written on nov. 17.05


who am i?

who am i?
what have i become?

i am everything i hate
i am everything i wished never to be

what happened?
what went wrong?

oh, that's right.
you came along.



Poetry by strangelady13
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Written on 2005-11-20 at 20:11

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liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
this is so true for me except the last line is
'oh that's right money came along'
Liz.
2006-03-01


BlueyedSoul
I know your sentiment all to well. You describe what we all feel when someone hurts us and takes away our pride...very good write.

~BlueyedSoul
2005-11-22


amber buttrum
that is really awesome. you are so talented. you should read my texts.i give it a 5.
2005-11-22


John Ashleigh The PoetBay support member heart!
A good curiosity, a good poem, although maybe a small alteration?

'...oh...that's right.' - oh, that's right.

I think using the comma has more effect. :)

Good.
2005-11-21


QuiZZer
Really nice, get's the point across.
2005-11-21


Zoya Zaidi
Oh!
What a lovely piece!
I just love the ending:

"...oh...that's right.
you came along."

This is art!

Stargelady13!

(((HUGS))

xxx, love, Zoya
2005-11-21


blackestdaze
oh my, that's just incredible writing... --no words!!--
2005-11-21


Nathalia
Strong poem, this one. Goes right to my heart.
2005-11-20