night soul woman
Wow! I really like this one!
Nice rhythm!*applause*
and *bookmarked*of course:)
Well written!
2008-03-22

yoonoos peerbocus
the animal imagery depicts the storm blowing inside and gives all the emotional touch required to bring home the message
2007-03-28

nature
cool
i liked it
2007-03-26

F.i.in.e Moods
oo a dark one... the mention of lizards and creepy crawly things really sets a specific mood to this... the type of place you don't want to find yourself in anyway lol very vivid what comes to mind as a picture of the scenery... the words create a sort of damp, sombre, kind of bottom of the well in some deep cavern hidden somewhere feel hehe... sort of like one of the Indiana Jones episodes, remember? hehe ;) well, definitely not a bright sunny day spent in a rose garden anyway lol ;) bookmarked :) *hugs* xx
2007-03-26

Autie
baffling interesting piece I must re-read to grasp fully, but I like,... no love the crawlers in this piece, i love insects and creeping things.

Great job!

Autie
2007-03-24

kath
thank you ...what a nice gesture :)

and I so like your new ending as the devil only excists in the mind ... it is a concept you can challenge and win ...

loved your poem ...
kath
2007-03-24

liz munro
I love your opening
two lines.....
"Rasping grating
lizards tongue"

Really gives goosebumps
Dark but I like the imagery
I don't know what tic tac toe is though

BOOKMARKED AS FAVE

L.
2007-03-24

kath
dark and still rich of light are these words to me.. because they flow and jump on the surface wanting to be free .....

"vultures chewing
on the days salty grit
old friends whisper
take the knife
pierce the envelope
of the stale dank night
choke on bile
as life drowns in
Tic Tac Toe
you can never win."

these lines jumped at me ... they carry a lot ... but I do not belive in the last line ... I do belive we can win :)

well done
best wishes
kath
2007-03-24