Last attempt at formatting this


A Quickie


I ordered love,
baked and placed
in a paperbag.
It was still warm
as I ate,
I flicked a flake
of crumb;
love tastes of
vanille and almonds,
and should satisfy
'till noon.




Poetry by Elle The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2010-06-11 at 18:52

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actually i must lack of something, i think i don't understand this poem...regarding Jenk's comment besides...
2010-06-18


Thomas Perdue The PoetBay support member heart!
I like the sound and rhythm of this one, especially the "I flicked a flake" line. Nicely written! :-)
2010-06-14


jenks The PoetBay support member heart!
gosh you must go to bed early !
this does not need more work...
as you know i appreciate clarity :)
2010-06-12


shells
You got it right, very enviromentally friendly paper bags, things ain't what they used to be, seriously though, a lovely piece full of the warmth of love.
2010-06-12