I don't know what to call this, it's not really

a haibun . . . perhaps


A Day In The Life He Chose

 

He awakens again from the old dream

of being lost in a familiar place

 

          quiet dawn

          under the pines

          cicada husks

 

missing little from before in his solitude

except the times of touching and being touched

 

          cottonwood dew drops

          on the pond's stillness

          each separate ripple

 

and the places he went when he was younger

 

          stopping at the footbridge

          the stones going on

          holding on to the deep air

 

though in some way fewer memories matter now

 

          brief midday sun

          the shape of the frog fading

          from the stream stone

 

and not all that stay would he choose to keep

 

          darkening storm

          lighting an old candle

          the flame of a moth

 

not the long past nor brief future

but what comes into each  present moment

 

          rain on leaf tips

          the hawk's motionless wings

          equal to the air

 

and his presence in them

 

          telling time now

          by the shapes of shadows

          and sounds of the cicadas

 

 

 part of a different dream now

 

          dusk's last light

          the last geese and the horizon

          settling on the pond





Poetry by countryfog
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Written on 2015-08-15 at 15:18

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
What a wonderful piece. It is like memories almost in prayer form. How great it would be to remember these things in litany. His consecration with nature.
2015-08-20



It sort of reminds me of prayer beads or the Christian rosary with a large bead followed by small bead, etc. It's unique and the form fits you well.

All the haiku are superlative, but I like the last one best. I think of the geese settling gently on the pond as the sun does likewise--all things connected, just as each stanza complements the others. A scene of peace.
2015-08-16


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
This is a very interesting poem, Fog, sort of a duet. The longer lines are detached, abstract thoughts. The shorter lines are the intrusions provided by the senses.
2015-08-16



Whatever it might be called, it is not only a beautiful poem, but it is a style that is unique and very expressive, as you have shown with your poem. I always enjoy your picturesque poems, so full of images of nature; and this is no exception.
Ashe
2015-08-15