If you can help me edit this one I will truly appreciate your help. I am not sure if I need to use another word instead of which. Thank you in advance  : )




Interpreting the signs



In order to avoid talking to an asshole
You should learn to interpret the signs.
Assholes usually whistle in the dark (fart)
Before they say something heavy which
Settles within you.








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Written on 2015-08-27 at 18:38

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
It works well. But perhaps I would have made it "which unsettles within you" :)
2015-09-01


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
"Which" works, probably better than any alternative.
2015-08-27


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
well, miss earthy night soul woman, i might have ended the poem on line three.

the rest is implied. what is also implied is maleness. that would be too narrowly focused.
2015-08-27