as morning






remembering joy
the light sense in our hearts
resting among rusty armour

promises broken
shoulders tight
as words seek hurt

wind singing within
a ruptured pain
beneath tears of sorrow

so lie still once more
as morning heals the night



Poetry by kath
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Written on 2007-04-17 at 22:15

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Peter Humphreys
I like particularly the symmetry by which your opening title is reflected in the fine last stanza, "so lie still once more as morning heals the night". Life and day/night are circled beautifully, if with sad reflection.
2007-04-17


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
another masterly text from you pen and well done katherine

on this stanza

promises broken
shoulders tight
as words seek hurt

rgds Michael
2007-04-17


Rob Graber
Sad, strong, and fragile all at once... quite wonderful. Line 2 appears to need "light," line 10, "lie" if you want the reflexive meaning 'recline' rather than the transitive meaning 'place'...
2007-04-17