i think that the line "eternal; a tear I shed" holds much more in it than just a fractionated verse...maybe i am wrong and maybe i read more than you intended...if you meant what i think you meant then you have a brilliant poetic mind - if not, a brilliant poetic intuition :) either way, i'm glad i found this one :)

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2010-07-15

Nils Teodor
Very beautiful and wise
A glimpse of the timeless beauty
can make everyone cry
Thanks for sharing the poem
2010-07-11

Eli
I will agree with Achernar.

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2010-04-09

Achernar
A fine meditation upon one mystical moment. Well done!

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2009-10-15

Kathy Lockhart
fragile, sincere imagery makes this a sadly beautiful poem.
2009-08-19

Phyllis J. Rhodes
Lilting vision of beauty and fragility. A word painting.

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2009-08-18

Stunningly beautiful imagery here, and so sad it made me want to join you in dropping a tear into that pond too.

Good to meet your heart

Smiling at you

Tai

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2009-08-17