Tom and Liz's Challenge of a Sensual Haiku

melding bodies breathe
blood rushes, pulses and throbs
then silent they sleep




Poetry by Phyllis J. Rhodes
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Written on 2007-01-15 at 19:17

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Kathy Lockhart
the sleep of the satisfied. ah lovely
2007-01-15


Rob Graber
PPS: While I'm being the eagle-eyed proofreader: An extra space has snuck into your title: "Liz's" rather than "Liz' s...
2007-01-15


Rob Graber
PS: The title needs "Sensual."
2007-01-15


Rob Graber
Nice contribution, PJ! The third line is so fine for this challenge. What happier ending? ;-,?
2007-01-15