Seeking Sanctuary (haibun)

                                                                          

  

The pasture empty now almost five years, the barn where a storm peeled back part of the tin roof, late March and the dusting of a last brief snow settling the dust of hay mold and stall straw.

 

                                 swallows swoop and swerve

                                 reaching for each farther curve

                                 until they are gone

 

Packing this and not that, finally choosing, leaving behind what has already been lost.

 

                                   forgetting the dream

                                   but all morning the old birch

                                   keeping last night's moon

 

A last walk and a solitary goose circles above, something not often seen, being essentially sociable creatures, and voluble, part of a common community that seems never settled but always arriving and leaving, each saying its part of the passage. 

 

                                    between two seasons

                                    one goose coming and going

                                    neither here nor there

 

I feel it my avatar and some part of my heritage; that there is something that, living long enough, separates us from our kind, though we still keep saying what we seek, listening for some answer in the distance that perhaps will not come again.

 

Whatever is to come now is there . . .

 

                                   near the horizon

                                   free of ground and gravity

                                   far pines in the mist





Poetry by countryfog
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Written on 2015-01-09 at 18:06

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2015-01-11



Your method of prose and haiku is so effective in your hands. I can see the old barn, the nostalgia, the old sanctuary. Beautiful!
~Ashe
2015-01-10


Rob Graber
A gentle yearning and melancholy in an interesting and attractive structure. Impressive work!
2015-01-09



Your intense study and work with haiku is definitely paying off. Not a single one of these sounds awkward or forced and each do what haiku is designed to: make us think about nature differently and with more intensity. I've found that the thing about haiku is that it is never quite right, not quite finished, until something about it just TELLS you that it's finished. I've written quite a few, but the majority of them I've written are, in the long run, not finished. One just KNOWS they are finished or not.

I especially like the one about the moon and the birch. It could be interpreted that the moon is still faintly visible through the branches of the tree or that some of the silvery tints of the moon are reminiscent in the silver-white colors of the trunk and branches of the tree.
2015-01-09