i wrote this, when i lost the girl...


concept...

grateful, for insinuated prospect,
an offering of sublime potential,
from God's own void of conscience
is given perspective, coupled understanding,
promising logic, and intuition of
eventual benefit, besides a lasting effect...
a treasure to conceive, surely,
but to intend to never know.
such is the the sincerity of Him who
provides "concept", and,
clear are the reasons
why man shall forever adhere.
and while rage is the reaction of choice,
usually in preferable contrast of patience,
premises are being continuously denied
in lieu of exemplified reasoning...

the demise of concept, that is...



Poetry by tony
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Written on 2006-07-03 at 14:40

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lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
Toni with the best will in the world
and probably because i am a little dim witted i could not understand this poem
it is no doubt an exemplary use of the English language and the rythm of the poem the line structure is well put together but as you pointed out in my last offering i am an uninspired poet thus this went above my head.

Normally if i wanted to tell a girl that ditched me i still loved her
i would come right out with it

'I am still in love with you'

hey but for the clever use of imagery i applaud you

for linr structure deep felt meaning i give it a very good text
sorry man
rgds mike
2006-07-03


Kathy Lockhart
wow...this makes lots of sense to me. The way we twist our thoughts and bend our minds trying to figure out the reasons of why things happen as they do.

"and while rage is the reaction of choice,
usually in preferable contrast of patience,
premises are being continuously denied
in lieu of exemplified reasoning..."

Love these lines. So much truth there. Kathy
2006-07-03