Meeting In The Bedroom

Charged up
screaming in the din
waiting for nothing
I remember every word you said

Each time we meet
I can't remember
yesterday
but I can remember
that nothing was important
and everything mattered

Quite a clear picture
was our first meeting
so significant then
gleaming glasses on sunlit tables
green and gold and brown

You said nothing was important
and everything mattered
epic discussions
and then I'd meet you in the bedroom

Sliding across your body
late at night
under low lights
meeting in the bedroom
and not speaking a word
~Ashe





Poetry by Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2015-09-11 at 06:05

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Victor
Love the ending. Sometimes silence is the best way to go.
2015-10-04


Barthoromeopoet
I loved the rhythm.
2015-09-22


Thomas Perdue The PoetBay support member heart!
congratulations on getting editor's choice!

i really like the line, "I remember every word you said."
as well as the reoccurring phrase, "nothing was important and everything mattered." i really like the dual nature of that second one. very nicely written!

i like it.

- thomas
2015-09-19


Editorial Team The PoetBay support member heart!
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2015-09-17


josephus The PoetBay support member heart!
This is very well written Ashe. I differ from everyone on interpretation a bit though. Your first stanza seems to speak to frustration and anger. The second stanza elaborates on the first. The third speaks to a promise of a more expansive relationship. The forth elaborates on that promise further until the last poignant line. The last stanza seems to be the culmination but your last line drives home the point that there is, frustratingly, nothing else... "Not speaking a word"
2015-09-12


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
Very powerful. It speaks of strong willed people with fierce opinions and deep silent passion. I love the way you draw the reader into the situation :)
2015-09-12


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
This is great, Ashe. It sounded very familiar to me, as if you'd been there when all of it happened.
2015-09-11


Ivan R
So beautiful. It is a quite sophisticated way of speaking about really, just immense tenderness between two lovers. Awesome.
2015-09-11


countryfog
A sweet and loving remembering . . . what sets this apart, as Pony commented, is the not being judgmental, the recalling of those few and unforgettable times when we were simply and completely in the moment, when "nothing [else] was important and everything mattered." One of your best Ashe.
2015-09-11


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
a strong devoid of judgment.
2015-09-11


KYREUS of Sweden
right on
spot on
2015-09-11