Vanilla

Conformity forming me
Cutting me in thin air, cutting nice littles cubicles and nice little squares
Squish, squash squandered
Well I say no longer
I'm Quetzalcoatl, dancing on a lake of melted beer bottles
With my nose in boiling water, my breathing's endangered

My heart's got three chambers
One for Monday, one for Tuesday, and one for sleeping until Sunday
Now show me your cubicles, and show me your squares
Show me your living pulsating chambers so that we can compare
Put down the fighting and fit right in
And we'll say no longer

A soft vanilla sky lets me know that my end is creamy
And that there are a hundred oaks out there, surrounded by dreamy dawn
A hundred organic time machines for us to carve our names upon
And so I tag along
I hope you'll take this the right way

I want to carve our names in bark and let it develop over ages
Develop out of cages and off of these pages
Into that creamy vanilla above
On the wings of some long forgotten Mexican sun god





Poetry by lou bergs
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Written on 2005-07-21 at 01:23

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Rik The PoetBay support member heart!
Great imagery and some fantastic lines. You certainly have a talent. Really enjoyed the read.
2006-03-30


Lisa Zaran
hey Lou.

There are lines in here that literally jar the reader. Like: dancing on a lake of melted beer bottles. And: Show me you living pulsating chambers so that we can compare.

There are other aspects I couldn't understand but so what? I tend to write emotionally and a lot of readers don't get my own poetry.

You've certainly got a knack for it though.

lisa
2005-07-26


R.K.Singh
Nice. I assure you I have taken your poem the right way. Keep it up.
R K
2005-07-22


StillHoppin The PoetBay support member heart!
quetzalcoatl is not forgotten, he's quite the guardian force (GF) in final fantasy 8 :P lololololol not sure if you're familiar, it is a role playing game for playstation :)

your lines dance with creativity, with sounds exploding off of sounds, another well written one :)
2005-07-21