I am not a rhyming slave! :D My first attempt to rhyme so you will be the judge. If it is right or not. Otherwise enjoy my poem;)




How could you forget?(Rubaiyat Challenge?)




How can I make my farewell tear
to become something more than a naive fear?
I wish you could see what you mean to me.
Think if we could visit the coast of Tangier . . .

Outside, still away from you, snowflakes dance
The hidden sun laughs and you are in trance
Love's daze . . . What a maze! A cat's cradle it has become!
Love at first sight . . . we lost ourselves in advance

The forgotten dream of spring lives on
Underneath the frozen ground flowers move on
slowly grow,anticipating to spread their scent on the wind
The reality of winter still lingers on . . .






Poetry by night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2008-12-13 at 14:17

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normalil
I enjoyed this, (being a confirmed rhymer!) It didn't seem too contrived, in fact it flowed in parts and conjoured up lovely images, so well done!
2008-12-14


Dan Cederholm
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Verry good (gummisnodd) as a
JoJo . . . the words goes on and
on . . .

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2008-12-13