Rob Graber
PS: Two other things: First, the break between lines 3 and 4 is definitely interesting, but no doubt deserves more thought than I gave it. Is there a better break? Second, it might be good to have a space before the final line... I am undecided... (Is not such fussing the essence of writing poetry?! :-,?)
2008-11-23

Rob Graber
I liked it a lot before;
Now I like it even more...

Bookmarked!
2008-11-23

Rob Graber
PS: Might not "Translucency" make a better title? Just another thought.
2008-11-23

Rob Graber
I like this!

I am not partial to special fonts, even italics; and I can't help reading in breaks along these lines (poor pun?):

Silent thoughts come forth
And in the sea of ignorance they fall.
Naive illusionists master the essence
Paradigm of withered flowers,
Mend broken spells,
And savor bleeding hearts.
How do I know this?

For me, the language of this is so strongly poetic, it seems to deserve being set as a poem.

IMHO--Great write, in any case!
2008-11-23