Voices around (To Poet bay on line)
I've found in my poems the road to fly awayFrom where I'd tried meeting me and you
I've found myself in me
Letting behind my dark yesterday
Now I've seen life more living with you
My poems have lighted my life, my soul and me.
Now I can hear some voices around
Through the rhymes of my poems, my own sound
And I am getting stronger
I am getting smarter
Now I am strong, but I am not a fighter.
(I thank those poets on line
Your words make me be fine
Your comments make my soul shine...)
(Hello, Poet bay on line ....Your name is Michael G
Your name is Chris McInnes
Your name is Miro
Your name is Tai Chi Italy
Your name is Rob Graber
Your name is Myleena
Your name is Collo
Your name is Janine>K)
(Janine>K have written a comment on your text Being OK.
Ouch...this hurts, I'm sure I don't have to tell you that, cause you articulated it so well in this poem, brilliant poem, it had my attention right from the start... great
Edgar if this is real, I would like to advise you that you should love your mother, respect her...I know it is easier said then done...but she is still your mom... maybe she just need love and caring.. Hopefully she will return it.... Hopefully (sorry, I don't want to be to forward) worth a try tough)
(Rob Graber has written a comment on your text Understand.
This conveys the sentiment rather well, but could use more focus--possibly, for example, by repetition of the especially fine line, "Life will shine without you." (That sounds like a great title for another poem, shorter and more fucused perhaps?)
Through my poems I've found truth between myself and me
I've gotten friends on line; it is what I can see
Now I know what I gotta do
It's all up to me, to make dreams come true
You've read my poems and you are part of me
Gotta take one more chance
And you will know this thankful romance...
Between my stanzas and me...
(Tai Chi Italy have written a comment on your text That doesn't make my sense.
Sounds like a perfect match Edgar, you just have to be close enough to strike each other, and your nights and days will ignite imo. Lovely work, a song in my ears....Smiling at you, Tai)
(Myleena have written a comment on your text Being OK.
Oh God, it's been awhile since a poem has made me feel so intense of emotions. Awesome, wonderful, beautiful, touching, truthful, expressive and much much more. I feel your pain, I truely enjoyed reading your poem. Great way to release also by the way. I also can relate. All I can say reguarding that is I've learned to live life for me and not my mom!!!)
Now loneliness is part of my past
I've gotten poet friends not to be the last
Now I'm feeling like a bird to fly so high
Painting with stars my sky
You are my new inspiration
The best of the best to write
Thank you for letting me see the light.
Poetry by Edgar John Jackson
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Written on 2007-02-17 at 15:36
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