Not Even Halfway there

Tear stained pillow, haunted by your memory
This thing called love is now my enemy
To see your name carved in stone was worse then death
They say time heals all wounds but I won't hold my breath
I just wish I could forget you because my life is a mess
It's like going to war with no bullet proof vest
Because this pain is killing me, all I do is mope
There's no drug that can help, without you I can't cope
I'm trying to move on but I still see your face
Awake or asleep your right here in my space
Invading my thoughts, you're like blood in my veins
Ands its cool I don't mind, but is this even seine?
To wake up and talk to someone that's gone
To live everyday just because I was born
Suicide crossed my mind but that would be a sin
Wish I can Iet go or just let it burn
It's excruciating, to have happiness replaced with pain
To be tanned and sun kissed and become pale from rain
I've tried talking, took up a new hobby
Kept busy, writing a new story
But I'm not even halfway there




Poetry by nature
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Written on 2010-05-06 at 13:55

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nature
none taken and thank you!
2010-05-06


Wangdi Gyalpo
Dear,

Good work. I could feel the pain, as I went through each line. The feelings expressed is utterly authentic and painful. I liked the rhyming and optimisim of yours although it lay beneath the menlancholic note of yours "Suicide crossed my mind but that would be a sin".

Keep on pouring your feelings mingled with invincible words to create great work of art like this poem. Best of luck, and God bless you.

Small note:

There are some errors that I presumed are typographical error. Such as, in third line it should be THAN not THEN. In 16th line LET has been typed as IET. There are some other punctuation errors as well. Please do check it and rectify it. I hope, I have not offended you by pointing out your errors. I don't want the beauty of your work to be marred by some silly typographical errors.
2010-05-06