Jamsbo Rockda
Oh and I forgot write "all your life, you were only waiting for this moment to arrive"
2016-07-14

Jamsbo Rockda
This is wonderful. I see it as a homage to the history of man.
You write so eloquently.
2016-07-14

Kathy Lockhart
Each stroke of pen or type of key is equivalent to paint on canvas. I'm seeing images, moods flowing and floating in my mind. Amazing poetry!
2016-07-11

Katarina Wikholm
Lol I had never heard of Wallace Stevens, now he's on my tbr pile.
The first two lines of the second stanza need polishing. They contain the sentiment and the correct image but the rhythm is still off. The birds and the gravel echo my related poems and the blackbird is both a strong renowned songbird here, known for mourning in the night. But it's also a nod and a wink to the Beatles
2016-07-10

one trick pony
echoes of wallace stevens in your poem.

the connection between what lies below and "free" is true, you made a hard concept clear.

i'll bookmark it to make sure i remember that there is a difference between obscure and subtle. this is the latter.
2016-07-10