I honestly don't know what I think of this one... I mean it's okay, but I think the rhyming's a little rough...


Death by Sharpened Knife

She was always happy
and fun to be around
Whenever you even saw her
There was no sadness to be found

But on the inside she was breaking
slowly piece by piece
She was drowning in her sorrow
the pain would never cease

Finally, she couldn't take it
and sought to end her life
And suddenly she was gone
Death by sharpened knife

This was not expected
by anyone she knew
So when you decide on death
think of the loved ones you'd leave too...







Words by IronicBanana
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Written on 2006-02-03 at 21:33

Tags Knife  Suicide  Sad 

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amy-leigh
thank u for this poem
its amazin its like me
i always dont feel welcome
into my life
i have once grabbed a knife
an didnt thk bout th rest
i wanted to end my life
but now i know better

thank you for helpin me
2006-04-05


Marie
Wow. It's reminds me of me...kind of. When I was cutting, I was always happy on the outside in public. But later, alone, I was depressed. I wouldn't have commited suicide, but still. I don't cut anymore though.
People do need to think of the one they leave behind :)
2006-02-08


Angie
oh how very sad... people dont often think of those they would leave behind.... good write ~angie~
2006-02-04


liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
this reminds me of Celtic Boy's poetry on the subject.
You are fast to becoming another of mt fave poets.
well written with a nice flow.
liz.
2006-02-04


PoeticProcrastination
This is a beautiful continuation of the current theme of suicide and its aftermath. Lovely write, Banana!!
2006-02-03