for a distant friend




Venus

 

Even the sliver is gone, leaving

Itself and a trail of night sky behind.

It has been a week of dancing, 

Shoes kicked off, ties loosened,

Coats hung over chair-backs, dresses

Clinging to overheated bodies,

Dancers circling, coming together,

Parting, twirls and dips and dirty dancing,

Waltzes and tangos, Boney Maroney

And "play that funky music white boy,"

All week they danced, until, last night

They dropped; no, the moon dropped,

Once full, now, not even a shadow,

While Venus dances on and on.

 





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Written on 2015-12-10 at 05:39

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
I read this a few times in order to work out exactly why it was so good. I think it is the reference to the moon, Venus and the night sky. It gives a feeling of the gods partying on Olympus. I do not normally like to over-analyze things but I could not resist. Wonderful :)
2015-12-13



I agree with Lawrence. This is a nice poem.
2015-12-12


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
What a strange image. What a strange poem. I like it. Nothing like that ever happens in my neighborhood.
2015-12-10


Elle The PoetBay support member heart!
How lovely and descriptive, a stellar dance in a midnight sky :-)

Elle x
2015-12-10


Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
You have really turned the silver lining into gold! My body is moving and dancing in place as I read this poem! You make your words come alive. Thanks.
Ashe
2015-12-10


Ashe The PoetBay support member heart!
You have really turned the silver lining into gold! My body is moving and dancing in place as I read this poem! You make your words come alive. Thanks.
Ashe
2015-12-10



Who's Venus? Just kidding ;)

A night of revelry and dancing, expressed poetically. Enjoyed.
2015-12-10



i really enjoyed the way you wrote this Venus, it's all the way profound, kind of the same of a writer....good one
2015-12-10