seretonin

If i look inside your mind
What things will i find
Will i find that your kind
Or that your anger is a washing tide
Will it make me run and hide

Are you only pretty on the outside?



Poetry by The Metallica Warrior
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Written on 2010-09-08 at 10:42

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jenks The PoetBay support member heart!
the first glimpse!
go find out :)

as a great fan of words your voice is concise and clear which always pleases me as it is so easy to over do it.

i think you could improve it by using some capitals and usual forms...of course thats up to you :)

i can see potential here...and a clever idea about life...all in all a good write.

Language: 4
Format: 3
Mood: 4
Overall: 4
2010-09-09