Equinox (haibun)

                                               EQUINOX

                                                

  

 

Now, walking alone at the edge of winter and woods, not going in but not going on, catching my breath and the first dawn light,  a few snowflakes seem not to be falling but simply appearing and settling on the trees too bare yet to hold anything like real snowfall, on a flowering crabapple that has begun to bud but not leaf, and the few flakes that do reach the path disappear as they touch it.  And then all are gone.

 

                                      the smallest twigs

                                      the brief bits of light there

                                      just at their tips

 

This is the time between seasons, the place I come to most days without thinking, and come to now to find my own place between the nearly past and the not yet present.  Though even now there is presence, a soft and tentative voice, from deeper in the woods, neither rising nor falling but sustained a few seconds, the way a last note is held by someone playing a red cedar flute, letting it go on and go back across not just distance but years.  And then silence, perhaps of an owl done with the night and settling into its solitude too.  But going on now, I see and hear it was not an owl . . .

 

                                     morning moon

                                     another egg slips

                                     from the nesting dove  





Poetry by countryfog
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Written on 2015-03-27 at 23:26

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Well, my friend, this is a pleasure to read, to experience.
The snow seems magical in its appearing and vanishing, while the flute-like voice from the woods is a delight to behold. And then, of course, we learn it's the dear dove, bridging the change of seasons from winter to spring. Please convey our best wishes to her.
Applause!
2015-03-29


shells
Captivating and serene, thank you for taking us on your journey. For me the final three lines are sublime.
2015-03-28


Nathalia
A pleasure to read.
2015-03-28



For anyone who has never lived in places where it snows, I think perhaps the image of snowflakes 'simply appearing' may be harder to visualize than it is for me, who lived the bulk of my life in Michigan and New York. Indeed, such snow does not give the impression of 'falling' at all.

It is the distinctly original and intensely observant images like this that make your poetry stand out and shine. The prose and the poetry merge and complement one another perfectly. You take stock poetic images like the moon and give them a startling freshness with your comparison to the dove's egg. Always a pleasure to read.
2015-03-28


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
this is mesmerizing. superb.
2015-03-28



I love the way you take us, the readers, on these beautiful, peaceful journeys. Such pleasures you can provide with your words! Thank you. This is lovely and much more.
~Ashe
2015-03-28


josephus The PoetBay support member heart!
These works of yours have a meditative prayer quality. I find myself drifting into them as in a mystical trance experience.
We are all indeed fortunate to have you and your writing here for us all to experience. It is good to have you back, my friend. Good indeed!
2015-03-28