This activity is open to all members of PoetBay:) The original post - know how post can be found here: 30/01 

 




Our never ending poem(revised & would you like to join us?:)



Our never ending poem began yesterday. It will be, for the time being and until further notice interconnected with the poetic form of the current writing challenge. Today and until the 13/02 the poetic form that can be used while contributing in our never ending poem is: Modern Pantoum 


Each will get to write 2 lines(the one that is going to be repeated from the next person(poetbayer) and one unique one. 

Clarification: Each will get to write 2 lines every 24 hours or until someone else adds 2 more lines to our never ending poem. If you don't understand why, please let us know on the comment section below and we(the editorial team or a fellow poetbayer) will try to give you a better explanation.

Also, our never ending poem is Art in the making and will always be Art in the making. Fine tuning is a central part of the now via the never ending poem shared writing process. If you feel that something needs to change feel free to let us know and we will do our best to make it work;) A one for all all for one kind of moment:) 

For the time being the 'rules'(textId=82915) - writing instructions are to be perceived as guidelines that aim to facilitate y-our writing process and the interaction of your contribution with the already present contributions and the future contributions. The rules - guidelines function also as proactive failure management(failure of our mini project called Our never ending poem).

As it became apparent yesterday a more transparent writing process(optional)is heartwarming  and could be beneficial, inspirational perhaps give a glimpse of what it means to be a part of a writing group to a new or old visitor of poetbay.com and perhaps one of our not as active poetbayers and would also eliminate the silent distance between us. (If you don't agree with this paragraph SPEAK UP make you voice heard:D)

What is meant by 'more transparent writing process' ?

If you scroll down to end of this post you will get the chance to see how the present contributors of our never ending poem shared a part of their initial reaction to the already written verse or of their own writing process, read it yourself and draw your own conclusions.

*(*  Our never ending poem



 

Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy.

Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Nearby, children gathered round the lake.

• It's your turn now! (Will it be you? Yes you.)

- Feel also free to help us edit it

 

 

 

~ ¤ ~ The original


YAY I'll start

"Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy"

~L.~ by Liz Munro

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Uh oh Liz:D but ok:

"Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy"  
by night soul woman

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Ok, I see we have to have a sense of humor about this. My contribution isn't set in stone, believe me. Please edit! Change! Fix! Please do!

Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy.

Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Nearby, children gathered round the lake.
She descried the wooden duck decoy
By the water’s edge a solitary drake.
by jim

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 





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Written on 2012-01-31 at 14:52

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Hans Bump
Sorry, I did have a submission to add but even after reading the submissions and the comments , I'm now completely confused.
2012-02-02


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
:) it's a process I know and perhaps the next poetic form=next writing challenge might make it possible to change how many lines each can write.

Actually, the never ending kind of poem I have in mind has as a rule to write only One line each but because of the special poetic form = modern pantoum. Each of of us get to repeat one line and write one unique line:) that's why:)

you can read it about it here: textId=82900

"First potential problem solved. Which problem? Well:) In our never ending poem each one of us will contribute with One line but because of the form of a modern Pantoum. Each will get to write 2 lines(the one that is going to be repeated from the next person(poetbayer) and one unique one, meaning:

First Stanza: One of us: Line 1&2 (are yours) One of us: Line 3(is yours)+ Line 4(it will be nice and melodic if it rhymes with line 2)

Second stanza: One of us: Line 1 (repeat line 2 of the first stanza) + line (2 is yours)+ One of us: Line 3 (repeat line 4 of the first stanza) and line 4 (is yours)"
2012-01-31



I added two lines to the second stanza, the second and fourth. Two lines (first and third) were taken from the first stanza.

It's a process, we'll get it right after a while.
jim
2012-01-31


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
Hi countryfog, in order to be fair: "Each will get to write 2 lines every 24 hours or until someone else adds 2 more lines to our never ending poem"

Also, jim (As I, myself usually do in a co-write) allowed anyone to edit what needs to be edited and this is what happen. He has written 4 lines instead of two and that is why the rules became more specific.

But I also *just* understood something. It was the first time it happen and it happen before the clarification so yes you are right. Let's keep jim's 4 line and yours. But next time.

Please write only two lines and wait 24 hours or until someone else adds 2 more lines. Then you don't have to wait 24 hours you can contribute again(2 lines).

Here comes our never ending poem & the next person will have to repeat line 2 of the last stanza as line 1 and write one more line

The person after that will have to repeat line 4 of the last stanza as line and write one more line

and then we can repeat the same procedure.

That is how I understand it, do you agree countryfog?

~¤ ~
Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy.

Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Nearby, children gathered round the lake.
She descried the wooden duck decoy
By the water's edge a solitary drake.

Nearby children gathered 'round the lake,
Casting crusts on the water to entice
By the water's edge a solitary drake
Caught in ripples among the drift ice.
2012-01-31


countryfog
I seem to not understand the process, but I'm following on from Jim.

Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy.

Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Nearby, children gathered round the lake.
She descried the wooden duck decoy
By the water's edge a solitary drake.

Nearby children gathered 'round the lake,
Casting crusts on the water to entice
By the water's edge a solitary drake
Caught in ripples among the drift ice.
2012-01-31


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
Hm what a lovely scene jim . . . well, here it goes:

"While the wind dancingly touched the last autumn leaf"

Quaint the loud woman's silent sobs,
Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Oh my dear ones don't you know?
She descried the wooden duck decoy.

Refreshing to see her quiet joy.
Nearby, children gathered round the lake.
She descried the wooden duck decoy
While the wind dancingly touched the last autumn leaf
2012-01-31