Loneliness

Decayed old bark of a tree
Hollow and empty crystal vase
Broken down ruins of a home that once was

Standing on the edge of life
Transparent in the midst of pleasant chaos
Unseen, unfelt

A bitter pill
A heavy, slow ache

Loneliness....the sums of its parts
The sum of its parts.......loneliness



Words by karmic justice
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Written on 2015-08-22 at 07:17

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
This is a great piece. I love to look at old things and imagine the memories they may hold. And yes the sum of their parts now add up to loneliness.
2015-08-26


Ivan R
It may seem like a pessimistic way of seeing the world, that this poem shows, but the underlying nature of this poem, as I see it, is a Zen kind of mind of the soul*
2015-08-22



Has a kind of Taoist or Far Eastern tone to it. Your opening images of three tangible images representing loneliness are excellent.
2015-08-22



Your images say it so well. Beautiful!
Ashe
2015-08-22


Elle The PoetBay support member heart!
Summed up well and succinctly, lovely writing

Elle :-)
2015-08-22