I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote this... but turned out pretty good/fun ^^


A dip in your soul

I admire the perseverance with which you pursue
I wake up one morning with the grass and itís dew
Back then everything was different, if only I knew...

Surrounded by crimson water
This turned out to be a slaughter
All I did was take one sip
And it sent me on a trip
I wanted to take a dip

A dip in your soul
But Iím drowning
Was this your goal?
Your counting

I cry for help as I draw my last breath
One last time I can see the grass, itís still dewy
You know Iím facing death
But you refuse do throw me a life buoy...




Poetry by Peter
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Written on 2006-03-01 at 19:59

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Kel
i LOVE the title of this poem :O ... its absolutely breathtaking,and it definitely caught my eye...the poem has an delayed, soothing characteristic about it,and i like the fact that you make it draw out ... 'a dip in your soul...' well done.
2006-06-05


Zoya Zaidi
Taht is real powerful write Peter darling, just love it!
Kind of sends shivers down my spine!
((((((hugs))))
LOVE!
xxx, Zoya
2006-03-03


Veld Cooper
Very clever 'take a dip..... in your soul'. You are a most talented writer, Peter!
2006-03-03