Christin Brennan
This piece falls short of giving enough information. I'm not saying I'd like it spelled out, but w/o any clue as to why you have all the time in the world (which's a pretty big cliche you start it off with) for friends & love (which to most people is welcome at any time, not something they could care less about). so that part automatically becomes just a random statement w/ no rhyme or reason behind, but most importantly no incentive to why it's signifigant to your reader.
Then we have a vague personal detail from you about something? preventing you from living now, which is what you obviously want to do w/ your time & seem frustrated about it. This info is just that, info...we don't know what's preventing you from living, what defines living, cause that's a pretty vague aspiration, & finally why you are accussing us, or someone you address as 'you' in italics of doing this living thing successfully??? clarity & more details are desparately needed in this piece.
I'm not too keen on your line breaks either; most of them break up the flow.

regards,
christin

Language: 4
Format: 3
Mood: 3
Overall: 2
2011-07-23