Purple Puddles
It started of very nicely. Very Creative.
But the end could use some reworking...
Just my opinion.

Language: 5
Format: 4
Mood: 5
Overall: 4
2011-01-30

Stark, vivid image of "life dripping down on me." Pensive mood-piece, brutally honest and intimate. I also like the lines about the melody of the passing day being too loud.

Language: 4
Format: 4
Mood: 5
Overall: 4
2009-03-04

ceciliaviola
Spot on, just how I felt today

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2006-12-12

Zoya Zaidi
I can feel the pain here
And I do agree, that when
life comes 'dripping down on you',
it is a great sense of futility,
of hope, of aspirations,
Of dreams that never were- never would be...
There are days like that, and they have to be...
But life has its candle flickering deep inside of thee,
And one day it will come to life and fill your whole being,
Till then hang on my friend, -just be...
(((Hugs for this poignant post, Rik!)))
Sigh!
*Bookmarked*
Love, Zoya

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2006-12-10

Saga
Everyone wants to be everything and can barely be who they are inside!!!

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2006-12-10

lastromantichero
Rik this is a masterpiece of thewwritten word I will book mark this

straight away well done and its evocative nature is just the way I have been feeling dealing with demons so i relate well done rgds mike

Language: 5
Format: 5
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2006-12-10

Teala
This is very vibrant and colourful..I love it! Great job!

Language: 4
Format: 4
Mood: 5
Overall: 5
2006-12-10

Kathy Lockhart
I know those days. This speaks volumns to me. The images and feelings your words create in me are intense and deeply penetrating.
2006-12-10

Rob Graber
Angry-smelling day... cool concept, vivid images enhanced by sense-mixing.
2006-12-10