-16


Marie
As Liz said, powerful! Maybe arrogance was the best route...I don't know. Well, anyway, I like it :)
2006-02-12


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
heartrending and a powerful write rik i applaud you for the spirit and your skill
2006-02-07


Daybreaker
this was heartbreaking.

a true read.

thanks!
2006-02-05


liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
powerful.
love it.
*BOOKMARKED*
Liz
2006-02-05