A Piece of Paradise

We had a piece of paradise for a while,
yet in our hearts we knew it couldn't last
mocking gods, making an inch curve into a mile

Yet in a stock of memories I will file
and know I wish to marry future, past
We had a piece of paradise for a while

I never dreamt, that words would turn hostile
I couldn't eat or tempt of hearts repast
mocking gods, making an inch curve into a mile

and then from your touch, I would revile
turn my cheek to the moon that lent its cast
we had a piece of paradise for a while

and bitter words rise in our gorge like bile
star crossed lovers, oh so miscast
mocking gods, making an inch curve into a mile

Yet in time, I will return to reminiscent smile
savour tastes and songs, hear softness not a rasp
we had a piece of paradise for a while,
mocking gods, making an inch curve into a mile




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Written on 2012-06-16 at 13:47

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NicholasG
Thank heavens none of us can lay claim to paradise... It's just such a deceptively evasive target...
Very enjoyable. Thank you.
2012-06-18


countryfog
Whether intentional or not this is a fine song lyric . . . were I a composer I'd set it to music, though it sings with a song of its own.
2012-06-17


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
Indeed. Bitter words do not feel bitter if you haven't experienced paradise for a while A delight to read and :) I still haven't decided how this poem can be read when read out loud:) especially the repeating lines:) so many different versions, tempo etc. :) so many different feelings, thoughts, experiences

but at the end, what matters most is: How what has been has become a part of your inner melody and the melody of this poem:) and what you have become after writing this poem:)

We are poetry and poetry is our mirror:) but I will end my comment here

Once again, such a lovely, emotionally evocative and thought provoking poem:) Thank you for sharing!!
2012-06-17


Rob Graber
"We had a piece of paradise for a while": a wistful line that really sticks in the mind.
2012-06-16



Sort of different style for you--sustained end-rhymes of 'ile' throughout. Gives it a strong lyric effect which comes across nicely. Seems that's mostly what we get in life--just a piece of paradise--seldom the whole pie. But I suppose if we get enough pieces we can paste them all together.

Regards,
William
2012-06-16